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Title: Review part three
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: August 26, 2006 14:45 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
..embarrassed..okay..this is going to be a three parter..chap 20 con't-It seems that Sesshoumaru has been stumped(sorry-bad pun at Sesshoumaru.) again about the engima that is Kagome. I like that! I enjoy how you have him reflecting upon every thing that had occured that evening and about Kagome's behaviour/courage. Coolness!! You had him acknowledge his respect for Kagome to himself! That is awesome! and very Sesshoumaru!! Very RT!! If only he knew.. it isn't just the time in which she came from(though that is a big factor.) it is her heart, being brought up to accept everyone for who they are inside not what they are. I had to laugh.. Inuyasha and his adversion to bandages. Ah! That explains why Miroku. He acts like a living conscious for Inuyasha when he refuses to acknowledge his own. Amazing how you had them all talking about what happened with Inuyasha.. civilly. Kudos!! Whoot!Woot!! This story rocks!! Great how smoothly you had Blegarath shift the conservation away from Inuyasha and his growing guilt about transforming to the Grolims, Hounds and Torak. Good old Barak, he does loves a good Kick the enemies butt session. lol!! Belgarath just had to say it.. Alorns! Okay.. I think I will stop here for now.. before I overwhelm you. I will see if I can get another in before the weekend is over. Please keep up the most excellent and astoundingly amazing work!!! Thank you soo much for sharing it with us!! You Totally Rock!!
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Title: reviews part two
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: August 26, 2006 14:15 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chapter 20- My heart is in my throat! Poor Inuyasha! Poor Kagome!! Poor Rin!! Neither Kagome nor Rin seem to be taking this too well. I can feel their pain and anguish as if it was own. You rock!! How you weave readers into the story! A true sign of an Gifted and Talented writer! Poor Kagome.. She is even more crushed when she saw his hood. The barrels of Angst overflow! This Rocks! It so exquisitely written! Amazed and in Awe of Sesshoumaru trying to help Kagome ease her troubled and guilt ridden mind. I am thrilled! This is one of my favourite Epic stories I had the pleasure and honour of reading!! Thank You Literary Goddess!!! And you kept Kagome so true in character, that even if someone told her it wasn't her fault she would still feel the guilt. Until Inuyasha can awaken and reassure her. And that little scene with Rin, Kagome, the Fire Rat Haori and her thanking Inuyasha for protecting her from the wolves that was a tear jerker for me. Then for Rin to put her hand into Sesshoumaru's hand that also very touching!! I am gushing with joy!! How you described Inuyasha's scent. It's how I envisioned his scent to be sometimes. Earthy! Forests! Another question. Why the placing of wet cloths on the heads? Is puzzled. My heart leapt in my throat when I read the describe of Inuyasha looking pale and fragile. Goddess!! You have the Gift!! I again will say I love the influence Polgara has on Kagome. She is the just what Kagome needs to have in her life. And you had Kagome react in her very typical Kagome manner- run away. Wonders if Kagome will ever stop running? ? Very nice having Beldin go and speak with Kagome. She needs it right now. To hear it from a "stranger". Ohh! Love the way they tried to put what into perspective with using Barak's going berserk and transforming! Very smoothly done! Awesome how Sesshoumaru smoothly got into the conversation when Kagome was feeling so lowly about herself. And is so happy that Miroku also got into the discussion and helped to explain. It was so expertly and masterfully done! Thank you for making it so realistic! For having everyone be sombre, serious and shaken by what they saw. They didn't just shrug it off like an everyday event. I fall more and more for this story!! Totally Awesome!! Kagome is so real, so RT!! I love the way you made her Angst so viable. How she silently looked to Polgara and showed the hood. She seemed so tiny and child like at that moment, awaiting her punishment. What a tender scene that was with Kagome cleaning Inuyasha's face of the blood so gently and carefully. I held my breath when Inuyasha awoke and he saw the blood on her clothes and when Kagome answered him in such emotionless way it tore at me. You wrote Inuyasha's horror so perfectly-he saw the blood on his hands and realized he transformed then Kagome wouldn't answer him. Standing ovation!! Thank you so much for making Kagome's sobs and speech even to Inuyasha's super hearing incomprehensible. I'm still curious about the gold flecks in Kagome's eyes. My heart weeped for the two of them. How Kagome was so frightened and guilty and Inuyasha grief over his transformation. Kagome reacted like anyone would after a traumatic experience she needed to feel Inuyasha, to kiss him. That was beautiful how Inuyasha was slowly reassuring Kagome it wasn't her fault. It was the fault of the Hounds. Your attention to details is positively genius! Nothing is left or added as an after thought to explain this or that. Like Inuyasha sheathing his sword, checking his body for broken bones. It seems Kagome and Inuyasha had found a way to reassure each other of their fears and guilt. lol! And Polgara walked in on them in a delicate postion. chuckles!! That is a wondrous touch. Perfectly inserted to lessen up the high flying emotions. Then to switch over to Sesshoumaru's thoughts! Again you never cease to amaze me or inspire me! It is all done perfectly. No scene/situation is written too soon or too late.
