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| "Corporate Deception: Fate of Her Land" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Reviewed By: InuyashaGirlie (Not logged in) On: March 08, 2005 17:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I've been pretty much reading your story straight through since yesterday! It's awsome! You have excellent plot ideas and everything is written perfectly, so that it easy to picture how everything is happening in my mind! You really have a knack for writing fanfiction and I have to say that I LOVE the length of your chapters! :) I was on the edge of my seat the entire time I was reading! I found the whole soul-communication very original. I don't think I've ever heard of anyone ever using it. :) Very original! Anyway, please update when you can! Your writing is excellent!
| Reviewed By: kittyfire [MediaMiner Member] On: March 04, 2005 01:14 CST
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oh. my. god. this story rocks! ok ill be honest with you. ive seen the description of your story several times and brushed it off, but then i decided to give it a chance and i was blown away.this is amazingly original and very descriptive anf fulfilling. you really give substance in your chapters and dont leave readers hanging.i know you just updated today (yay!) but please update again soon . thank you for writing this, i really enjoy it.
| Title: chapter13
Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2005 15:36 CST
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so interesting this new chapter! Another juicy Inu/Kag lemon.... and poor Souta! so in love but so unlucky! I also hope that the situation between Sesshoumaru and Kagura will improve... I like very much this couple. I'm happy you mentioned the Modena because I live in Modena! ^^ I was really excited when I saw that name for the car... ^^ In Modena are produced the Ferrari and the Maserati, but don't think that everyone here has a car like that... -____-
| Reviewed By: Tarzan from fanfic.net On: March 02, 2005 21:59 CST
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loved it, another great chapter. what's gonna happen now that naraku has the jewel?dun dun dun
| Reviewed By: Patchcat (not signed in, too lazy) On: March 02, 2005 17:25 CST
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I've enjoyed this story for a fairly good while and have found it to be a truly captivating piece. The plot is well thought out and engaging, the character interactions flow marvelously, and everything is very well-paced and natural. The only thing I found a problem with was in your most recent chapter, and it's not even really a problem, per se. This is what I found: Sesshomaru's sword is called Tensaiga, Inuyasha's sword is Tesseiga. You correctly identified Tensaiga a couple of times and then you didn't and it got a little confusing. I only point this out because I have enjoyed your work so very much, and I'm sure it was just an oversight -- especially considering how long your chapters are. Well, that's all I have to say for now. I look forward to your next update. Laters, Patch
| Reviewed By: cj flutterbye On: March 02, 2005 15:51 CST
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Death, devastation, chaos - seems your work here is done!! A very full chapter - If Kaugra hadn't kept it a secret from Sess, then they probably could have saved Kanna - but alas - she wasn't thinking that far ahead. I look forward to your next chapter.
| Reviewed By: cjflutterbye [MediaMiner Member] On: February 27, 2005 16:00 CST
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I see that you are still working on this - and I'm curious to see the state of the shrine grounds by the time Inu and Kagome come up for air. I'm looking forward to reading more of your story.
| Title: ‘You go, dawg!’
Reviewed By: Youkai Musashi (apparently not signed in ::kicks mm.org:: On: February 10, 2005 12:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dear Kami ::fans herself:: Girl...you...you...darn you! lol. Amazing. Incredibly hot and Sweet, particularly their auras communicating. Absolutely LOVED that...Again, Miroku was Priceless. Shippo was his cute adorable self, and Sesshy got a funny line! lol...this said in his tone of voice definetely makes it funnier...'if the two of you spend any more time in your bed you'll both forget how to walk.' Poor, poor baby Souta ::cuddles Souta:: But girl, not only was this steamy (literally lol) and beautifully written, it had cuteness to spare, and their auras Speaking to each other, not just reacting like they often do in fics after mating, was an awesome, sweet touch :) I adored it. "I'd say you're going down, but really, it's me who's doing that." Naughty naughty Kags lol. I could go on forever about this story, this chapter, but I want more now! As for now: VERY THANK YOU!!! :) For sharing this great fic! I'm looking forward for more! And I'll start reading your other works right away! YOU GO GIRL! Bravo for another awesome chap! Man I can't get the image of Inu dressed in a straw hat and Hawaiian shirt lol...and he would STILL look HOT as Hell...I'll shut up now :) Muchas arigato! YM
| Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2005 16:16 CST
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Your story is already on my 'must-read' list: congratulations, great plot (an original one and so well described is not very common) and wonderful writing-style. I couldn't move from my chair till I finished reading the story. ^^ In a few words... I love it! Pease keep writing ^^ I'm so curious that I can't wait to read next chapter ^_~
| Title: Is it hot in Argentina or is it just me?
