| "Dark Deceptions Revised" Reviews/Comments [ 37 ] |
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Reviewed By: pinktutu On: July 16, 2004 10:41 CDT
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I guess I'm confused. Did Wufei (who acted fairly jealous) call Duo "his" on the dance floor? I thought the story was leading to a Heero and Duo pairing. I guess with all the revisions I must have missed something.
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Reviewed By: diabloangel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 15:15 CDT
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Please keep up and add another chapter soon. I would like to see what happens to the terrible trio when their gards catch up with them.
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Reviewed By: diabloangel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2004 12:24 CDT
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i like this one better. In the other one it seemed you had run in to a stop cause of the fact that duo had no psyich powers and thus could not be converted into being a carpathin. Anyway you write it is a good storie. Please continue
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Reviewed By: priscel *grins manically* On: July 14, 2004 12:11 CDT
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waaa!! Heero was close to snacking on Duo. Oh man, *sniffs* oh the pain of having to wait!! *dramatically crumples to the floor* I'm so happy that they know alittle more about what's going on, hmm I wonder who this female seer will turn out to be? perhaps Noin? ohoh maybe Po *thinks of tellytubbies then shakes her head and curses the existance of those horrible things* Sally Po? *sweatdrop* hmm me thinks Duo's partially psychic and established the link between himself and Quat?! Quat was already cool with his spaceheart. I'm glad relena isn't more than relena I don't think I can handle her being anything more. But if the story and author dictate such I will enjoy the stoy nontheless. !!ThankyouDomoArigatoGraciasGraci!!
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Reviewed By: Tygrrlyli [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2004 15:20 CDT
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Raging hard-on for Duo!! Sounds like a plan ^_^ heheh, this story is cool too. I have no complaints. Nifty, go you ^_^
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Reviewed By: huntshorn On: July 12, 2004 10:03 CDT
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so very much better!!!! i love freehan's novels and am enjoying the g-boys as carpatians. your first version was a bit too...fast..in development. it lessens the story when an author moves from a to z in under ten seconds. i'm glad you've taken the time to flesh out the characters and story. makes for a more enjoyable tale. more fitting to freehan's world.
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Reviewed By: priscel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 19:06 CDT
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*squeals* lol wuffers is whining even if it is a tease. Wahoo!! I'm so glad that trowa didn't overlook the fact they were after Duo. MAn I like this version so much better, jammed packed with action and you really communicate the long term friendship between Duo and Quat. Oh please update again very soon!!!
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Reviewed By: priscel *surprised* [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2004 17:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hot DAMN! I just read the first chapter!!! wow you revised it and ya know I think i like this much much better than the other even though i was kind of attached to it. I defiantly agree more now with the modifications you made to the characters especially Duo and Quat. Oh yes, the introduction of wufei here works great!! *squeals in delight* (^_^) I'm glad you kept your thrice motto up there. On my way to read the rest.
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Reviewed By: Chan_girl On: July 11, 2004 03:37 CDT
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I think you should continue both version. O loved the 1st version, because Heero was so damn cool and sexy with Duo. The 1st fic was really good! This one is good too. It has a deeper plot and long description. Duo seems much more important. So can you continue the 1st fic too while doing this one ? Please!!!
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Title: I like ch.4
Reviewed By: Sanam Jan On: July 10, 2004 07:59 CDT
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I liked the Original form from "Dark Deceptions" very much and at first I thought that I don't like the reversion as much as the Original version but after reading chapter four, which was to my liking, I came to the conclusion that I maight like the reversion as much as the initial version after all. I'm looking forward for more of it altho I wish you'd continue the old version as well as this one.
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Reviewed By: yelan On: July 10, 2004 07:23 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sweet! The way you describe the action sequences (espescially with Duo and his scythe!) is truely amazing! I love it!
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Reviewed By: catangel On: July 10, 2004 02:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i prefer this 1 than the other fic that u write about dark deception. b'cos this story shown duo to be mysteries and more of his style and character.
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Reviewed By: LEEMAX^_^ On: July 09, 2004 21:36 CDT
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I really like both stories. I think that you should continue with both of them. It is so cool. Have the first one and the second one both going at the same time see what story brings back more. I loved the lemon you wrote and the way they react in the first one and love the added extra plot in the second one. The first one you can make Duo someting like a half Carpathian and not knowing it he meets the King and realizes he is his uncle. Duo's finds out his father married the Kings sister, Helen. Solo is the prince and he and Duo have know each other since they were small. Duo thought he died when a vampire attached Helen and Duo's dad and severly hurt Solo. Duo thought all his family died and Solo and the King thought Duo died when the vampire attaced. For the second I am stil not certain about what you should write but it is real good as well.
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Title: cool
Reviewed By: unicorn1979 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2004 09:47 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really good story. Keep writting i cannot wait to find out what happenes. I like both this version and the other one, but this one is a little bit more detailed. Keep writting either one. ^_^
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Title: Wow!
Reviewed By: DeathsAngel1816 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2004 22:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't tell you how much I love this story! And I mean LOVE this sotry. The plot, the characters and everything are perfect. I was glued to my seat the entire time I was reading this. So you better write more and soon, please. I will be impatiently awaiting an update.
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