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Title: reviews chap 19-21 part one
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: August 26, 2006 11:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Reviews for chapters 19-21. I am so excited to be reviewing again. Let's start with Chapter 19! Oh my! Our favourite Inu Youkai(Hanyou) are going to meet the Hounds of Torak!! What a dog fight this will be! Is eagerly awaiting!! Silk was smart and knew what his fight skills would be at the moment and put himself in a position where he was best needed. Chuckles at Belgarath question 'can they handle' something the size of a horse or little more. He don't know our boys too well!! I think it's time they all got to see our beloved boys in action!! Go Inuyasha!! Go Sesshoumaru!! Whip those fake dog's butts!! I like the way you had Belgarath make up a quick plan on dealing with these "dogs". Very nice!! I really liked that. Combining all strengths and skills instead of having one character be the "Soul Saviour" of the group. I so dislike that in other stories. You have maintained the strengths and abilities of each character. That noise must really cause sensitive ears to ring painfully. Great description of the Hound. Though, Is Sesshoumaru only triple the size? I kind of pictured him as about 5X the size of a horse sized creature. Then again, I wasn't great in maths. Again the silent communication between the brothers! I love it when you do this! Whoot!!Woot!! Thank you Garion!! For offering up that information!! Great teamwork!! How smoothly you have blended both worlds/both series of characters together!! It is truly awesome!! Poor sensitive Inu ears. Wondering if Inuyasha is going to have a headache after all this. Well, at least this time Inuyasha only got threatened of being eaten and not killed because of his heritage. I can picture and hear the creepiness that this Hound is speaking with. Why did this howl this time affect Rin so much? And that Hound really pushed buttons in Sesshoumaru it isn't going to be a pretty ending for that Hound. Thank you! You have again shown Inuyasha's intelligence!! Having him lead the Hound away from the rest of the group! Kudos!!! That Rocks!! Awesome!!Again the silent communications. I can't say how much I love it when you write like this!! Making everything so realistic so attention and heart grabbing!! You capture the reader and draw them into the story so effortlessly and smoothly!! This is really an exciting and actioned filled powerfully written fight sequence!! Loved Sesshoumaru's transformation and how you drew attention to him after!! I can't even begin to write nor express my thrilled pleasure at the skill in which you have written this scene! Do I detect a slight bit of smug pride when Inuyasha spoke about his brother and his transformation. I think I did. Giggles. I have question. I may have missed something unless there is an explanation? When Sesshoumaru drools his poison it causes a deadly Miasma to form. Why is there no Miasma? I laughed at Belgarath's disgruntled comment about warning them next time. I really loved how he dispatched that Hound. And I can see a battle coming up between the brothers. When Inuyasha gets something in his mind that he wants to know about he is super stubborn. He "Stomped", Sesshpumaru Stomped!! ROLMAO!! He sooo pulled an Inuyasha!! Sweet Saints!! Inuyasha was attacked! By two more Hounds! How come they didn't scent there was more than one? I liked how Sesshoumaru was fighting with his emotions! You really have captured them all!! Ah,I see why Rin got so scared! Thank you for answering my question. Inuyasha transformed and Sesshoumaru trying to kept Kagome away from him. He doesn't know Kagome can help. Good for Kagome to get away! I loved the fight scene with Youkai Inuyasha! He is so sexy that way! Loved that you had Inuyasha know Kagome! He kissed her!! Alright!! Too cool!! It took Belgarath grumbling to get the sword over to Inuyasha! Kagome used the sit command to bring him back! Loos like a very long review session this time!! Right on!!
