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| "Corporate Deception: Fate of Her Land" Reviews/Comments [ 57 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: Is it hot in Argentina or is it just me?
Reviewed By: youkai musashi (apparently not signed in) On: February 07, 2005 10:08 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa. Absolutely. Amazing. Hot. Steamy. Sweet. Sexy. Erotic. Beautiful. Wow! Did I mention HOT? Girl...this just keeps getting better and better and...whoa! Lemon lemon lemon! ::happy dance:: Gods you're GOOD! ::fans herself:: Phew...oh dear. I was melting there, girl, reading this intense and sweet and oh so HOT lemon! On another note, I especially adored the way you portray Rin, the way she handles herself and speaks, just like her Sesshoumaru-dad indeed :) And Rin and Souta...definetely could work :) Would make a sweet loving pack, a big happy family :) Can't wait for Kagura and Sessh to have their own happy ending, they definetely deserve it, especially poor Kagura...I loved the way you explained further about Kik and Naraku's relationship...and arghh he was so...so Naraku! in the interview...ok I'll stop now or I'll end up babbling :) Amazing chap, amazing story, can't wait to read what's coming next, but also don't want it to end!!! What's a faithful reader to do? :) Thanks for sharing!!! YM
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2005 10:33 CST
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Tis always interesting to see what changes from the draft to the posted version :) I love the whole concept of "soul-voice"...love it, love it, love it! Your creativity just dazzles me over and over again! And I know you think of this chapter as "filler" but it's so necessary to the story - so much has happened, the characters need time to process the major stuff! Kagome-Inu have finally (thank the gods!) mated and that changes things for them but also for the rest of their pack. Then there is poor Souta who is dealing with the knowledge that he almost had his soul stolen by his girlfriend. Hmm...and what's this going on with Rin when it comes to Souta, eh? All heavy and emotional stuff. But I just adored your elements of humor... Inu's line of "Very thank you" in broken Japanese made me crack up a second time...not to mention the way I'm picturing him in this obnoxious tropical shirt. (cackles maniacally!) Of course the lemons are wonderful...and this hentai fan appreciates them! Can't wait to see what comes next!
| Title: Return of Tetsusaiga
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2005 18:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. Amazing battle. It was like watching it! Oh I almost forgot ::cuddles Kouga-kun:: Awww ain't he sweet when he's not being dense? :) I loved the Kouga and Inuyasha scene, and particularly ADORED Kagura in this. I simply love Kagura :) Her giving Yasha the finger was priceless lol. Please give her a happy ending with Sess! ::batts eyelashes:: Damn this chapter rocked! Although I'm still not sure about Kanna...but hey like I said, it's AU! :) Evil Naraku...you'll have to give me battle scene tips one day! :) This was awesome...and Kagome was great in this chap, again, everyone IC (I do think Kagura has a sense of humor, she's just priceless...) except for Kanna, and Kouga did surprise me a bit by showing some intelligence, but then he slipped back to his old self :) I'm being Mean to Kouga-kun and I do love him ::cuddles him some more:: And sweet Yasha watching over Kags...and her leaving him ramen...awwww...ok, I'll stop now :) Another great chapter...and things are getting better...biting my nails here! :)
| Title: Evil Evil Naraku...
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 10:11 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Arghh! How could he? ::sobs:: Well obviously because he's Naraku lol. But I'm so hurt here! ::cuddles poor Inu and Kags:: So glad you ended the chap like that though :) This was again wonderful! I love this fic so much! I added it to both mm.org favs and AFFN :) I particularly liked Yasha's eloquent response as to why he had pushed Kags back: "Because, Damnit! Just because." lol...very Inu-ish indeed...poor puppy eared sexy hanyou...so happy he's not still clinging to clay bitch Kik even after he understood why she thought he'd betrayed her...um sorry, not clay, just bitch Kik...I really really love it how you're fitting mostly all of the cast of the series in this fic! Again, bravo! Can't wait for next chap! Although I'm beginning to think I'm purposely delaying this so I'm not left without a ch of your fic to read...lol...Great job girl!
