| "Snow White and the Seven 'Dwarfs'...Sort of" Reviews/Comments [ 135 ] |
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Title: let's try that again
Reviewed By: killthetoaddemon (she who forgot to hit the login button) On: July 04, 2005 13:19 CDT
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um....it didn't let the last one show up so here it is again. ^_^``` Oops, forgot to review. >> >
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Reviewed By: killthetoaddemon (she who forgot to hit the login button) On: July 04, 2005 13:17 CDT
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Oops, forgot to review. >> >
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Title: hehehehehehehe...
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn ( am i ever signed in?) On: July 03, 2005 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow.... you dont have to bow i can't even remember what i helped you with! but i'll take that thankx anyway... so how was spain? my school when this year but only certin people with money could go pluse i'm not smart enough i'd get lost fast! lmao well keep up your good work and update again soon please? Ja mata Ne!! hey i learned a new word wanna hear it? Hajimameshita? lmao guess what it means! *sit's up all proper* ahemmm..... How do you do?....... *cricket cricket* lmao that's one word for that short sentence go figure!well update again soon pleasE?
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Title: I AM SO SORRY!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Penthesileia [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2005 20:03 CDT
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Ok, I doubt anyone is going to read this, becasue really, who looks at other people reviews? But just in case, I want to say I am so sorry about not updating latey. Little thing I want to call WRITER'S BLOCK. (damn, it's a pain in the ass) Anyway, anyone who can send me any ideas or suggestions on what they think I should do next I'll...I'll do something for you as soon as I think of something. Maybe if it's a good idea I'll write you/your person in the story at some point or something esle, I don't know. Oh and if anyone did read this and does have a idea and actually sends it to me as a review or e-mail (whatevers easier for you) I still won't be able to update till after July 1, since I'M GOING TO SPAIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Oh yeah, leaving tommorw, can't wait. Well, whoever you are that read this thank you for bothering, and I hope you can help me get out of writer's block. Hopefully I'll see you all when I get back. Have a nice day/week/summer! (One more thing, I'm THINKING about getting a beta. Anyone want to edit my chapters if I do?)
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Title: help!
Reviewed By: temtation of the soul [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2005 12:53 CDT
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oh my god! you have to update! i'm grounded from the computer, tv, phone, and all other luxuries of this century becuase my grades slipped and i sneek onto the computer to see if you've updated...AND YOU HAVEN'T!!! IT'S KILLING ME! PLEASE! SAVE MY SOUL AND UPDATE!!!!!
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Title: UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Phrisky On: May 28, 2005 02:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love, o and who knocked inuyasha out!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! please update soon and i luv ur story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you for your time, luv ya lots, ~Tora-Chan RAWER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NYA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (get it, cause tora means tiger and nya means meow!!!!!) =^.^= ja ne!
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Reviewed By: Kya77 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 02:28 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the story. The only advice I'll give is to get a beta reader, someone who will help you with grammer and spelling and fix wordings. I know that when you write something yourself you don't always see the errors you make, because you know how you wanted it and see it that way. I really like how you have done things. As for lemon writing give stimulating details like.... Inuyasha slowly reached out his hand to touch Kagome's face not sure if what he saw was real or just a dream. As his hand conected with her flesh he felt a small tingle run up his arm and all the way down his spine. He softly caressed her face and gently moved down to her neck. He pulled her closer and kissed her. Kagome was on fire she burned from the spot where he touched her and the kiss was taking her breath away. Inuyasha started to remove her clothes while he was kissing her. You know like that for a romantic lemon start and continue on. I hope that helps.
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Reviewed By: xxstarry_dreamzxx [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2005 17:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your fanfic!! nd i vote for love cuz i realli dont like kikyo..>
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 12:54 CDT
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well a beta is like an editor. u write a chapter, email it 2 whoever u choose as ur beta & the beta basically proof reads it, fixes ne spelling, grammar & ne other mistakes like that & sends the fixed chapter back 2 u & u post that 1.
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Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 05:44 CDT
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I like your story very much and I don't think is corny ^^ Interesting chapter! Nice the interaction between Inuyasha and his inner youkai, surprising the one between Kouga and his own youkai ^^ It seems you'll put together Hiten&Kagura and Sesshoumaru&Rin... I personally prefer Sesshoumaru&Kagura, but don't mind Sessh&Rin. I hope to read soon an Inu/Kag lemon ^^ I think he should take her from behind (doggy-style ^^)One of my fav positions *blush* but only in fanfictions (I have yet to find a boyfriend.... I feel very much like Bridget Jones, just that I don't smoke and I'm not as stupid as her...) well, keep working please!
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Title: lmao
Reviewed By: InuYashasLoveLorn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 04:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
lmao *bows to author* ..... now you bow to me b/c i just read this magasine article about writing lemons!!! ^__^ got a bible near by?.... read the song of songs it's in the old testamet some how it's very erotic lemon poem got smuggled in and never take out!!!! never use the words penis or vagaina or any pet names for them (i'm sure you kno what mean) call nipples 'nipples' there is no other name for them suggest things like insted of saying " and she grabed my penis" say " and she reached for me" you see our Hentai minds will kno what you hinting at! um..... there where some more but i can't remember them all but hey i'm lemon sucked although i was told it was good i think it sucked! but you can go ahead and read it hey go ahead and steal it for all i care! ^___^ just update again soon please?
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Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 15:27 CDT
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I absolutely love this story!! I find it original and funny, even if some things are disgusting (Naraku and Kikyo having sex... uuuuuurgh! I'm gonna retch!)... I can't wait to see (better, read)Inuyasha's reaction when he'll know that 'his' Kagome is still alive... Please keep writing and update asap!
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Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 14:19 CDT
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omg i luv this story! kikyo shud definately fall in luv w/ inu. hehehe break her heart. i can not wait till ur next update! i only have 1 critisism & thats about the spelling. u shud get spell check or a beta. other than that its a wicked awesum fic, keep it up! Cat
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Title: wow....
Reviewed By: InuYashasloveLorn (nsi sry) On: May 07, 2005 11:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
so that's where rin was! although i never guessed that rin was one of them!!! keep up the good work and update again soon please?
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Reviewed By: GWPH On: May 05, 2005 15:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GO KANNA. I hate kikyou with a passion and i hope that bitch gets what she's been beging for, A GOOD BITCH BEAT DOWN. Overall, great fan fic can't wait to see next chapter. ~later~
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