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Reviewed By: Suzy Q 001 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2006 12:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have read stories where Kagome has the ability to restore Sesshomaru's arm and I think that what Rin is learning that she might be able to Kagome could please consider that.
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Title: Chapt 13 - 15 part two
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: July 30, 2006 14:52 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And yeah... I did go to the limit.. so here is the rest of the reviews... little giggle of embarrassment.. chap 14 cont- I love just how Blushy Inuyasha gets around Kagome. Too cute and so very true. A sweet kiss scene!! Awesome!! Again you like my other favs are the ones who can write the kisses so realistically so masterfully, that it isn't seen on paper in black and white.. it is there in front of you as you watch the scene as an unseen presence. Awesome!! Really Awesome work!! I have to admit something.. I squeal with glee when I read about Rin making a picture of her and Sesshoumaru together and him having a smile then him asking her to make another. Another shining example to the depth of this stoic and hard to portray character of Takahashi. Kudos!! Whoot!! Whoot!! and Excellent!! Rolls over with joy!! More trouble! Another flunkie being sent after the Tachi crew must be a fanatic. From the way you ahd describe the ships that little boat is just begging for a beating. Loved how you kept Belgarath in character again with the fight. He really doesn't like to fight when it's so unnecessary. And that flunkie is certain making Sesshouamru irritated and as we all know -that's not a healthy life promoting aspect. Blinks several times.. Sesshoumaru wanting his brother beside him in a fight.. Right on!! "Belgarath sighed. He muttered, "They always do this. They always have to challenge me." " LOL!! what a comment!! Great work with that intense scene. Rin is defintitely smart. She knew why Sesshoumaru sent her below deck. Chap 15- Lemon!! Yumm!! Boy, is it a hott scene. Very well written very tasefully done and fully of emotions. Finally, Inuyasha has gotten over what everyone else thinks. Very tender, the way Kagome kissed and laved at his scarred shoulder. Whoot!! You kept them in character even more. They were both blushing!! I love their blushing. And Inuyasha grumbling about Kagome's bra. funny!! Hmmm..what was that wave of pink light? Will it have something some importance in the future? Oh no...just when they finally complete the mating and love making. Interruptions like Kagome feared would happen-happened. I wonder is Sesshoumaru annoyed because Inuyasha wasn't updeck to hep with the fight/conflict? And why was Sesshoumaru complaining about bad timing? Having Silk pick out the Inn... I wouldn't wanna go in there either. Can picture the smell and shudders. OH Yes!! Sango is back and oh dear... she has Miroku with her. I pity her having being stuck that awful womanizing lecher. Can't wait to read and review the next 3 chapters! So I end here and say. Bravissiom and please keep up the good work!! starting to get tempting to read the latest chapter. But will wait and take her time. Please keep up this most excellent and masterfully executed brillant genius!!
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Title: Chapt 13 - 15
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: July 30, 2006 13:42 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Back again with another batch of reviews for you. Ready, Literary Goddess... smiles happily.. shuffles papers.. clears throat.. Now presenting reviews chap 13 - Ah, man.. to get interrupted, Poor Inuyasha. The discussion about why Inuyasha is being targeted at the new "dark God" smacks fully of Naraku's schemes. You know I noticed something about the two jewels... The Shikon no Tama - is pink and made with a Female priestess. The Orb - is blue and made by a Male god. Do I sense or have wishful thinking there is a Love interest going to develope between the two? That would a truly sweet story or even a one shot!! I would love to see it!! Giggles happily!! (would it classify as Alternate pairing?) Again the emphasis from Belgarath only PURE can touch it. Are we forshadowing here? rubs hands together. Loving this story, Goddess!! Umm question.. Why is Inuyasha pouting about being up on deck? I wonder in what way (or ways) the Orb would punish Naraku.. Inuyasha's comment "Basically any demon too weak to fight on their own merits.." that really goes for Kouga also. Kouga, a full demon, with two Jewel shards is almost equal to Inuyasha, a half demon, with no shards.