| Title: Amazing!!!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2005 12:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kami girl! This ch had Everything...so wonderfully written, it had sexual tension, sweet sweet lime, (man I can't wait for the lemon if this is your lime!), comedy (I Love Miroku...he's so cute in a lecherous sort of way), cuteness (Rin and Shippo awwww), a bit of angst, suspense...nothing was missing! I really loved Sess in this! And allow me ::sits Inu:: Baka! I SO loved it when Kags told him to sit...Particularly loved this quote: "In fact, she was happier that he had learned to trust than she was that it was her that he trusted in." And so many many others, can't keep cutting and pasting lol! Girl the lime was exquisite. I must admit I had written a similar lime scene although not as well...(to the kitchen scene, except Inu is in human form, when she's stradling him) for my next ch, so now I'll have to change it! ::wail:: (See, I didn't sob!) Oh and one more thing ::beats Kikyou up with a shovel:: Ahem...had to do that... grrr...so glad Inu didn't fall for her crap! Sess is truly priceless in this...and amazingly enough, IC! Particularly loved the way you described his 'smile'. But now I'm SAD! Wanna see them happy!!! ::cuddles Inu and Kags:: Again, this ch had it ALL! Bravo! Can't wait to read more!!! YM
| Title: Great story
Reviewed By: Kagome_LinkinPark [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2005 21:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry you haven't gotten as many reviews as you deserve because honestly your story is one of the most creative and well writen ones I've ever seen. It's original and well just amazing. I hope you update soon because your story is just well wow. Great work and well just wow. I guess that's just the best way to describe it. Hope you keep writing and don't let a lack of reviews keep you down!
| Title: Beautiful ::fans herself::
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2005 08:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Gosh! Your 'lemonade' was far better than many lemons I have read...this WAS IC, even if you don't seem to think so...::fans herself again:: Man you're evil ;) But this was Right and hot and Very intense, and in my humble opinion, it wouldn't really have been right at this point if they mated Now...even if I want them to lol. But man I CAN'T WAIT lol...hentai me...but this was such sweet HOT lemonade! Want more! It was wonderful that they did not rush things in this particular ch, although like Miroku put it wisely "Inuyasha definetely needs to get some" lol. Loved it loved it loved it!!! Again, bravo, amazing job, incredible sexual tension...incredibly heated chap...gosh! AGAIN, GREAT JOB GIRL! Man this fic ROCKS! Lifetime supply of ramen and pocky for you! YM
| Title: Kisses, Sexual Tension, And Chosen Ones, Oh My
Reviewed By: Youkai Musashi (again not signed in...) [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2005 15:25 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Baka me, I realized I didn't put an overall rating in my last review! So here it is: 10,10,10,10 and finally TEN :) Me wants more kissing and Inu-Kags fluff! Can I kill Kaede now? No wait I like the old hag...Ok, I definetely liked the Neko clan showing up here. And the Inu-Kags sexual tension is JUST beginning! Lovely lovely lovely! Did I ever mention I LOVE Kagura? Specially the Sess-Kagura pairing...please give poor Kagura a happy ending! She deserves it! And man I can't wait for next ch! Again, the characters' interaction is wonderful! Sess may be slightly OOC here, but it's AU so it doesn't count and I did say Slightly :) Plus it fits here perfectly. Not many people pay attention to Kagura...that's such a shame cause she's such an interesting, wonderful character. And I was just wondering...you mentioned Bakotsu, are u planning to add the Shichinintai here as well? I shouldn't really ask anything til I'm through reading all the chaps, so nevermind...Absolutely ADORED the kissing scene! So SWEET...and the trust growing between them is Very important so glad you wrote that! Can't wait can't wait for more! YM
| Title: Awesome!
