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| "Time Soul Exodus" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] | Reviewed By: No matter, just a reviewer On: November 27, 2004 11:50 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Simply put, a fucking awesome fic! Update soon please!
| Title: Plzzz say this review is long enough, lol
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2004 21:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, im gonna try to right along review ok! lol. So anyways, sorry for not reviewing your last chap. I just read the ending of it. I cant wair to read the um other story or yours, i just got a review about it. i really need to check it out, it sounds interesting. Well anyways, as always, you write really really well. Hope Chizu's mom doesnt die... tha'd be bad. And who exactly are those moon priest??? i mean come on! When are you gonna reveal all the answers to his questions, not to mention ours? Well uh hope you update soon, and that you like this review of mine cause its longer! lol, most likely cause im hyper and cant stop typing/chatting/talking lol! Damn i am hyper, well anyways, you really need to update and i'll talk to ya later, k Cya^~~^~~~*~~~^~~^ Dom ^_^ Laterzzzzzzzzzzzzz
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2004 11:33 CDT
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Hi there! I'm back, and with a review! This was and interesting chapter. Arc really overworked himself, huh? I wonder if he's going to wake up in the forest or someplace else...like in the village. That'd be convenient because we could skip the rest of the walk there. Hm...and hopefully nothing kills him in his sleep. lol, wait, but this is ARC'S STORY! He can't die because I'm your most frequent reviewer and I say so! lol But seriously...we need hints about where Kagura is! I know we talked about this, and why you're not throwing in hints yet but still...maybe even some more memories of the two together. I dunno, to me the story feels like it's loosing all essence of Kagura. Now it's just a focus on Arc...wandering around. If you want my help, maybe we could brain-storm together. I know this can be a great story, as soon as the author, like Arc, stops wandering around and finds where he's going with this. And don't let this put you down. You still have me and a bunch of others still hooked by this fic. Just remember, You're creative and talented! You can do it! lol. I look forward to hearing about your progress soon. Take Care! and I WILL be back.
| Title: WoW!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Dreamfox WindWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: October 02, 2004 20:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your so COOL!!!!^_^ Anyway, keep going! (eyes glued to computer---)O.O
| Title: update!
Reviewed By: ~-Inus_Kagome_Forever, not signed in-~ On: October 01, 2004 20:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
finally i got to finish reading this chap(not that it was very long or anything, lol) but so i cant wait for the next one! update soon please! *yawn*, i like need to go to bed, sorry(your stories not boring its just waking up early for school... ok well later
| Reviewed By: tessie_fanfic@yahoo.com On: September 29, 2004 15:52 CDT
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awsome story! although for some reason i can't get to your auther's page. anyway you could let me know when you update this story? my email is tessie_fanfic@yahoo.com till the next chapter and i hope karuga shows up soon! tessie
| Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2004 18:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oooo, am i not writing long enough reviews?? sorry...i have to much on my mind, cant concentrate on one thing...lol, damn mine are sooo short compared to everyone elses...sorry, later, oh yeah and 10 across! or down? (did i spell across right?)
| Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2004 18:27 CDT
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good chapter! Cant wait for the next one. poor arc though, he needs to get a sword of his own...damn tha'd be cool, 3 swords! Damn i want those two sword, inu yasha n sess's sword are sooo cool! Anyways update~~~~ Dom
| Title: update soon please
Reviewed By: Inus_Kagome_Forever [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2004 22:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
phew, sorry about not reading it sooner, so sorry...but very good, damn it, i almost wish i waited longer to read it so you would have more chapters up, lol! ^_~ so um...this isnt a oneshot is it? hmmm...well um cant wait for the next chap, i'll be reading more of your stories soon enough, but i also gotta finish some others ones(i guess i didnt want to read the ending or something...and have been avoiding the 3 or stories lol) um so update soon, talk to ya later> P.S. very intersting story line, there are not many grammar and spelling errors (mine usually have lots) i cant wait to read more of this story, it seems to have a lot of questions in it that will hopefully be answered soon, i would like to know about these "cloaked" people and the spider scorpian thing (does it have something to do with naraku?) and the girl with two different color eyes....
| Title: I know, I'm a bum...I didn't review when I said I was going to.
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2004 08:43 CDT
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Lol, this is feeling like a regular episode of Inuyasha ^_^. The plot of an evil villain; a hero who knows something funny is going on and starts findnig clues as to what that is. Anyways, that's just an observation. I liked how you slipped in the happy little memory between Arc and Kagura in this chapter. It was rather sweet. Yet kinda sad...because she's gone and we don't now how or where! lol I look forward to the next chapter when Arc and the little girl arrive at the village. Maybe Arc will start finding clues as to where Kagura is? Perhaps somewhere with the 'cloaked people'? But I take it you aren't going to give us glimpses of where Kagura is...kinda like...just follow what Arc goes through. I think that's quite alright...I just hope you keep writing for us! I wish you luck!!! - the Lone Vixen
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2004 14:17 CDT
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A bit of an abrupt stop at the end there. So Arc seems to make a one hell of a doctor. I like your use of "holy powers". It seems to come out more smoothly rather than "purifying powers". I'm liking Arc's new companion - she's sweet and innocent...maybe she'll help Arc find Kagura. And the fact Arc can't sense her is a little distubring. This chapter was a little slower than the others - not much happening but like you said, you weren't in the mood. My only complaint right now is that I feel we've been kept in the dark about what happened to Kagura for too long now. Give us SOMETHING that hints to whether or not she's even alive. Please? I didn't mean to rush you on this chapter. My apologies. My advice, write when it feels right. And all I'll say is good luck to you.
| Title: I'm baaaaaack...and ready with another review like I SAID!
