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| "Time Soul Exodus" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: VelvetNight [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2005 09:47 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!!! You updated....I didn't even see it coming! You sneaky bastard...ahaha! Loves it!! THis chapter though not your best, was a great one none the less! This chapter almost had the effect of a filler...but so much more...if thats confusing...just let me know. THe pace,however, in this chapter was perfect....it slowed down and sped up in just the right places... just enough to get my blood boiling with anticipation! And the background music you chose...excellent!! I particularly liked the flashback where Arcerdo and InuYasha were training. Fight for survival between father and son...priceless. And Arcerdo's attack...Sacred Blood Claws...thought I don't quite understand the attack...it was very interesting...Speaking of interesting...it seems that Arcerdo has caught the interest of certain people....just who is this Arcerdo?? It's great! It seems like Arcerdo and the Moon Priests have quite the fight on their hands...whew...I soo can't wait! I really liked how we were able to get into Heitaro's head and see how he's analyzing the situation....hmmm...seems like there are so many characters that are such enigmas...Arcerdo, Jei, Heitaro....just what else will you come up with?? I have no idea!! Well...I hope all is well with you and I eagerly await your next update!! Smooches! ~VelvetNight
| Title: Response to AN
Reviewed By: VelvetNight [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2005 16:05 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey!! It's Corinthia (Rin ^_^). I've decided to change my user name...I don't know why, I just like this name. It sounds more...mysterious, don't ya think? Anyways, in response to your note, I personally would love to see you continue Time Soul Exodus. It was definitely one of the first things that made me notice your very unique writing style. But then again, I would also like to see what's in store for your other idea (TLB), that too really draws my attention to you. However, if you are suffering from writer's block, then perhaps the best thing for you to do is to take a short break, gather your thoughts, work on some other things until you come up with something. If there's anything I can do let me know. I'll support you in any way I can. Hope to talk to you later! (p.s sorry this review is short...I just came back from partying and I'm pooped ^_^)
| Reviewed By: Lady_Ceri (offline) On: October 30, 2005 03:37 CST
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I'm reading, and I'd really like you to finish it...I don't just add anybody to my favorites list. ;) So yeah...
| Title: ME! I WANT YOU TO CONTINUE!
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2005 21:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well as the title says, I want you to continue writing this. So do so soon please! TTYL Inus_Kagome_Forever
| Reviewed By: Jade Tiger On: September 22, 2005 02:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
okay hopefully this works cause mm.org is being a butt!! GRR!! okay, calm... i am loving this story!! Arc is freak'n awesome!! he really seems real and yet super human, just the right blend. personally i think the use of lesson flashbacks draws it all together and gives us, the readers, more information... this is awesome, really and you have me completly hooked!! oh, i'm gonna try to draw the first two Arc pictures and maybe the insects... wish me luck!! i'll e-mail them if they turn out well... Tah~
| Title: The Battle Scenes
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2005 16:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very interesting. I like the way you write the battles. I think they're very good. Sorry I didn't r&r sooner. It's going to be the third week of school tomorrow and I'm tired as hell. Volleyball and highschool is harder than I thought it would be... or well tiring, but I'm glad you updated! I'll probably be a bit late reading all you chapters cuz of volleyball now, but don't worry if it takes me a while. I'm probably just too tired. So update soon, the battle is getting me all hyper or whatever. I can't wait to see the out come. Laterz, update Inus_Kagome_Forever
| Title: oooh yeah
Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 21:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
I don't know if you're still looking for someone to do the fanart for Arc, if so I may have someone in mind...email me and I'll give you the details. Catch ya later!
| Title: Whew!!
Reviewed By: hanyou_gurl004 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 21:43 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I finally made it to a point where I could review! I have to say, Zelix, you never cease to amaze me. Because mm.org is a bi-otch and gives you a word limit, I'll make my critiques short and to the point. 3 major things i noticed were really strong in your fic: 1 narrative pace- while in the Sinners, it was a weakness, you truly accel in this fic. I think the time flows along with the perfect balance of past and present (be it flashbacks or literally going from feudal to present). I will say at some times the flow is broken and parts seem jerky, overall it's great. 2 POV- 3rd person omnicent POV is truly your strong point. You really take advantage of it and show us the inner most workings of all your characters, major or minor. 3 Character development- this is most definitely your forte I love how you dive right into Arc especially and we find out what makes him tick. I would have to say that ch 17 & 18 really showed us ALOT about Arc and what he feels. It gave us the 2 different sides of him: the timid boy and the determined warrior. Superb job!! I already have a couple of theories about some of the characters, but I'll keep those to myself, so I won't influence any other readers out there. I'm really starting to get excited and I loved how in the battle scenes you were able to make my own heart beat fast and my own breath come out in pants of anticipation!! GREAT JOB!!! I eagerly await your next update!!!
| Title: I think the chapter was good!
