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| "The Journey to the City of Endless Night" Reviews/Comments [ 281 ] | | Pages (19): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 › » ] | Title: Ch. 64
Reviewed By: MetsukiKaraTen [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 09:45 PST
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Woot!! An update! Whew, the tension... Glad Kagome got Inu to grab onto Tetsusaiga, whew! *wipes brow* And Miroku's observation and comparison of Sess's expression with Rin, to Inu's expression with Kagome. *Ah amore* Inu's guilt and embarrassement at having injured Miroku was well done, though a little surprising. Our hanyou didn't hide behind his surliness this time. About laughed myself out my seat with Sango's hurt, angry, tearful claim that she's *not* a helpless weak female... that just struck me as being so very... Sango. Right ON!! Miroku really likes to play with fire, just making up then groping her right away... uso!! Keep up the great work!!
| Reviewed By: Bookreader9999 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 01:24 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay!! I'm glad you've found time to continue the story!! I've been going thru withdrawals waiting for the next chapter!!!
| Reviewed By: adea neri On: November 10, 2006 23:08 PST
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AN UPDATE YAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! IM SO HAPPY, CANT WAIT TRO START READING
| Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI On: November 10, 2006 19:41 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my, I have been away for quite a bit!! Eepp!! Sorry!! I am back though and raring for another section of chapters to review!! Hopefully I can catch up to the rest!! Yay!! I can't wait to read more! So I am starting with Chapter 24 and trying for another three chapters!! Woott!! Wwwwwoooooottttt!!!!!! Hooray!! Another chapter and another review!! Chapter 24: Oh my word!! I think Inuyasha is going in for an epiphany here as well!! Totally awesome!! Yes!! He can see the parallels that is going on!! Thank you for making Inuyasha smart and Intelligent!! I am humbled whenever I see someone has incorporate this aspect of Inuyasha into their stories!! I love that Kagome is taking care of Rin so smoothly and naturally! As if Sesshoumaru has never threatened or tried to kill Inuyasha and herself. Awesome! I can see more of the subtle undertones of the bonding between them (the four of them) growing at a realistic and beautiful pace! Kudos!! Woot!! I do enjoy how you had Inuyasha go through his night of 'weakness' and have one of the people that he wouldn't expect to let him live after discovering the weakness help protect him, like he without thought helped protect his brother when he needed it! This I find is so close to how Rumiko has the characters interact!! I loved the way Inuyasha described how he felt without his senses. I love the freshness of this approach. Usually I am familiar with the sense of him being weak. But when you wrote he felt naked that just seemed to be more of an impact for me as I read it!! Wow! Chuckles ... Inuyasha just realized he confessed things to Sesshoumaru and was emotional in front of his brother. I can just see the inward cringing Inuyasha must be doing right now. But thankfully Sesshoumaru threw him for a good loop with the different behaviour. I am soo loving this story!! Inuyasha is coming more and more to realize there is a lot more to his brother than being a cold unfeeling and snotty uptight bastard. I love these little revelations that is sprinkled throughout the story! Just like an exquisite treat or meal!! Totally awesome and so very exciting!! I can tell you right now I love how this tale is keeping me on the edge of my seat!! Yes!! Thank you!! Inuyasha is cringing inwardly and puzzled by his brother protecting him!! Claps hands gleefully!! I love that Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru are not figuring each other out in a snap. So very realistic the way you are taking this story! Crosses fingers.. I hope we don't have to find out the results of that battle should Sesshoumaru fight Garion. Shudders. Inuyasha is on a horse again!! Lol!! I will never find this old!! I love the thought that Inuyasha would be complaining and pouting and sulking over traveling by horse. Oh my what is Garion up to? I can't wait! Inuyasha doesn't like to be disturbed when he is having "Deep Thoughts"... giggles... Poor Inuyasha, so much of his upbringing and interaction with humans from the Sengoku Jidai has obscured his views. He can't tell when someone is concerned for him and just want to know he is okay or if he wanted any help. Oh dear! I have to admit I have forgotten Polgara's advice she gave Inuyasha... must scamper back to re-read... If I could remember where it was... sighs... I did have to laugh when Garion just popped off the comment that Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru don't talk much.. Obviously they haven't seen Inuyasha and Kagome having a disagreement and Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru having a disagreement. Chuckles happily! Have I mentioned it how much I love that you have them all perfectly in character?! It's Brilliant! And Exciting! I think Inuyasha should rephrase those hates of his... I do believe Curry will have Inuyasha running away in the opposite direction and Naraku will have him charging headlong into battle and then Koga will have him blowing a gasket! Chuckles and then laughs!! I enjoyed the bonding Garion and Inuyasha shared with the comment Why Me?... It was priceless!!
| Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2006 12:57 PST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter. I loved all the action in it. Keep up the good work and update soon because I can't wait for more of this awesome story!! ^_^
| Title: Wow! Great chapter!!
Reviewed By: doggieearlover [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2006 07:49 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! Another great chapter! Miroku was so intense in his actions to try and help InuYasha, to get him to revert before he was too far gone. And Sesshomaru showing publicly such a tender side with Rin after she had been frightened so by Kouga. And of course Kouga was his arrogant self, just assuming because he wanted Kagome that he should have her, in spite of what she obviously wanted. Anyway, I really did love how this chapter gave the outsider's viewpoint from Miroku's point of view, going through his actions as he frantically tried to find a way to bring InuYasha back, and his observations of everything going on around him in the process. Of course Sango would jump to the conclusion to think he thought her weak, when all he was trying to do was keep her and especially Shippou out of harm's way. It's a good thing InuYasha ordered him to go and make up before she had a chance to sit and stew over it any longer, otherwise, things probably would have been worse. And, I'm wondering, is InuYasha going to keep his markings? Is he still aggitated, or just powered up? In any case, I can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens. This one was really good, and worth the wait.
| Reviewed By: Sexy Neko Gal [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2006 04:45 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
FINALLY! WOOT! UPDATE! YAY! I know how it feels trying to write Miroku. Man, I'm loving him...NOT! Okay, I love the scene with Inuyasha and Miroku and what Miroku thought of Sesshomaru and Inuyasha. They do look the same if you look closely. The 'brother' scene was touching for the two characters. Almost cried. On a random note, my friend gave me this book, saying I didn't read much. Guess which one it was? Not very hard! Turns out she gave me book one of the Belgariad series. Also, I found out just moments ago that my dad owns all five books of The Belgariad and Malloreon series, Belgarath the Sorcerer and Polgara the Sorceress. Lots of reading to do! Have you read David Eddings, The Tamuli Series? Just found them in the millions of books my parents own and was wondering if you have read them. If you have, please give me feed back. Well I think that's a long review, loved the chapter and PLEASE, for the sake of my sanity (what ever is left of it), update soon! Not like last time! Till Next Time Neko Gal :D:D
| Title: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 12:05 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Prances.. I was right! I'm out doing myself!! Squeals!! Part 4. cont Chap 23: I loved Sesshoumaru's thought about Kagome having Inuyasha under her control.. while not even realizing Rin has him under her control. It's too cute! I love the way this story is going! So far 23 chapters and the flow, the thrill, the smoothness and the interest for the story has not faded nor diminished in anyway! I'm still hooked and thrilled and eager to read like from the first few chapters! Thank you!! I love the affronted pride Inuyasha is putting forth. Again I love how they get togetjer and share the information they have to allow everyone to understand the situation better. Oh my, I can sense forshadowing here with this line: "Zedar most likely will use tricks of the mind." Nice to hear word about the Vale.. but did you miss Jaken? Or is what was discussed at a different part of the Vale away from him? Card game.. Oh my.. I dread the results of that! SIlk will deface Kagome's property without a shred of decency or regret. Though having Rin holding the cards was really sweet... Kagome is dense there with the card game. Never play with cheaters. All in all that was a nice way to end the chapter! I look forward to my next 3 chapter reading session and to reviewing! I can't wait! Please keep up the most excellent work! This is really Awesome!! Thank you! Thank you! Thank you for sharing this story with us and for writing it!! You Totally Rock!!
