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Reviewed By: darthme1011 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2008 13:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sad its over not may Ai yori aoshi fanfics
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Title: dennisud
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2008 16:47 CDT
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This is my 2nd re-read of this saga, both parts and its till is a kick-ass story. I sincerely do hopyou do more stories with other sries Lika Tenchi muyo and Ramna 1/2! And PLESE do a full Evangelion saga! As for this one, I think you did a bang up job and adding what was 'hidden' ;-) from view! dennisdu
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Title: oh my gods
Reviewed By: dupped On: January 02, 2008 21:18 CST
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this is got to be in my top favorite fanfics. i could not stop reading them, heck i almost got in trouble by my boss at work, yes i read this at WORK! thats just how good this was.
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Title: Whew!!!
Reviewed By: Weapon-01 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 00:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was extreamly well writen, Through-out the entire chapters I found very few grammer errors. It combined a perfect blend of erotica and drama with hummor though-out. Espically at the end as Karou establishes the outcome of the Sakuraba group, that was written with enough detail but not overbearing to keep fellow readers intrested in the story. I wish I could say more, so I'll leave off by saying... Well Done!
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Title: Excellently done
Reviewed By: Midnight_Angel On: October 06, 2006 10:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The way you have written the entire Ai Yori Aoshi storyline is excellent. I have a request though, and I hope I will not be rebuked for putting this on your shoulders. Why don't you try writing Vandread and Burst Angel anime series from start to finish in a similar fashion as you have in Necessary Evils and Home?
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Title: Koeru's wet dream.
Reviewed By: Lafiel_Fan01 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2006 20:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well written despite minor spelling and Grammar errors. Less harsh or more subtle descriptives of the sex acts would be an enhancement for both stories. Pehaps you should also consider a revison/version of the story that removes most or all of the sex scenes. With agitation amoungst the Sakuraba Board of Directors over Aoi's wedding as the overall plot, and Taeko's illness as a sub-plot, the story would stiil be enjoyable and quite interesting without the sex. Somewhat random comments. "Neccessary Evil" reads like an H-game dating-sim, "Home" reads like the Harem ending for that dating-sim. While not truely a bad thing, it does make the story scripted and predictable. As with most dating sims, the only real variation is in the detais of the girls and the location of the various encounters. However, what a choice! Ai Yori Aoshi is a great romantic series whose main protagonists suffer from that eternal anime curse of a 'perfect relationship untainted by lust.' Your story casts all that aside, (except, temorarily, with poor Aoi,) and allows Kaoru to run up AYA's rating to an after midnight spot on Japanese TV, and an Adult Swim spot in the US. Various arguments could be made about Kaoru and Miyabi's loyalties. Would Kaoru just cast aside his chastity and devotion to Aoi? (Probably not.) Would Miyabi, (despite her reaction to Kaoru's 'hunky bod' early in the TV series,) simply make some plan and just jump in the sack with Kaoru? Again, probably not. Would the other girls jump Kaoru given the chance? Maybe to probably, if given the chance, but that circles back to 'would Kaoru bed anyone but Aoi?' Mayu and Chika bedding Kaoru is a tad risque and lolly, but at least pains were taken to specify ages. BUT!! "Neccessary Evil" and "Home" ARE Lemons, and what good would an 'Ai Yori Aoshi' Lemon be if Kaoru didn't get all the girls? Lafiel_Fan01
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Title: Well Done
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 10:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this fic. The characters were themselves, and their reactions to Kaoru were within reason. As a lemon it is definitive.
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Reviewed By: Gadoury8477 On: August 10, 2006 16:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awsome I read both stories. Too bad you don't want to continue.
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Title: As always
Reviewed By: Jehuty Zero [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2006 19:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellently done. to be honest, I'd give you a higher rating if I could.
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Title: Preggers delight!
Reviewed By: denisud On: July 11, 2006 08:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I kinda wished I knew which of the others was with child, and You could have written maybe the year they all had to go through their pregnancies w/o having to go into the future and specific kids! But so far may man, you stories Kick ass! I stayed up all night reading them!` dennisud
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Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2006 11:57 CDT
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Finally got a chance to catch up with this. Aoi's time at Kaoru's mother's grave was especially touching. What's really on Tina's mind? On to the next chapter... W.
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Reviewed By: flake On: March 08, 2006 02:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
Glad I did not read the entire thing word for word. 100 pages of long winded and weak, repetitive screw job's does not make a good story. weak.
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Reviewed By: foad [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2005 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know you stated you wanted to end the fic with the girls being pregnant, but I think it would interesting to see what thier life was like to about one month after the last baby was born.
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Reviewed By: clauswitz [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2005 14:51 CDT
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after having read this necessary evil and those who hunt eva i'm kinda curious as to why you never have any of the females with the male lead have anal sex? if it wasnt brought up at all it would be differant but since it is brought up several times and a fair number of the females indicate they wouldnt mind the reader is kinda left hanging...
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Reviewed By: tomdj1701 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2005 11:24 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story, great cliff hanger at the end of the 2nd chapter. I only wish that you put which girls where with chlid, but great story anyway.
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Reviewed By: deckman1063 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 12:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very pleasant read! Nice continuation of your previous stuff, less angst (I tend to gravitate towards waffy stuff, anyway). Good grammar, only minor errors here and there, mostly missing words. I am looking forward to a next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:28 CDT
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No sex in the story? C'mon. Where is the excitement? Please write lots of sex in the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:28 CDT
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No sex in the story? C'mon. Where is the excitement? Please write lots of sex in the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:27 CDT
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PL:EASE LET KAORU FUCK CHIKA!!!!!! I WANT CHIKA HAVE SEX WITH KAORU!!!! What are you waiting for?
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:27 CDT
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PL:EASE LET KAORU FUCK CHIKA!!!!!! I WANT CHIKA HAVE SEX WITH KAORU!!!! What are you waiting for?
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:27 CDT
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PL:EASE LET KAORU FUCK CHIKA!!!!!! I WANT CHIKA HAVE SEX WITH KAORU!!!! What are you waiting for?
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:27 CDT
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PL:EASE LET KAORU FUCK CHIKA!!!!!! I WANT CHIKA HAVE SEX WITH KAORU!!!! What are you waiting for?
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:26 CDT
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No sex in the story? C'mon. Where is the excitement? Please write lots of sex in the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Zauriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2005 01:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great start but PL:EASE LET KAORU FUCK CHIKA!!!!!! I WANT CHIKA HAVE SEX WITH KAORU!!!! What are you waiting for?
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