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Title: new chapter
Reviewed By: Dragon Charm [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2004 18:32 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another chapter so fast! Wow! But you shouldn't fell pressured by your readers to update, because if you rush things then it doesn't turn out as good. Anyway, well done. ^^ ~Ja ne
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Title: ^-^
Reviewed By: Dragon Charm [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2004 22:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just finished reading your story and it is very good, the plot is excellent as well and I love how crazy some of the characters are! Although some grammer and spelling need to be fixed in certain places but other then that, I look forward for the next chapter! Update as soon as you can before I lose my sanity over it! ~Ja ne
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Reviewed By: animefreak11 *not logged in* On: December 05, 2004 21:32 CST
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err..... i don't know!!! :P oh yeah!!! maybe... someone can help me decide what to do as a career for my future??? does that sound good??? ^___^ anyway....yeah fun chapter!!!! UPDATE!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Reikka_Shinen [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2004 20:35 CST
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Wow! That was so good. You should definitly update. But here our a couple of things I think you should improve on. First of all you should really pay attention to your grammer and spelling because when you're reading the story it gets really annoying when there are so many mispelled words. I mean you're a really good writer and if you improved your writing and grammer it would be like... the Ultimate fan fic! Whooooooooo! *Ahem* Anyway, the second thing you should improve on is that you said it was a Hiei and Vera fan fic, but Hiei has hardly even been in it. And last of all, I think that the stroy is going way to slow. I really like your style of writing but I almost didn't finish it because it was a little boring. But over all I'd say if you would improve on that stuff ( only if you want) your fan fic would be the ULTIMATE FAN FIC!!!!!! Wow I can't beleive I wrote so much! I only have 550 characters left. WHOO! Okay I'm done.
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Reviewed By: animefreak11 *too lazy* On: December 04, 2004 19:37 CST
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me got my wish!!!!! ^^ i think.... *pensive* err... anyway...vera is sinking?? yusuke you jerk!!!!!! *slap* go save her!!!!!!!!!!!!! :P jk.... anyway... update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Cursed Shadow On: December 04, 2004 18:07 CST
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Baka onna...update soon...
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Reviewed By: Cloaked in Darkness On: December 04, 2004 18:06 CST
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..........(sheths katana}....update soon
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Reviewed By: Life of Freedom [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2004 17:46 CST
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yay! update really soon. hiei has a freaky sister.... yukina is his younger sister too, ya know. anyway, i like. cant wait for next update. ~Darkfire~
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Reviewed By: Cloaked in Darkness On: November 28, 2004 15:26 CST
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Update soon........*girl is tied up in the backround screaming for help.*
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Reviewed By: Cursed Shadow On: November 28, 2004 15:24 CST
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Update soon.
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Reviewed By: aru-inu On: November 28, 2004 09:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you have an odd mind... sweet! great job with the story! please update really soon!
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Reviewed By: animefreak11 *not logged in* On: November 27, 2004 23:26 CST
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!! THANKIES!!!!!!!!!! *hugs* i got a new watch and mini stereo... and... i saw a movie!!!!!! ^_^ -_- crap i have to do ALL my hw tomorow... >> awwww man!!!! i hate school... oh well.......^_____________^ thanks!!!! and UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!! ^_~
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Reviewed By: Life of Freedom [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2004 20:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
just my opinion, but i think it would be easier to read if you give each characters speaking their own line. but this was an intriging (sp?) start. yes, sorta depressing, but hey. i will continue to read. ~Darkfire~
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Reviewed By: jenniferhlub On: November 23, 2004 18:01 CST
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This is a great story you wrote. I hope you update soon. I really hope Vera ends up With Hiei or else I am not going to read this story and review anymore.*thinks sadly for saying that*I am sorry for saying it is just I hate it how Hiei is never being paired with anyone in the story and Kurama is always getting paired.
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Reviewed By: Animefreak11 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2004 21:26 CST
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lollypop????? lol me no have it *glaces at lollypop on desk*grabs* well now i don't....^^U anyway!!!! weird chapter...lol and no unfortunetely u can't get rid of school easily...maybe during summer vacation... >> the only escape!!! ^^ freedom!!!! -_-U err... anyway yeah....update!!!
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