(it's only because Kagome osuwari Inuyasha every time that the fight is left undecided- don't think Inuyasha would kill him but get him to acknowledge strength he possess). I love the percision that you have with all the characters. KUDOS!!! Bravissimo!! Oh-oh... They gave themselves away after Inuyasha was going through the trouble to keep it secret. Sesshoumaru's comment about who had more power in their relationship!! Too funny!! Getting good with Sesshouamru "prying" the information out of Kagome and Inuyasha about her time. Very excellently executed!! I enjoyed how the Inu Brothers "bonded" after Kagome huffed and went back to her homework. Inuyasha read Kagome's History book??!! What an Awesome and Wonderous feat that was!! WOW!! I tried to read a History textbook and fell asleep. ROFLMAO!! The video game.... mouth drops open.. Sesshoumaru agreeing to their terms. WOW!! You certainly have me swooning with Amazement. Chap 14 - Ahh I see why he was pouting. He's bored and feeling trapped - he can't run nor is there any demons to work off the energy. Got it!! Hmmm... Rin and Inuyasha should play then Inuyasha would have some pent up energy worked off and same for Rin. Thanks for answering the question. Mandorallen just had to go and annoy Inuyasha some more at least he apologized. Poor Inuyasha no matter what he does... somehow something always interfers with his realtionship with Kagome. I wonder if Mandorallen will go and apologize to Kagome for causing troubles. (grumbles it was partly his fault for making -to Inuyasha- moves on her.) I can see it now.. someone is going to tell that man to just shut up and butt out. lol!! Sweet!! A tender touch, giving Rin crayons!! Loved it!! Love this story!! Inuyasha certainly seems to be really capivated more by the uniform that Kagome is wearing again... seems he momentairly forgotten that outfit... chuckles. I love the blush fest that is going on!! And Sesshoumaru caught him!! jumps up and down... Love is a Spectator sport. lol!! (having more cream soda..) Oh my gawd!! Rin asked Sesshoumaru to colour with her.. Way too Kawaii!! Though if Inuyasha wasn't there and snickering... would he? Would Sesshoumaru become one of those pets that loves to chew on crayons when your not opening? (my cats do) I really enjoy also how you express Sesshouamru's curiousity. It is a true pleasure to read. Not many writers (besides my favs) can paint these so forgotten characteristics in Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha as well. Kudos!! Bravo!! More blushing!! Kagome bent over in that skirt of hers and Inuyasha took notice!! Ouch!! They bonked noggings. That probrably made Kagome see stars. (Inuyash ahs a hard head, so he probrably only got the pain.)
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Reviewed By: OpinioVana [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2006 12:45 PDT
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Ooh…. Do you think that it's possible to become addicted to an author's writings? I do because I've been jones'n for a fix of yours so I re-read your story (again)… I LOVE it, but that's nothing new. Alright… I forget why I'm writing this… I think my prescription just kicked in cuz now I'm tired… I'm sick and tired of being sick and tired… wait this is a review right? I know I wanted to say something…. Oh never mind, I doubt I'll even post this.
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Reviewed By: LidaWolf [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2006 15:43 PDT
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hey wat happened to ur fanfic? lol is ok i found it agian!! lol its brilaint like normal keep it up! :)
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Reviewed By: OpinioVana [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 20:55 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh… a Koga POV. Poor guy is just as lost now emotionally as he is physically. Being that he is in the strange unknown world and Kags is willingly mated to Inu. Even though he never really had Kags you've got to feel a tiny itty bit sorry for the guy. Except for all of the crap he was pulling by grabbing Kags and his mere presence sent Rin spiraling back to relive he death basically. No matter how I feel about the guy, I have to wonder just what important task that Koga had to complete… I mean isn't that way the Voice kept Inu from killing him? That's another thing… how in the world was the Voice able to keep Inu from ripping Koga's throat out? Inu was in full demon mode right? That last time is went into that mode even Kags had a difficult time managing him and if it weren't for his sword… well I'm just glad he got his sword back that time. Can the Voice physically control Inu's actions or did it just say something VERY persuasive to Inu that you didn't tell us? Because wouldn't Inu be enraged this time since not only did 1. Koga not believe Kags would have mated with Inu 2. Koga had his hands on Kags and 3. It was found out that should we say…Rin & Koga have history. And that brings me back to Rin. I really want to know how Rin will react now that she knows that the man from her nightmares is not only alive but also very near. I mean Koga was acting very familiar with both Inu & Kags when Rin was near. I do hope that Inu & Kags familiarity with Koga will not disrupt the trust between Rin and the pair. But I doubt that would happen since Rin was able to trust Poledra and she is of wolf… oh damn I do hope Rin will still trust Poledra. So many questions! I mean now is Rin going to stay by Sess's side 24/7 seeking security from her protector? Since this time when Sess left her sight Koga came and with Sess by her side Koga left. Or is she going to withdrawal from the world because of the trauma that seeing Koga caused? Or… Or is she going to forgive and forget? You know out of sight out of mind like some children are… but Rin isn't any normal child… Damn… I always have so many questions regarding Rin... please say you are working on the next chapter and will have it up sooner than you expected… I know that's just very wishful thinking.
