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Title: just read chappie 4
Reviewed By: Dharmaserenity (too lazy to log in) On: June 19, 2005 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just laughed out loud at the end of chapter 4 when Vegeta walks in and Trunks goes white. I love the idea of him walking in on Goten LOL A yummy idea. I really enjoyed the look at Vegeta's birth that we had in chapter 3. I find the pov switches, and the first person thing jarring in general, so I find myself reacting to that, but I'm getting used to it. Still, I'm enjoying this and am really intrigued by the two possible pairnings already. ^^
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Reviewed By: jeppe On: January 19, 2005 13:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ai loved yiour fic it the best cant vait to read next chapter
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Title: Ancient history: the forgetten past of Seiyan History chapter 17
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: November 13, 2004 01:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wish there is a 11 for style. Your always have such good style. I love space traveling. This chapter take me to the stars and I loved the trip. Going to different planets are always nice, even thought it's war scared ruins. I wish I can shows you my mental picture of the place. ^__^ got to Love Barlock and King vegeta moment. Thanks for putting it in there. The log idea is great! I love that. Shiver lightly at the darkness and the blood. The imagary is scary, I love the effect. The story gets everything, and everything is wonderful! Next chapter sounds wonderful! Gokuu had been really impressive in this fic so far and I like that, I can't wait to see what he is gonna do next! Please update soon. Sincerely, YYY
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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2004 16:22 CDT
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update soooooon! must read mooooore! ^_^
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Title: Ancient history: the forgetten past of Seiyan History
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
chapter 14 wow, wonderful addition! The girls are back, and Vegeta got Bra's picture! ^__^ Lucky for Bra The others had arrive. I can't wait til you update! It will be awsome to see the family reunion. So many things are gonna happen!!! What will the Vegeta and Gokuu's fathers say to their sons after all these years? How will trunk, Gohan and Goten be affected by their grandfather showing up? This is gonna drive me crazy...the wait...to find out what will happen.. (and what will happen with Bra and Pan and the two guys they love too) I really love your work, you have great style in your writing, and your fic got everything, mystery, action, romance....etc. Please write more soon. I will wait patiently. Sincerely, your fan YYY
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Title: Ancient history: the forgetten past of Seiyan History
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(chapter 13) Hot guys! Hot actions! It's martial art/hand to hand combat actions too!!! The kind that i like, I love action. but I like fight scene like theses more than sword duel, gun fight, car chase type of action. But there aren't many hand to hand fight in action in fanfics....This is wonderful!!! The fight scene long and detail...Nothing like two handsome hot guys fighting each other to make a great chapter! and what comes after the fight is priceless =D (I will blink too) Yaoi rules! Another great chapter!
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(chapter 12) Empty pages? hmm...I wonder...the scar is gone? I wonder what happened? What is Goku smiling about? What doeshe knows that Vegeta doesn't? So many questions...Imo? Tako? hmm...I want to know what's going on? and who is reunited with King Vegeta? Who is that? Goku's father??? lol. don't mind me, I'm just being silly. So many questions in this chapter...I hope you'll update soon so I can find out what's next. ttfn, You're an awsome writer. your #1 fan, YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(chapter 11) Another wonderful chapter...clap hands. I love the beginning, the walk is lovely, especaily the waterfall. And Bra is so cute!!!! I hope Eric makes her happy. I hope Adam makes Bra happy, too. Bra is cool, too. I love the tossing. It's nice to have a friend like that who stand up for you! Is Appuru really came to earth, that will be cool.. I'll go and read the next chapter now... I think leaving preview is a cool idea. ^__^ Another great chapter ^__^
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Title: The Forgetten past of Seiyan History
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(chapter 10) wow, another great chapter! So many things happened! I can't believe Vegeta almost got bitten! That was one hell of a fight. Not only you're great at writting feelings and lemon, you rock at writing action, too. I love action. I can't belive Chichi is dead. Now I can't seem to hate her anymore. she was not a nice person, but still, I feel bad about seeing here die. Goten rocks!!! ^__^ YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans:
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(Chapter 9) I can't believe it! I'm so mad at Chi chi! and i was at her side, too! How can she do that! That heartless succupine!!! I hope Vegita is safe... Goku can't think straight now and Vegita is 'smelling nice'... O.O But then again, I don't really hope Vegita will be safe....a Vegita/Goku/Bulma threesome will be fun...^__^ Bulma cares about Goku a lot, too. Anyway, don't mind me, I'm just being weird. Blame it to Liev and MammonWolf in the chat room right now.. I LOVE THE GOTEN AND TRUNK LEMON! YOU ROCK. THEY ARE JUST TOO CUTE. LICKING! YES! You Are The Best! YYY Another wonderful chapter. YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans:
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(Chapter 8) Poor King Vegita. Waking up in a new place, losing all his power, can't even move...only to find out his wife is dead. That is so sad. I will go crazy too if that happened to me. I wonder what role is Pan's teacher gonna play...I have to read faster! You're such a gppd writer. How can you write so many good things so fast? Another wonderful chapter. YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(Chapter 7) this just keep getting better! i can't blieve Goku is this mad. I feel so bad for him. he seems to be in so much pain. He is such a nice person. It's nice to see his friends being there for Goku. What Chi chi did was really uncall for. And Goten and Trunk! They're awsome! I can't believe Trunk marked Goten! Imagine Trunk bite Goten's neck...^__^ goody!!! Another wonderful chapter! This is cool!
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(chapter 6) wow, this chapter is intense! Everyone come together! I can't believe ChiChi is having an affair! I was feeling sorry for her, too....sigh. Relationships are so hard to predict...hmm...I can't believe Vegita yelled at ChiChi! He really cares for Goku...or it is because he is frustrated because he can't work out in the G.R.? ^__^ Another wonderful chapter, you're the best! I can't wait to see what Goten and Trunk say to each other! YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:51 CDT
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(chapter 5) King Vegeat is alive? I wonder why he can't move. This is one great story! I can't wait to read more. I hope I can see what happen to all the characters soon. There are so many things happening. Very good fic! You're a great writer. Update soon. YYY
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Title: Ancient History: The Forgotten Past of the Saiyans
Reviewed By: YaoiYaoiYeah On: October 11, 2004 01:50 CDT
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(chapter 4) This fic is getting more and more intense by the chapter. What a mess. I feel bad for Chichi, she seems nice and she does care for Goku. I won't know what to do if I keep getting older than my husband and he is in love with someone else. Another great chpater. YYY
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