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2004 18:11 CDT
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Woo! Satisfying chapter. I wanted there to be more but I'm just impatient you see. Sorta feels like we're still just jumping into the plot here and waiting for ALL the stuff that's down the road to surface and REALLY hook us into this fic. Keep your pace where it's at though because it's flowing well this way, (and besides, it's only chapter 3). Just never mind my groans about not knowing what's going on exactly.lol. I still enjoy this chapter - and that cute father-son moment. I like seeing Arc flex his amazing strength and abilities. And that's something I noticed more in this chapter -Arc is understanding more and more what it is to have Youkai blood. Very good, tis allowing him to be more successful with his abilites if he is confident in them. I am of course refereing to how you wrote about Arc kickin' that insects butt! And you almost had me believing he'd whimp out and run away. lol, not this OC! But anyways, putting him up against one hell of a demon shows more of Arc's developed character and his Youkai-self in general. *claps* So, there is obviously a problem in the feudal era...seems Inuyasha's assumption of humans winning this war may not be so accurate. Eek...maybe this means a certain monk or demon exterminator aren't alive!! *tears* And this mysterious girl - nice touch! Who is she? Is she important? Or just an innocent bistander? Why was she running alone in a Youkai infested area? Keep writing!! Let that energy FLOOOOOW!!!! hehe
| Title: Arc is on his own now...away from the pack...out to save his mate......WHAT WILL HAPPEN NOW??????
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2004 13:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oOoOo!!!!!! Finally I have SOMETHING to read!!! ^_^ I'm even further into this. I can feel it, I can feel this is going to be a VERY interesting story with lots of cool twists and action! Something also tells me that the plot of this fic, in comparisson to "Loneliness of the Free Wind", will be sad and darker. But, maybe that's due to the eeriness of the un-named figure at the end of the first chapter. At first I screamed "SESSHOUMARU!!!!"...but then I settled back down after the bracelet was mentioned and the whole "interferance...change...I failed that time". I give you a thumbs up there. At first I was wondering how you were going to include Inu&Kag since the story was meant to follow their son on his journey while they were left behind. But now we get to be updated on them because of this "figure". I don't want to say who it is...because it might spoil it for others who'll read this. But who caused the barrier on the well, and ignited the bond between Arc and Kagura? Was it the figure? Or the one who took her? And why would Sesshoumaru just send a sword like that?? You are clever...veeeery clever. Well I am very pleased with how you began this fic - it seems to already be headed in a good direction. Happy writing!!! And I hope to be reading more soon, not only from this fic, but of your other stories. Take Care! - the Lone Vixen
| Reviewed By: rukusho100 (not logged in) On: August 09, 2004 21:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, what can I say. Oh, this: "You've started yet the begining to another masterpiece!" I like the idea you have for the opening setting, just describing breef moments. You kept my attention the entire time. I like the mystery behind Tokjin, the dissapearance of Kagura, and where Arc is going. On thing I would mention is the way Arc acted right before the end of the chapter. I don't know if you have this planned out allready, but I would have expected Arc to be in a bit more of a state of saddness/rage concidering it seemed to be a spur of the moment decesion to go....erm....back to senkou joudai? I guess I'll find that out in the next chapter ^^; Either than that this chapter was marvolus! (sp?) I agree with what Lone Vixen said about Sango and Miroku showing up. If he does go back...they need to make a cameo! Hmm...do I have anything else to say....Keep it up! Oh yea and may I suguest checking out the last few chapters of the IY manga. It may help out with Kaguras personality if you fall into a slump. Just search 'Inuyasha - Sengoku o-Togi Zoushi' on google. He has a great translation. Cant wait for the next installment! Laterdays! Ruku
| Reviewed By: Lone Vixen [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2004 12:11 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, this is off to a great start! It's a nice opening - letting us know how Kagura and Arc have been doing. 7 days...that's a lot of mating. Maybe we could know how a few of those went in a few one-shots? lol, just a suggestion. Well, brilliant writing as usual, hehe. It flowed nicely from the memories, to the present that was cryptic until the end of the chapter. This is great that you're hooking your audience in the first chapter with how Arc is about to embark on some sort of adventure, (and through a certain well perhaps??) And then there's the questions we scream at the end - What's happened to Kagura?? Does it have anything to do with Naraku? There's something up with that sword Sesshoumaru gave Arc. You know it's got a purpose later on. lol Nice touch. And so was Inuyasha giving Arc the Tetseiga. It's hard to imagine Inuyasha parting with it. But, this is the future and it is his son. hehe, so this is where the new destiny starts...a destiny like Kagome and Inuyasha had. It's too bad they won't go with Arc but...it's his destiny, right? I can't wait to see where this goes. I think later on, we should see Sesshoumaru step into the picture somehow, even if it's just to explain why he gave the sword to Arc. Oh, and maybe, and this is to to say IF Arc goes back to the feudal era, Miroku and Sango should show up somewhere along the way. Well, other than this all I have to say is good luck! I can't wait for more updates. Keep at it, you're off to a great start!
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