| Title: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 24, 2006 11:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm back!! And ready for more reviewing fun!! I think I might break my record!! Here we go Chap 23: Poor Sesshoumaru.. His High Opinion of his Glory and Rank has been shot to Hell! Boy was he taken down a notch or two or three...giggles. Blinks rapidly... Did Sesshpumaru just get an Epiphany??!!! OMG!! OMG!OMGG!! Sesshoumaru is having an Enlightenment!! That is TOOOOO Cool!! This is Brillant!! Amazing and in an obscure way.. very funny! Bows to her Literary Goddess! I really love this Eye-Opening moment for Sesshoumaru. Is he finally coming to realize what his father had been trying to tell him about? Belgarath doesn't know Naraku like the others do. Naraku can pull a True monkey habit - flinging the poops around. Am I close that Naraku used his words/influence on Zedar? lol! Belgarath pacing like Inuyasha would do! lol! Funny.. Belgarath scolding Polgara about going on with her What If's. Poor Inuyasha, having his human night and Kagome being disrepectful of his need/desire to keep it hidden from others. Wish I could whack her across the head. I am curious to know if Kikyou will pop up with her poker face and cause one heck of a stink and Angst Guilt trip? Don't think she'll take this too lightly. And Sesshoumaru.. did he just pull an Inuyasha stunt? charging into the tent? lol!! I love the brothers interactions with each other! They're so cute when they fight/argue. I see a revealing and bit of soul searching brother bonding going to happen. Inuyasha just sulked with his hood! Okay.. Inuyasha is being pretty immature here. Kudos!! You kept him in character!! Yep!! Revealation time! Thank you for having Inuyasha open up to his brother! This is Awesome! I love that Sesshoumaru is showing some outward emotion. "Rather he wanted me or not I made him an outcast.." I don't understand what Inuyasha was trying to say here. Inuyasha always has a freeing mouth during his human nights. Hooray for Sesshoumaru! Love that he smacked Inuyasha out of his self loathing and downward spiral. I guess Sesshoumaru need to see what his actions and words results had from a different perspective. Sesshoumaru realizing their fighting is really very belittling to each of them. Groans.. Inuyasha.. you baka! Kagome you baka! Agreed she should have known! Inuyasha is still very strong in human form. That must have surprised Sesshoumaru along with the sucker punch. I am still very curous about Kagome getting the gold specks in her eyes. Is pondering will answer come up in futue? HUGE Fawning Rabid FanGirl Glossy Eyes!! Sesshoumaru went into protective mode for Inuyasha!!!.. (momentarily pauses to squeal repeatedly and huggle her Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru plushies..) lol!! They may say they are not 'babysitting' Inuyasha but that is exactly what they are doing!! Am I wrong or is Kagome not only doing her homework for school but also as a means to distract Inuyasha? Him with his nose in the air.. It's so darm cute even without his ears!! I love this story! I love how you msaterfully gather up all genres and blend them into this work of art!! Bravissimo!! Kudos! Those two fight as much as the two brothers. LOl!! I can't seriously see RT drawing the scene out and having Sango whispering to Sesshoumaru to stay out of it. Though I do agree with him.. the immaturity and pettiness is mind boggling.. That was the stupidest thing Inuyasha could have done to Kagome. After all they have been through. Nice.. Now Kagome will be worried that Inuyasha thinks she wants Koga. Really dumb move. The voice of Logic! Sesshouamru.. yep.. those two are going to draw everyone into their tent with their fighting after all the trouble they have gone through to ensure the secret is secure. Bangs head onto desk!! Oh Inuyasha... you wanted secrecy and you go and parade yourself off. At least it was only Polgara who found out. Well at least Inuyasha got his attitude back in place. lol! I have never seen/read Sesshoumaru sigh so much in any other story! I love it!