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Title: Chapters 10- 12
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: July 16, 2006 08:22 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well the other day I was soo happy I decided to read more!! I also decided to list you in my Literary Goddess Grouping. So that is the title I'll use in my reviews for you. In Chap 10-Inuyasha showed concern about his youkai side. Is that what happened in chap 9? Oh MY GAWD!! Sesshoumaru is apologizing even more to Inuyasha and wanting to become brothers!! Shocker!! But very pleasant!! I forgot to include in the other review..I loved it when Polgara swatted away Kagura's attack like a pesky fly. I really love how you are progressing and maturing the two brothers slowly. It speaks volumes of your grasp on the characters. I have see other writers(non goddesses) that have Inu and Sess have a girl-cry fest and do a fluff type of bonding-you know the skipping picking flowers making bracelets for each other type of deal within minutes of confession. You have kept it realistic like Inufan625 and Doggieearlover. I bow to you!! KUDOS!! Whoot! Whoot!! I did laugh when Inuyasha complained he could do it himself but really couldn't without Sesshoumaru then Kagome. And the line about Quit Touching Me- I had a Bill Cosby moment..lol.. giggles..Then using his sheathed sword to poke his brother away!! I was laughing for quite awhile. Ugh.. Ce'nedra drives me around the bend. I'm with the Inu brothers.. Cringing and covering the ears..I really liked the part with the Orb. I had forgotten it had a personality. I wonder if Kagome will be able to touch it? I think Naraku will definitely be interested in it as well. I love it soo much when ear rubbing is involved.. Sighs happily!! He said Mate!! Bounces around the rooma nd computer happily squealing with gleeful delight!! And Kagome then being Kagome making certain she understands exactly what Inuyasha asked of her. Right ON!!Chap 11-Another bath scene..with Inu brothers!!DROOOOLLSSSS..Nuts.. was secretly hoping for a water fight..pouts.. maybe later..I liked how they tried to be all macho with why they protected Rin/Kagome. cute. That devious Sesshoumaru!! He ensured the soap would be slippery for Inuyasha!! Again I commend you on having Polgara and Kagome talk!! I really like the influence she is providing for Kagome. And Kagome was right about Inuyasha's behaviour and the "cast". lol!! And the bonding scene with Durnik!! Excellent work there Goddess!! Really brillantly done!! And the sneak attack from Rin!! That was also awesome work!! Yes, Inuyasha and Rin are good playmates.. They both have boundless energy they can work off by playing!! That is a sweetly touching idea you incorperated!! Poor Inu-Kagome picking on him about his eating skills while Bledin just grossed everyone out. Chap 12-Barak!! Right on.. I've always like that burly monster of a red head!! Barak gets so upset when someone pokes fun at his ship.. he is so proud of it.. giggles!! Can someone please kick Kagome..She is always so easily swayed by flowery and vapid talk. Poor Inuyasha..trusting his instincts and getting the short end of the stick again.. That was just mean and cruel of Kagome. He was only protecting her. I have always wondered if Garath Barak bristled would their beards also bristle? Oh..no..The Bear Cult!!!and they have targeted Inuyasha!! Hooray for Sesshoumaru defending his brother!! And Thank you (chould have done this in first review) Having Inuyasha being smart and intelligent!!And Sesshouamru trying to cover up for the Half breed comment. Loved the kiss!! She finally said yes!! Please keep up the excellent work!! You Totally Rock!!
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Title: OMG!!
