| "Herbie's Drive Through Nerma" Reviews/Comments [ 41 ] |
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: February 10, 2005 22:10 CST
Comment/Review:
Pretty good. Nice action scene, nice plot development. 8/10
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Reviewed By: HyperMan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2005 12:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I finished all the chapters! I can't wait to read more and see how Ranma and Akane get along with their doubles. I also can't wait to see how Nodoka and Genma get along. By the way, when is Happosia going to appear?
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Title: Chapter 14
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: February 04, 2005 22:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was good chapter I enjoyed the reactions Kana had to seeing how Ukyo reacted to Ranma and Akane being in love. I also enjoyed seeing their first meeting with each other and the plane scene. Plus you brought a nice little end to the chapter. Another good chapter.
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Reviewed By: HyperMan [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2005 11:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't believe what you did to Ryouga! Bad author, bad! Still, its a great story and I can't wait to read more. I like what you did with Nodoka's sword, very poetic. Is Ryouga going to make another appearace, or is this the last time I'll see my favorite character? Maybe he will get lost going to D-Block and end up outside?
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Title: Chapter 13
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: January 24, 2005 00:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another fine chapter. I liked how you referenced a prior Herbie movie. The fight was well written and you handled the trust issues between the villagers and Genma very well. Keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: January 23, 2005 23:42 CST
Comment/Review:
Nice use of action and dramatic effect, man. And, as always, that wheelie is a classic.
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: November 22, 2004 00:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad. I would have liked some action this time around, but I can sense that you're building up to something.
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Title: Chapter 11
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: November 14, 2004 00:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a nice little set up chapter. The differences between the Nerima crew and their doubles come across nicely.
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Reviewed By: General Mayhem On: November 11, 2004 23:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad. Kind of low on action, but that's to be expected from a setup chapter. Nice work, as usual.
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: November 08, 2004 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, though I would have been a tad more original in the race scene, and I believe you were a bit too harsh on one certain character. (Why can no-one see fit to give the Blue-Haired One a break?)
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Title: Chapter Ten
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: November 08, 2004 01:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An interesting chapter. I liked how you handled the race recreating the tunnel scene from one of the early Herbie movies. I also liked how you handled the whole Shampoo situation too. A lot of people think that Cologne makes Shampoo go after Ranma because of the kiss. They don't realize that she could just be following Amazon laws as well as trying to get a strong person like Ranma in the tribe. Not many seem to go with the school of thought that Shampoo could be doing a lot of what she does on her own and not because of the Kiss of Marriage or the Kiss of Death. Another fine chapter. It'll be interesting to see how the next one goes.
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Title: Chapters Eight and Nine
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: November 02, 2004 23:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Overall these were very enjoyable chapters but I did notice a couple of spelling mistakes. In chapter eight beated should either be beat or beaten depending on what the sentence was supposed to say. In chapter nine you misspelled either ether. But other than that the chapters went very well and you brought up a problem that will be interesting to see how it becomes resolved.
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: October 28, 2004 15:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
Just keeps getting better and better. This race should be.....interesting.
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Reviewed By: Jarkota On: October 21, 2004 22:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pretty good. You've captured Herbie perfectly, and the fight scenes are reminiscent of some old ECW tapes I've seen as well as current WWE matches. I'd like to see more like this.
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Title: Chapter Seven
Reviewed By: Chibihalo On: October 19, 2004 22:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a cute chapter. You handled the warm and fuzziness of it quite well. I liked your explination for Mousse being legally blind. It'll be interesting to see how things develop.
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