| Title: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 22:19 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Here is Part Two!! Chapter 21- Liked how Shippou asked if it was one of Koga's. But shouldn't he know what Koga's wolves look like? They are all the colouring and build. Oh my! Sesshoumaru trying to curb his urge to drive the wolf away for Rin!! Bravo!! I love how you have him protecting Rin, thinking about Rin. Sesshoumaru I know really doesn't like having secrets kept from him. It makes him cranky! They are having a staring contest! I love how you are weaving this story!! It's so full so vibrant! It really grasps the reader and pulls them into the story! Will Sesshoumaru let Belgarath know why he hates wolves? Belgarath should be careful when pushing a subject like this with Sesshoumaru. It won't end in his favour. Rin is a brave little girl! I commend her on her bravery! That was an Amazingly executed scene with Rin, Sesshoumaru and the she-wolf! I was on edge til Rin made the comment her tongue is wet!! What a truly gifted writer you are!! I love that! I love being brought into a story an made a part of it! Bravo!! and Kudos!! Inuyasha is so wonderful in those tender just he and Kagome moments I love it! I whole-heartedly agree with his sentiment. No interfernces! Love the way they greet each other! So sweet! Lol!! The Bra and Panty bit!! He is so pouty over those!! Will this be an ongoing little "war" with the two of them? and who'll win? LOL! Just like Inuyasha! Fight, quality time with Kagome and eating!! Thank you for keeping so true to character! Inuyasha has forgotten the she-wolf already.. well I guess with all that has occurred so far. It would have slipped his mind. Inuyasha so does love his meals! giggles! Chap 22- Touching how Kagome rode with Rin, Sesshoumaru flanking her and Inuyasha on the other side. The boys protecting their loves. Again Inuyasha's back in the saddle! I still find that funny!! Dog-boy on horse. Oh dear! his human night is coming!! Ergh! Silk and Miroku making fast. Ergh! I pity anyone they come across! I Pity Sango! I think she might be at the end of a ploy that she won't want to be. I had forgotten about the sacrifices. This isn't going to be pleasant. Especially for those with very sensitive noses. That must really be bad if the others are smelling it too! I can only image it! Oh no not more Hounds! I am on the edge of my seat again!! Literary Goddess This is Some Good Writing/reading!! Yes!! Thank you! Inuyasha understood the wolf! Thank you! Thank you for adding Inuyasha into that! A Trap! shivers run down spine! Wow! Shippou listening to Inuyasha without making any nasty remarks! Awesome! Amazing! Is Sesshoumaru also on a horse? What an masterful description of the scene! Just like what I would read in David Eddings novel! So close to his! Amazing! I missed something.. What did Inuyasha do to the Alter? Again I love how you have exquistely written the tow Inu brothers fighting as a team! I love that so much when they fight together! I love how they compliment each other with their techniques! Amazing work! Zedar is back.. what a Naraku! Poldera. That's her name. I couldn't think of it before. Again you made references to Inuyasha intelligence both with saving his brother and with Poldera! I love that! Thank you for keeping Inuyasha smart! I love the way you ahve written the magic "word" fight! I love your fight scenes as much as I love your love scenes! Inuyasha is going to have a headache from that noise. That "growth" scene must have amazed everyone not familiar with it. Coolness! Cravo!! Bravissimo! ... please please please... let Inuyasha, Kagome, Sesshoumaru, Rin all get a chance to learn and gain more powers, strengths and abilities from all this!! Oh great.. there the two go at it again.. sibling fight! Inuyasha at least was much better at it this time and pointed out why he did what he did. (Sesshoumaru can go sulk.) And I must paue here. I need to get to bed before I collapse. I will finish my review in the morning!
