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Reviewed By: hynkkel On: September 05, 2010 02:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like it immensely, the idea of asuka getting acclimated to sex. the side stories were alright but not really important to the story line. and yes, i agree with some of the other reviewers that shinji should get some time in the dream machine, but more than that. i want to know when will asuka realize that the dream machine is not real and the shinji, her shinji, is just a product of her mind. that the dream machine has just become a crutch for her, hikari while definitely perverted, is still in a healthy relationship with touji. i can only wonder what will result from asuka's sexual experiences going so far, and shinji's remain nonexistent. i believe that one day she will have to face that she can't have the shinji in the machine as a life long companion and that if she wants, shinji, the real shinji, then she's going to have to do something. she's going to have to reach out and conquer her walls, she rejected the real shinji in the elevator but then turned around and had wild sex with her shinji in the dream machine. the gap is broadening, and that's not good, and i wonder how the author is going to fix this. which i hope he does
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Title: Shinji's Turn?
Reviewed By: Ranko Ketchum [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2009 14:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic so far and I can't wait to see what happens next, though I got to ask, will you be doing a side story for Shinji, I mean after all he is a Eva Pilot so wouldn't it be right to sent him up for a time in that machine, or you have do it where Asuka or Misato trick him into getting into it or Ritsuko tells him to climb into it for a test she has to run.
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Reviewed By: Psycho_Z [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2009 23:12 CDT
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ARISE FROM THE GRAVE! This sure has been an interesting week, with two of my favorite writers updating stories for the first time in a long time. Either way, I don't think I've commented on this story before. It's awesome, great kinky lemon that is probably beneath your obvious skills as a writer... Either way, you sure are good at writing smut and I'm more then willing to eat it up. Because I like stuff like this. Either way, don't take so long with the next awesome, awesome, explosive orgasm chapter.
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Title: BONDAGE...almost
Reviewed By: zamba136 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 15:36 CDT
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HIKARI'S A PERV! HAHAHAHAHAHA...she watch's too much bondage hentai! actually, hikari wasn't even OOC, most googy-goodies have dark fantasies of tainting their reputations in the dirtiest manners.
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Title: ummm
Reviewed By: zamba136 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2006 15:21 CDT
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ummm...is this considered masturbation?
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Title: Edge of the seat
Reviewed By: Miles Attacca [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2006 22:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found myself definitely breathless reading (and not just from the nature of the story). Great writing style, excellent wording, and even suspenseful: "What will Asuka have done to her next?" Doesn't just get your raw spirit going, but somehow more of your emotions as well. Great read -- make more! =)
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Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2006 00:47 CST
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*claps* very nice, most hawt. I must say, you keep excellently away from any plot, but I do see character development sneaking in now. Not that that's a bad thing, and I'm sort-of wondering whether Shinji will ever find out... and the hilarity that I'm sure will ensue. I'm also curious as to what Ritsuko's scenario is going to be... you've managed to come up with semi-original fantasies for the rest of the sidestories, so I'm expecting something good. I really liked the tentacle/bukkake/futanari in Misato's sidestory, and the last chapter, bondage with Asuka... the little bit of psychological shifts with Asuka were well-written and made it ever-so-sexier. Keep up the good work, I expect to see more.
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Reviewed By: Teesha17 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2006 01:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
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this chapter was soo bot what i was expecting. it surprised me big time. i never noticed that she had all the control. i'll have to be more observant next time.
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Title: Sweet...
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 19:29 CST
Comment/Review:
Niiice... excellant to see that you updated. Even better to see that this was a superb update. This chapter was excellant, you wrote out everything perfectly. I was particularly amused by that section where Hikari is talkin to Asuka about her particular experience with Toji, freakin hilarious. Great job, keep up the excellant work! d('')b
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Title: Great! :)
Reviewed By: Marcos_Edson [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2005 20:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
While I'm not into bondage stuff, this chapter made me have second thoughts on the matter, I guess it's thanks to you making it light as you pointed yourself... :) I really wouldn't mind to see a little more... :) Hikari almost deserves her own series already, it's fun to see the now former class rep in a different role and not the over used nice, house-wife type girl, not that I dislike it but wild girl Hikari looks cooler. :)
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: Daniel1469 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2005 21:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great part great story altogather but please update sooner i beg of you please
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Title: Chapter 7
Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2005 18:08 CST
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It certainly *does* show! Great chapter. I can tell you spent a lot of effort on it.
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Title: [Chapter 7] Wow.
Reviewed By: The Reanimated Raynor [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2005 16:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was one of the best lemon scenes I've ever written in this section of MediaMiner. Bar none. And if you continue writing scenes and subplots like that with the main plot of Dream Machine... you have a very real shot at becoming my favorite NGE lemon-scene writer. Ryn0r
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Reviewed By: AnzuNOTTea On: September 20, 2005 17:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, pretty good stuff. In my opinion, the idea of tentacles in the evangelion world is unusual enough to be cool. Please update ASAP.
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Reviewed By: Font On: September 17, 2005 08:42 CDT
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Man oh man, this is a pretty decent shitty lemon. Possibly the best lemon series I've read in a while. Wasn't exactly impressed when I first started reading, but it sort of grew on me as the chapters progressed. Now get off your lazy ass and write another chapter.
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