Reviewed By: doggieearlover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 21:06 PDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Talk about getting it in threes! I almost felt sorry for Koga (almost). First finding out that InuYasha had claimed Kagome as his mate, then getting it from Poledra, and then the realization that Kagome had actually chosen InuYasha instead of him. And on top of all of that, InuYasha could have turned him into mincemeat pretty easily in his youkai form if the "Voice" hadn't stopped him. I almost couldn't believe it when Kouga took off with his tail between his legs. And good ole Ginta and Hakaku, there to talk some sense into him. At least they were smart enough to be afraid of InuYasha in that form. And what will the others do now that they realize that InuYasha has been in contact with the voice? Will he finally ask Garion about it, or are they gonna try to corner him and just make him mad? And poor Rin, I hope she gets over her fright quickly. Hopefully, Sesshomaru will be able to calm her down. Another excellent chapter. Figures, I go over to a friend's house for dinner and discover you had posted your new one when I got home. Outstanding as always, and I can't wait for the next.
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Title: chapters 7-9
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi On: July 15, 2006 17:41 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am back again and with a review of chapters 7 to 9. Well I am quite thrilled to have the chance to read such a wonderful story!! It's Awesome!! Woo-Hoo!! and a Whoot!! Back in the other three chapters I began to get a feel that it's Naraku. In chap 7-you kept Inuyasha so true to character with him being concerned over Kagome and Sesshoumaru. The flashlight incident was entertaining. I think our Inu was slightly jealous. He wants to keep all things Kagome to himself. funny how Inuyasha seems to be discovering Kagome is a female and has..ohh my-breasts! And the Carmel scene!! TOOO cute!! Sesshoumaru perplexed by carmel..The comment Belgarath made about Domesticity was funny also!! Pictures Inu in a pink maids outfit and featherduster-chokes...Eyes wide!! Inuyasha kissed her in the middle of brushing her teeth!! That is just weeeiiirrrddd...Never knew he be the type to have a toothbrush fetish...Poor Inu he going to be one stressed puppy and burn out soon if he keeps this up and Sesshoumaru who knew he was a matchmaker?...The spacing again was a little confusing with scene changes. I really like Polgara!! What a great influence she will have on Kagome. This is what she needs a mature woman figure not related who can talk to her properly about males. Not like with Sango and her violent streak (though WELLL earned violent streak).blinks..blinks again..blinks again...Did Sesshoumaru just say thankyou to Inuyasha and Kagome?..shocked...Did like the horse thief scene..GOOD!!! And the bath scene wonderful. The boys take their baths to aviod Polgara's wrath too much!! I wonder if Inuyasha will want a amulet for Kagome?..More about the Prophecy!! Awesome!! This is GREAT!! I take it this is the first that Inuyasha has ever had "stiffening" of parts..giggles madly.. sputters and laughs..I am wondering if it is Naraku who is stirring the demons. Chapt 8-More about the Prophecy!! I like-y this bunches!!The cycle of overprotective-overaviodence-blushing-fighting is the best part!! Sesshoumaru just doesn't know what he is missing!! I must say I enjoyed this chapter!! Am little disgruntled with Silk. Never liked him. Wonder if Inuyasha will take him down a few notches...And Yes! Kagome did something wrong!! Always jumping to the worst conclusion and always making Inuyasha pay for it like a very, very spoilt child!! I wish someday...Kagome would get a taste of her own medicine..And Ouch! Poor Inu not getting to finish. Gotta hurt..POOR Inuyasha. After so long being told how worthless and tainted he is he can get over his self hate. Chapt 9-What is it about the Will and turnips? Is it their colouring? I do so enjoy just how you are confusing the dickens out of Kagome!! I love the phrase "A bored and confused hanyou was the worst" I really loved that!! Again Great inter-action with Kagome and Polgara. Ohh!! The Tension!! I love it!! The fight scene was going so nicely and Inuyasha was going to release some stress when people interfer. YES!! Polgara has done it again!! I love that woman!! You do David and Rumiko so much honour!! You Rock!! And now that Kagura is in it!! Damnn.. I am shocked I was right it was Naraku...I can't wait for the next batch of chapters!! Please keep up the most excellent work!!
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Reviewed By: OpinioVana [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2006 13:45 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are a wonderful writer and this is a terrific story. I have enjoyed reading every chapter since the beginning and eagerly await the update! I adore the interactions between Sess and Rin! Also the development of the relationship between Inu & Sess is interesting they are finally acting like brothers. However, I do have a few questions about Rin and the whole sorcery deal. Does Rin know that the raven/crow that seems to be showing up and following her places isn't a 'nice' birdy? Or is she still to naive and innocent to think that a bird would be anything but a bird? Or am I completely reading it wrong and the bird is just a bird? Can Rin communicate across distance utilizing thought alone or only when the other person is in the same room? I think I have too much time on my hands to be re-reading from the beginning your creative fanfic and am thinking too far into it so I'll stop asking questions… for now.