| Title: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 21:18 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi!! Back again for some more reviews!! So Literary Goddess let me take up from where we left off. Chapter 21 - Well, I like the little warning.. giggles.. I think that would be nice! Heh!! lol!! Inuyasha is back on his horse!! I can't tell you how much it amuses me to read about him riding a horse! I can picture him in full pout mode! Oh my.. Kagome thinking Inuyasha was ill because he was concerned about her. Silly girl. I guess that the rush and emotional roller coaster she had been on finally caught up with her. I love Polgara! She really knows how to take command! She Rocks!! This Story Rocks!! and I'm only into the first couple of paragraphs! I love how easy Inuyasha is around Kagome while she's tired and getting all blushy and stubborn! That was sweet of Feldegast to offer up that suggestion. I guess I missed something. Kagome reached for Inuyasha and opened her eyes. Did Inuyasha set her down? or rest her against a tree before he went to set up the tent? Though I did really love the thought.. Her pillow wasn't where she wanted him to be!! Too cute!! Stay put!! giggles!! Another sweetly cute moment!! I wonder if Inuyasha will tease her about this later on? I don't think Inuyasha would have been comfortable with having Kagome in that position if they were back at the camp. Especially with Miroku. Tired Kagome? I don't she's That tired. I admire a girl who goes after what she wants!! I love the kiss! You write kisses so masterfully and beautifully!! sighs happily!! Kagome knows Inuyasha's weakness a great ear rub! Were they kissing with their eyes open... that's kind of weird... I think it's so cute and touching when they nuzzle each other. I love the way you use your words and create this brillant tale!! Bravo!! Bravo!! Kagome whined!! lol!! I wonder if Inuyash will comment about that later on.. Kagome making puppy noises! I really like how you build the up to the love scene! Nice and slow and realistic! I wonder if that will be Inuyasha's downfall... the Bra!! lol!! Poor Inu! And Panties!! they confound him so much.. it's too cute.. Just don't let his brotehr find out!! Kagome gets to see Inuyasha without bandages or nasty wounds. She deserves it! He caught her staring at him.. That will be a teasing tidbit for use later on! I love how tender you have Inuyasha with his lovemaking! That was one of the sweetest love scenes! I love those kinds.. soft, sweet, loving and tender. (It seems only my Literary Goddesses can achieve this height this beauty of love scenes.) Sesshoumaru!! Did Sesshoumaru put up a tent or did he get one that was already up? Shippou has a Gameboy??!! And With Sesshoumaru's curiosity!! Oh dear!! The phrase Shippou made was not nice. Inuyasha clobbers him because he (most of the time) pushes Inuyasha's buttons on purpose. What game are there playing? Adn I loved the bafflement in Sesshoumaru when he was told he "died" and Rin's puzzlement too!! That was so funny! (Another great way to break the tension!!!) Again Sesshoumaru is mystified by Kagome!! LOL!! How did Sesshoumaru put up the tent? ... is getting a really bizzare image of Sesshoumaru on one leg using mouth, teeth, arm, and other leg to set up the tent.... That was nice of Shippou to let Rin play... then again... He is a Miroku-ish type of character(going after girls whenever he meets them..) A wolf!! Oh no poor little Rin will get frightened!! I loved how Sesshoumaru went into protect Rin mode! Belgarath knows the wolf.. It's his wife isn't it!?! Thank you! I like how you have Sesshoumaru understand the wolf. Does this mean that on some level Inuyasha would know the language as well? Is that why he gets super ticked off with Koga and his wolves. He can understand what they are saying? I liked how Belgarath had invited the wolf to supper.. Custom! Very nice! So far Rin hasn't seen the she-wolf. Poor Rin.. she saw the wolf!! I loved how Sesshoumaru rested his hand upon her head. I wonder if he realizes he does this?
| Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 17, 2006 11:29 PDT
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This is a very good stories. Keep up the good work!
| Title: interesting
Reviewed By: wildthundakat [not signed in] On: September 13, 2006 12:18 PDT
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i like ur story so far. i've only read the first chapter but i like it so far. seems very interesting. i love ur details, wonderfully written. i liked that he decided to help wash dishes. the way u wrote ur fic, makes me very intersted in this other series. normally i'm not that into SciFiFantasy books, but there a few that catch my eye. so, i'll keep reading ur fic.
| Reviewed By: poerocks On: September 03, 2006 17:25 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ilove this story and ilove how you kept all the inuyasha characters personalities the way there supposed to be and ilove where this story is going(iv read chp.1-63 so far)keep it up and please update soon.
| Reviewed By: ahunmaster On: August 30, 2006 17:17 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love your story...I sad that you took your story off FanFic...it's hard to find your name on MediaMiner for me...so I have to go to FanFic to get here Please update the story soon...I want to see what happens after Kouga came and all...keep up the good work
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