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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2004 11:31 CST
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Never mind it. Ayyway, great chappie! The return of the blue silverware has arrived! Wait... if it's blue, then it's not SILVERware... So... you cna't call it silverware 'cause it's not silver... But silverware is a generalization for all utensils... So technically you can... *brain explodes* @_@ Oh well. Picnics are fun!! ^_^ Typical Yugi, obsessed with food. Typical Yami and Bakura, obsessed with hating each other. ^^;; Well, I hope you update soon again!
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2004 15:56 CST
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A picnic with a block of cheese. What more could you ask for? heh. I feel sorry for Ryou, especially since he punched himself in the head. O.o; If you're still suffering from writers block, having Aria be targeted for the kidnapping would make things interesting. But I see that the blue silverware (hmm, but it's plastic...) is going to have its comeback, so what could be more interesting than that? XD Good job as usual. Looking forward to Kaiba's little plan. Don't give up on the italics! ^_^
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Reviewed By: anubiset (to lazy to log in) On: November 17, 2004 12:01 CST
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I love this story. I don`t know what is happening with Ryou, but you better not break his heart. I hate it when that happens. Though I have plans for one where that happens. I hate writers block. So many sotry ideas, but none are working out. I am feeling better thanks.
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Title: Sorry for it being really late
Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2004 16:43 CDT
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It still hasn't happened yet... ^^;;; Sorry about that. Anyways, intersting chappie to say her least. I want to know what the beacon is for!! >< AH!! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: anubiset [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2004 20:01 CDT
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Wow. Intense. What is that guy Hector up to anyway? I can`t get enough of this one. I hope to get more of my works out soon. I got the flu. Oh well, keep it coming.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2004 19:46 CDT
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Ah! Well this is an unexpected twist. I liked Aria's craziness with the flour and and how she always wants candy from people. ^^' This beacon thingy is a cool. Maybe the guy put the kidnapped boy in the mansion and is going to blame Kaiba to get back at him?...maybe Aria is secretly obsessed with cute boys and is collecting them? Oo;; Have Aria use more magic/mind skills is my only suggestion. Can't wait to read what happens next. I wonder how Jou's memory loss will fit in with this...
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2004 20:23 CDT
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AH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have tainted his pureness! >< Oh well, I've probably done so in my fics without even realizing it. ^^;;;;; Well, my Tainted Angel fic is no longer innocent... ^^;; Green, green, green, and wait for it.... more green! Jou is obsessed with green stuff. I'm surprised his bath wasn't green colored. Oh well, let's hope he wakes up in this dimension the next time. Update soon!
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2004 16:35 CDT
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That was awesome! The plot is twisting about pretty well. I especially liked it when Aria "cleanses" his mind, and how she appears to be snippy-snappy (yeah, I made up a word) in the dream. She's definitely hiding something and trying to affect Jou's memories too. I know she probably won't end up being a bad person, but it's still getting to be very interesting. Play with his mind more! ^-^
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Reviewed By: anubiset (to tired to sign in) On: October 06, 2004 21:28 CDT
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I love where you are heading with this. It is getting to be fun. Love it.
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Reviewed By: kuramafan58 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2004 19:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like it. It was really funny when it was like the blahing got louder and he looked up to see the teacher standing over his desk... I've been wondering... Why is it that so many of the Yu Gi Oh fanfics have everyone gay? There are more gay pairings here than Yu Yu Hakusho's Kurama and Hiei. Anyway, great story, I hope you finish!!! Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 19:39 CDT
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O.O Bad Kura-kun! Ryou is innocent!!!!!!!!!!! >< Oh well, I'm over that. I hope you can get to the idea soon! It's really funny! And I helped think of it! ^^;;; Ok, I'ma say please update soon.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 17:04 CDT
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Hi hi. Mokuba stole my line! Well, that was interesting. o-o; There was a duel!...for a little bit...that was awesome, but you're right that the other stuff is more interesting to read about. Try focusing more on Jou in the next chapter since it seems like he's starting to remember things. Not much else to say...just waiting to see what happens. ^^ Good job! I hope Kaiba can save some of his normal silverware before it's too late...
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Reviewed By: RyousGirl567 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2004 21:04 CDT
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Yey! Another chappie! ^^ Next one's gonna have the idea, right???? It's gonna be so funny! Oh, I remember how you said right before you posted ch1 that you were going to make this an all angst fic. There's like no angst left! XD Oh well, you're so much better at writing comedy anyways. Update soon!
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Title: Black Memories
Reviewed By: anubiset [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2004 09:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just read ch. 5. Very good. I have read some books on magic and spells. If the girl went into a 15 year sleep and is still the same age then she would have had to have time suspeneded for her. Which means it would be powerful magic. Maybe she comes from another time or her family was powerful magicians in this time and they put her to sleep so that she could awaken with only her memories of her magic in order for some larger plan to begin. Maybe if it works Jou looks like or is her mom. And he raising her would decide on her being evil or good. But you would need those that wanted her for evil too. Just a suggestion.
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Reviewed By: TheKirbyKid [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2004 19:13 CDT
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Dude! More cool silverware! This fic just keeps getting better. Try to have Aria do some more crazy stuff in the next chapter. You have a lot of options now, but I think you have a good idea of what's going to happen already. Keep it up! ^^
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