| "A Changed Miko" Reviews/Comments [ 148 ] |
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Title: This. Is. So. Good!
Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2005 14:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've rated this story this way because it is just an awsome fic! My muse agrees with me and I really love the chapters. Please update soon!
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Reviewed By: ookami san the animelover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2005 01:41 CDT
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nooooooooooo!!!!!!! you kill me i read this not 2 minets after you post it and you leave it there!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 i weep
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Reviewed By: rocknroll7806 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 23:41 CDT
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Wow! I love your story. Very "tense" lmao. Keep it up, i look forward to seeing more.
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Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 12:07 CDT
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*Very* nice! I really like the way you've portrayed Kagome. Playful, not malicious. Too many authors use the first meeting to make the spirit detectives look like idiots, and kagome seem like a spoiled, all-powerful jerk. Bravo! Just one little thing. It might not even be important enough to go back and change, but in japanese, there are no plurals, so whenever you used the word "mikos" it should really have just been "miko". Again, not a big deal at all, just though maybe you'd like to know. Can't wait for that next update!
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Reviewed By: phoenixs_paiste [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 11:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes! Please more MORE MORE!! I\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\'m so hooked already. I have to agree with Kin-chan Pandun about some of the things they said in their review. But I have to ssay that you are doing a great job of it so far and have managed to hook me in two chapters so keep doing what you\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\'ve been doing cause it\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\'s great. Mou! Are you gonna vote for pairs?? Cause I have to say Hiei if you are. But you know what I would think if you can pull it off, which it would be very hard cause Hiei\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\'s so possessive, then do a Kurama/Kagome/Hiei double mating. That could get interesting and damned good if you could manage to do it with out making them go OOC. Anyway Can\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\'t wait for the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: puritygoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2005 08:17 CDT
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i'm sensing some tension that shall appear between Kurama and Hiei!!!! Update soon!!!!
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Title: x.x
Reviewed By: ookami san the animelover [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2005 23:28 CDT
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nooooooooooo!!!!!!! you must write more plz that was goood!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Title: hee
Reviewed By: Kin-chan Pandun [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 17:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice. I like that you didn't have them run into each other right away. I hate it when authors do that. Please do not have Kagome taunt them/act uber mysterious/tease them with statements that reveal small things(or big things) about herself. It's stupid and not in character. Also. I'd prefer that you drag this out, and establish the fic a bit more. You could have them be aware of each other/ Yu Yu gang (read: Kuwabara or Hiei) sense her power, but then, when they try to confront her she smiles kindly and walks away, ot dissappears into the crowd. Draw out the search because after four years for Kagome (and probably similar for the tantei), they must have matured in sense and tactics at least slightly. Then they could go to Koenma, and get him involved. Oh! She could have accidentally left something of hers behind, but nothing too obvious. It could be something with residual spirit energy, and Reikai could use that to track where she is. I don't know. It's YOUR fic. I'm just trying to assist as best I can. ......................................Good Luck! .........Kin-chan Pandun
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Reviewed By: deafening silence [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 17:51 CDT
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Wow. I'm kinda surprised that i could be so thuroughly hooked by such a short chapter, but there you have it. So far, you seem to have the iy characters down(no OOCness, i mean), so that gives me hope that you aren't going to completely mutilate the characters of YYH. Someone already touched on the pact that you switched tenses somewhere around the middle, so i'll just suggest that you change it all to past tense. It just sounds better in my opinion. Um..good grammer, good vocab, overall, this is an excellent start! Hope to se more of it real soon.
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Title: very good
Reviewed By: bookwormloverjen [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 13:32 CDT
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plz continue it, plz..... its already got me hooked
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Reviewed By: baka_kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 11:49 CDT
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You sorta went from past tense to present tense. You should fix that. Other than that minor problem, I love your fic! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: Ryukotsusei [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 09:22 CDT
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Hmmm Do I sense a Hiei/Kagome pairing in the works? I have to agree with Kagome's assessment. As much as I love Kurama I think Hiei is probably the most interesting character of the group. Just my humble opinion :) Hehehe Poor Inu, he should learn by now if he acts like a jerk he's going to regret it. Can't wait to find out what this little "test" is lol Update soon please
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2005 07:59 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT STORY!!! PLEASE UPDATE ASAP!!! ^_^pair should be kur/kag/hiei or kag/hiei
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