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Reviewed By: Youkai Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2004 23:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I liked the first version, but I LOVE this version. The interactions between the characters has become much more intense. I have a question, are Heero, Trowa, and Wufei actually seeing in color and experiencing emotions in small amounts, or am I just misreading things. Anyways please keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Tygrrlyli [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 18:34 CDT
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Well, I knew it was a 1x2, but have complexities is always awesome. Glad that's totally cleared up however. Cause I might be more than 50% confused right now. But if your previous version was any indication to pairings in this version, well, yeah. So moo. Please write soon!! Very cool and fluffy and all. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Gundam Fan ^-^ On: July 17, 2004 11:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic! HEH! You trapped Duo's personality really well. Well, my first time reading Yaoi, but I sure love to see Heero and Duo together! I love the fact that Heero is gealouse of anyone who dares to touch "his" Duo! And I'm glad that that witch Relena doesn't get to have him! Yep, guessed right. I hate relena. Anyway, please update this stoty soon, I can't wait for the ending! ^-^
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Title: I'm confused
Reviewed By: Java On: July 17, 2004 10:48 CDT
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Duo is Heero's superior right? Or have I missed something here?
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Reviewed By: Shaeric Draconis [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 03:59 CDT
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Okay this some parts of this chapter was confusing and I realise you are changing partners...I think, heh. Any way its good and you are right it has more depth to the story so keep it up but I will stop reading here. Many others love it so best of luck with the rest of this. I only read 1 x 2 stories. Shae-chan
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Title: I'm amused
Reviewed By: Tygrrlyli [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2004 23:36 CDT
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This vein of ficness is very good. Totally approved. Glad you kept the club scene as well. It's a good scene, and incredibly funny to boot. Now the Duo, Heero, Wufei dynamics are very interesting. Can't wait to see where you go with that one! Please continue soon! ^_^
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Reviewed By: lolly sister On: July 16, 2004 17:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really loved this both times and this time it's better. Please don't pair Duo away from Heero, or Heero with Relena. I really hate 1XR fics.
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Reviewed By: pinktutu On: July 16, 2004 10:41 CDT
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I guess I'm confused. Did Wufei (who acted fairly jealous) call Duo "his" on the dance floor? I thought the story was leading to a Heero and Duo pairing. I guess with all the revisions I must have missed something.
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Reviewed By: diabloangel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 15:15 CDT
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Please keep up and add another chapter soon. I would like to see what happens to the terrible trio when their gards catch up with them.
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Reviewed By: diabloangel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 12:24 CDT
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i like this one better. In the other one it seemed you had run in to a stop cause of the fact that duo had no psyich powers and thus could not be converted into being a carpathin. Anyway you write it is a good storie. Please continue
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Reviewed By: priscel *grins manically* On: July 14, 2004 12:11 CDT
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waaa!! Heero was close to snacking on Duo. Oh man, *sniffs* oh the pain of having to wait!! *dramatically crumples to the floor* I'm so happy that they know alittle more about what's going on, hmm I wonder who this female seer will turn out to be? perhaps Noin? ohoh maybe Po *thinks of tellytubbies then shakes her head and curses the existance of those horrible things* Sally Po? *sweatdrop* hmm me thinks Duo's partially psychic and established the link between himself and Quat?! Quat was already cool with his spaceheart. I'm glad relena isn't more than relena I don't think I can handle her being anything more. But if the story and author dictate such I will enjoy the stoy nontheless. !!ThankyouDomoArigatoGraciasGraci!!
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Reviewed By: Tygrrlyli [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 15:20 CDT
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Raging hard-on for Duo!! Sounds like a plan ^_^ heheh, this story is cool too. I have no complaints. Nifty, go you ^_^
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Reviewed By: huntshorn On: July 12, 2004 10:03 CDT
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so very much better!!!! i love freehan's novels and am enjoying the g-boys as carpatians. your first version was a bit too...fast..in development. it lessens the story when an author moves from a to z in under ten seconds. i'm glad you've taken the time to flesh out the characters and story. makes for a more enjoyable tale. more fitting to freehan's world.
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 19:06 CDT
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*squeals* lol wuffers is whining even if it is a tease. Wahoo!! I'm so glad that trowa didn't overlook the fact they were after Duo. MAn I like this version so much better, jammed packed with action and you really communicate the long term friendship between Duo and Quat. Oh please update again very soon!!!
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Reviewed By: priscel *surprised* [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 17:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hot DAMN! I just read the first chapter!!! wow you revised it and ya know I think i like this much much better than the other even though i was kind of attached to it. I defiantly agree more now with the modifications you made to the characters especially Duo and Quat. Oh yes, the introduction of wufei here works great!! *squeals in delight* (^_^) I'm glad you kept your thrice motto up there. On my way to read the rest.
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