Reviewed By: youkai musashi (apparently not signed in) On: February 07, 2005 10:08 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa. Absolutely. Amazing. Hot. Steamy. Sweet. Sexy. Erotic. Beautiful. Wow! Did I mention HOT? Girl...this just keeps getting better and better and...whoa! Lemon lemon lemon! ::happy dance:: Gods you're GOOD! ::fans herself:: Phew...oh dear. I was melting there, girl, reading this intense and sweet and oh so HOT lemon! On another note, I especially adored the way you portray Rin, the way she handles herself and speaks, just like her Sesshoumaru-dad indeed :) And Rin and Souta...definetely could work :) Would make a sweet loving pack, a big happy family :) Can't wait for Kagura and Sessh to have their own happy ending, they definetely deserve it, especially poor Kagura...I loved the way you explained further about Kik and Naraku's relationship...and arghh he was so...so Naraku! in the interview...ok I'll stop now or I'll end up babbling :) Amazing chap, amazing story, can't wait to read what's coming next, but also don't want it to end!!! What's a faithful reader to do? :) Thanks for sharing!!! YM
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2005 10:33 CST
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Tis always interesting to see what changes from the draft to the posted version :) I love the whole concept of "soul-voice"...love it, love it, love it! Your creativity just dazzles me over and over again! And I know you think of this chapter as "filler" but it's so necessary to the story - so much has happened, the characters need time to process the major stuff! Kagome-Inu have finally (thank the gods!) mated and that changes things for them but also for the rest of their pack. Then there is poor Souta who is dealing with the knowledge that he almost had his soul stolen by his girlfriend. Hmm...and what's this going on with Rin when it comes to Souta, eh? All heavy and emotional stuff. But I just adored your elements of humor... Inu's line of "Very thank you" in broken Japanese made me crack up a second time...not to mention the way I'm picturing him in this obnoxious tropical shirt. (cackles maniacally!) Of course the lemons are wonderful...and this hentai fan appreciates them! Can't wait to see what comes next!
| Title: Return of Tetsusaiga
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 18:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. Amazing battle. It was like watching it! Oh I almost forgot ::cuddles Kouga-kun:: Awww ain't he sweet when he's not being dense? :) I loved the Kouga and Inuyasha scene, and particularly ADORED Kagura in this. I simply love Kagura :) Her giving Yasha the finger was priceless lol. Please give her a happy ending with Sess! ::batts eyelashes:: Damn this chapter rocked! Although I'm still not sure about Kanna...but hey like I said, it's AU! :) Evil Naraku...you'll have to give me battle scene tips one day! :) This was awesome...and Kagome was great in this chap, again, everyone IC (I do think Kagura has a sense of humor, she's just priceless...) except for Kanna, and Kouga did surprise me a bit by showing some intelligence, but then he slipped back to his old self :) I'm being Mean to Kouga-kun and I do love him ::cuddles him some more:: And sweet Yasha watching over Kags...and her leaving him ramen...awwww...ok, I'll stop now :) Another great chapter...and things are getting better...biting my nails here! :)
| Title: Evil Evil Naraku...
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 10:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Arghh! How could he? ::sobs:: Well obviously because he's Naraku lol. But I'm so hurt here! ::cuddles poor Inu and Kags:: So glad you ended the chap like that though :) This was again wonderful! I love this fic so much! I added it to both mm.org favs and AFFN :) I particularly liked Yasha's eloquent response as to why he had pushed Kags back: "Because, Damnit! Just because." lol...very Inu-ish indeed...poor puppy eared sexy hanyou...so happy he's not still clinging to clay bitch Kik even after he understood why she thought he'd betrayed her...um sorry, not clay, just bitch Kik...I really really love it how you're fitting mostly all of the cast of the series in this fic! Again, bravo! Can't wait for next chap! Although I'm beginning to think I'm purposely delaying this so I'm not left without a ch of your fic to read...lol...Great job girl!
| Title: Amazing!!!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2005 12:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kami girl! This ch had Everything...so wonderfully written, it had sexual tension, sweet sweet lime, (man I can't wait for the lemon if this is your lime!), comedy (I Love Miroku...he's so cute in a lecherous sort of way), cuteness (Rin and Shippo awwww), a bit of angst, suspense...nothing was missing! I really loved Sess in this! And allow me ::sits Inu:: Baka! I SO loved it when Kags told him to sit...Particularly loved this quote: "In fact, she was happier that he had learned to trust than she was that it was her that he trusted in." And so many many others, can't keep cutting and pasting lol! Girl the lime was exquisite. I must admit I had written a similar lime scene although not as well...(to the kitchen scene, except Inu is in human form, when she's stradling him) for my next ch, so now I'll have to change it! ::wail:: (See, I didn't sob!) Oh and one more thing ::beats Kikyou up with a shovel:: Ahem...had to do that... grrr...so glad Inu didn't fall for her crap! Sess is truly priceless in this...and amazingly enough, IC! Particularly loved the way you described his 'smile'. But now I'm SAD! Wanna see them happy!!! ::cuddles Inu and Kags:: Again, this ch had it ALL! Bravo! Can't wait to read more!!! YM
| Title: Great story
Reviewed By: Kagome_LinkinPark [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 21:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry you haven't gotten as many reviews as you deserve because honestly your story is one of the most creative and well writen ones I've ever seen. It's original and well just amazing. I hope you update soon because your story is just well wow. Great work and well just wow. I guess that's just the best way to describe it. Hope you keep writing and don't let a lack of reviews keep you down!
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