Reviewed By: Youkai Musashi (too lazy to sign in) On: January 30, 2005 09:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Hi! I couldn't catch up with my reading yesterday so today I'll read more! But I wanted to leave a review on this chap...absolutely loved it! It was so cute! Again to avoid filling a review with the bits I liked best...this is one of my favorites in this chap: Every way in which they communicated with each other was nothing short of passionate. Indeed :) I adored this! And oh dear Kikyou is there ::growls:: Poor Yasha ::cuddles Inu:: Things are just getting better and better...I have to run now but I'll email you and read the next chap when I come back :) Again, amazing work girl! Bravo! Standing ovation for this chap and the whole story thus far :) And gods it's Only the beginning! I'm so excited about this fic! You rock! Love and ramen (and pocky) YM
| Title: Third review!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2005 07:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This chap was so much fun! Particularly LOVED Yasha and Kags' driving lessons :) Sooo Kouga is fast at Everything is he lol...oh dear...again the interaction with all of the characters is wonderful...and I love love Kagura! ::cuddles Kagura:: Evil Naraku...and little (not so little here) Rin is so cute, always adorable, and I went all AWWWWW when she called Sessh Sesshoumaru-dad! CUTE! This chap had it all! Though I must wonder about Kanna and Souta...hmm...that's a bit weird. But maybe it's just because Kanna freaks me out lol. I absolutely love how Yasha and Kags' relationship is growing...slowly but surely :) And the paint fight was just adorable! Also I particularly love this: 'Inuyasha was type of person who created his own first impression of a person and stuck by it. The more threatened he felt that he might be wrong, he would try that much harder to force that person into the mold he had created for them.' Very Inu-ish definetely...except for Kanna, everyone is perfectly IC in here! But it's AU so Kanna can do what she damn wants :) Let's just hope she doesn't hurt cute Souta or I'll cry ::hugs So-u-ta:: I loved that too! Just like his sis :) Again wonderful job! Can't wait to read more!!! Your loyal reader, Youkai Musashi
| Title: Second review!
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2005 07:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I absolutely totally ADORED chapter 2!!! Again, completely IC, particularly loved Miroku and Sango's interaction, and Inu and Kags' first meeting was perfect :) I considered cutting and pasting my favorites bits but realised they wouldn't fit here :P And anyway...I don't know where you'd get the idea this chapter was boring!!! Lol...and now sexy puppy hanyou smelled wolf...oh dear, I can't wait for chap 3!!! And more Inu-Kags! YAY! Me happy :) So glad I got to find this story! Thanks for sharing! I'll be back tomorrow for more! Love and ramen! Youkai Musashi
| Title: YoukaiMusashi (not signed in)
Reviewed By: YoukaiMusashi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2005 09:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I've only read the 1st chap so far and I can't wait to read more! I don't usually read AU fics, but yours was highly praised and recommended to me and now I can see the reasons! :) You're very talented, girl, and you have This Youkai Musashi hooked! I can't wait to come back from work and read more! Amazing job! You're a great writer, and the characters ARE IC if you ask me so far :) And if at some point in the fic they're not...well it's AU, ne? :) I'm SO loving this fic! I'll leave you a review every time I finish reading a chap, I hope I can get the time to read it all in one go! But the more reviews the better, right! And I want to post my opinion on every chap, if you don't mind! Again, great job!!! I'm impressed!
| Reviewed By: renatanocis [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2005 19:54 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This chapter isn't boring! Character development is fun to read. I really like how you write Sango.
| Reviewed By: scherezade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2005 17:34 CST
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I am an abysmal, abysmal person! I throw myself at your feet for not being able to give you feedback sooner. First of all, you've made me sooooo happy! The lemon...the much anticipated lemon...finally here! Scherezade does the "happy hentai" dance :) The lemon scene had a good balance between tenderness and dominant inu - and you know, I love me some dominant inu! :) On another note, you had a great line that just made me laugh! "Kagome noted that having a boyfriend with hair longer than her own could be an advantage." Not because it's funny...but b/c it's so true! Inuyasha and Sessh must have some damn fine haircare products...would make any girl who doesn't have a pixie hairdo feel like she's died and gone to hair product heaven! Also, I thought you did a nice job with Kikyou's reflection on the Onigumo/Naraku situation. She's been showing her softer side lately...makes it a little harder to just hate her. Oh well, we can still try, ne? You already know that I think your fic is great! Good balance between action and emotion...I could definitley get some pointers from you on how to write an action scene! Well...things are coming to a head...especially because nobody seems to realize where the Shikon is yet! Cue evil music! Another fine chapter from you!
| Reviewed By: Esther Tan On: January 18, 2005 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You updated!!!! Thank you. Love yr story & wow this chapter is a feast to me as its long. I love the way you make Inuyasha like the anime still a jerk but more sensitive. Oh I hope they can rescue Kanna soon. Hope Naraku gets his dessert soon that evil noodle head!!! Like the way you make Inuyasha more decisive & hey at least your story let him tells Kagome of his love. Please update soon. Its so way exciting.
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