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2005 18:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good filler! Can't wait for more, but I wanted to ask, do you draw? I was just wondering because I think it would awsome if you could draw what these people look like. Arc, the moon priest, and I dont know, Reniko, Chizu and Sumira? Well just a thought. UPdate soon! Inus_Kagome_Forever
| Title: Doncha love me and ma reviews?
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2005 00:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There you go again, making more stories when I can't keep up with all the ones you have let alone MY OWN stories :( This is no fair, I need more time! Days should be longer!! I'm telling you, 24 hours is WAY too short. What do you say? Wanna sign the petition with me? Oh right, back to the subject at hand, UPDATE SOON! Keep up the good work, your doing great. There were only like to lines in the whole thing I didn't get and if you feel like reading it over juss for those to lines go and do it (I'd never find them if it was my stories but maybe YOU could.) So with that said I'll check out your summer for you original fic. I myself plan to do an original fic with vampires (already have the story line, got it off one of my rps or well it was my chars story line... do you know what I mean? Well yeah all I have to do is make it into a story and write it. Damn, thats the hardest part!!!! It'll probably be short like all my fics) Anyways, sorry my reviews go on and on and jump from subject to subject and I talk so much bout myself. Update soon okay. Your stories good.
| Title: Hey!
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2005 14:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chap, to answer your questions tho, 1: What the moon priest were doing was... a little confusing, but its good that they're helping the people. I'm still confused as to if they're REALLY good or not. damn! 2: Jei's power is cool. When I heard the nickname I first thought about the tesiaga (I'm sure thats now how you spell it and am too lazy too go look in my mangas for the correct way but Inuyasha's sword ok?) because I think that was going to be named the coffen sword or phantom sword and of course that KILLS 100 demons. (so much better than just cutting one up into 100 peices, lol. Inuyasha's sword is awsome! ^_^) oh but so 3: Kinda... I want to read about actions but also about that crystal thing and all these people and stuff. Hope that helps! ~~~Inus_Kagome_Forever~~~Laterz
| Title: I TALK TOOO MUCH! >.
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 22:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And I definately do NOT want the end to be so soon. Then again, if it isn't I won't ever get to updating my stories for my own reviews... becuz I'm so lazy, but if it was over, then I would just find another story, Gosh I'm such a hopeless dumbass author. Anywho, I see a heart shape in my ceiling... a bit off the subject and odd... hmmm. wonder what it could mean... maybe I love your story and its some kind of sign. Damn This is a long review today, but it's becuz i keep going off into different subjects and then start to explain. OK, look, I LIKE YOUR STORY VERY MUCH AND WANT YOU TO UPDATE, SO WITHOUT ANY MORE OF MY BORING STORIES AND CHATTING/TALKING/WRITING... LOL I WILL PRESS THE SUBMIT BUTTON TO END THIS ALL. ~~~Inus_Kagome_Forever and ever and ever and ever... yeah ever infinity~~~~
| Title: I have to continue on another Review
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 22:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I SWEAR, you're like the only author I've signed in for. I mean usually I just put Inus_Kagome_Forever(NSI) = not signed. But since when I looked at all my last reviews on this page and there were none where I wasn't signed in I did... I got off my lazy hand pad thingy, whatever it is that, its that lump thingy on the mouse pad, but anyways, I got off it and clicked onto the log in thing and did so. Other news, I did as I promised and read your story as soon as I got the e-mail. Well not really a soon as I got it cuz I wasn't online when you updated your story but I mean as soon as I check my e-mail and found it there. By the way great chapter!(I probably say that every chap but its only true.) And I think they get better each time. So please update soon. Cannot wait till you do. Your stories just soooo good! His plan seems really good. I'm not very sharp tho, I didn't know that he was making them go first also becuz the things were after Chizu... Then again I took a test, quiz thingy confirming I was just an average human that has no common sense, but lets not go into that right now. I also can't believe he's staying here for so long, I mean yeah ok. He cares about the people for some reason and I understand he doesn't want to leave Chizu incase something else happens to her, after all she's so innocent and naive (at least that why I think he's staying) but what about his mate? When will he see his Kagura again? Then again, seeing her would mean the end is near
| Title: Hey!
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 12:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry I'm soooo addicted to video games! Your chapter was great! You're a really great author! I hope you'll update soon and I promise to stop playing my favorite rpg game to read it as soon as you post it ok? Promise! So update soon! Can't wait.~~~Inus_Kagome_Forever~~~Later`
| Title: OH I SEE HOW IT IS
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2005 20:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH I SEE HOW IT IS! You're doin this for all your stories! Thats sooooooooo not fair! You are supposed to update! Update update update!!! This had better help you get out of your little writers block kind of thing cause I can not wait a whole nother couple of weeks for the next chapters on your story, so listen to music or think about your fic before you go to bed. Always helped me... PLEASE! I juss can't take! This is my favorite story of yours and its really really good! So update!
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