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Title: chapters 4-6
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie -nsi On: July 11, 2006 16:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOOOWWW!!! I just finished reading chapters 4 to 6 and I must say WOW!! That was awesome!! You really have the characters done pat! I actually feel as though I am reading from both David Eddings and Rumiko Takahashi books!! I loved how you explained the presence of Inuyasha, Kagome, Rin and Sesshoumaru by using the Codex!! What a great touch!! Kudos!! Bravo!! The spacing that divides the different scenes was a bit wider so it helped with the transition. In chapter four, I liked how you got into the discussion about demons... very nicely done... Smooth and tasteful!! I was so pleased by the introduction of Aldur into the story! WOW!! It was amazing, truly. You kept him perfect! I enjoyed how the boys reacted and how Aldur described their hearts and then the comment about Kagome. Loved the blush fest that went on afterwards between Kagome and Inuyasha. Laughed when Sesshoumaru grumbled in his mind about them having to stop that while he was there. Then in chapter five I laughed at poor Inuyasha and the horse!! And his horse likes him!! I have a piccie for you about this though I didn't draw it!! If you like I'll post it on my journal. What an amazingly touching scene you wrote with Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru at nighttime with Kagome and Rin. That was really sweet. Inuyasha using his haori to keep the girls warm. I enjoyed how awe-struck Inuyasha was with Cho-Hag's castle Stronghold! That was great!! I really liked it!! I was bowled over with the court scene with Kagome's dress!! That was awesome. She sounded so beautiful!! You kept her in character nicely!! Polgar loves to dress up the girls under her wing, Soo true to her character!! I love the choice of colour! Awesome!! Poor Inuyasha caught staring at her chest!! Also very Inuyasha!! I was waiting for the 'Miroku' comment but realized that would have just taken away form the elegant and beautiful scene you were painting for us. Thank you for this story!! It's fast becoming one of my favourites!! Again you did an amazing job on Kagome- having her over-react and misinterept Inuyasha's actions during the court session. Sometimes she needs to have a smack to the head. Polgara was good at that. and the scene with the card game!! Hiliarious!! Thank you for sharing this story with us and please keep up the great work!! Can't wait to review the next three chapters!!
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Title: chapters 1-3
Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie-nsi On: July 09, 2006 13:14 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you can forgive me... I had only just started reading your story now. I think I might have to do this a few chapters at a time or I'll get too swamped.. Sorry... First,I really, really liked how you had started the story off. Very nicely done! Kudos to you! A treat! I enjoyed how you had Sesshoumaru meet BelGarion and Polgara first. Very nice. I laughed at how she used her vast armoury of skills to put the demon lord in his place. Washing/drying dishes!! very good. The sad part is you kept Ce-Nedra true to character... cause I still wanna throttle her like I want to when I read the Belgariad/ Mallerion series. I hope someone teaches her to leave Inuyasha alone. Then again Garion is quite whipped by her... Almost the same way Inuyasha is with Kagome. LOVED with way Inuyasha was when they met with Beldin!! lol!! I nearly fell out of my chair on that!! I wonder how Kagome would have reacted? Liked how Inuyasha's tummy made itself known... so Inuyasha!! I can see Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru forming an Alliance in this type of situation where they don't know what is going on. I like how you have kept the characters so in character while making this story!! I also loved how Jaken was stepped on by Silk. That was awesome. Someone else who does what Sesshoumaru does to that little toad. I did partily gag when Inuyasha mentioned that he might eat Jaken if he wasn't slimey... I think Inuyasha would have gotten turned off food completely if he did... giggles... And shoving Tessaiga up Sesshoumaru's butt would probably result in one sword barrier being activated and one VERY ticked off Sesshoumaru being launched off like a rocket... Interesting results... pictures it in her head. The only thing I found confusing was when you switched the scenes. It was close to the previous scene so I kept thinking they were one in the same, until about halfway through when I figured out-oh.. this is a new scene.. And then Kagome going on about her tests.. very Kagome-ish. And Sesshoumaru got introduced to Beldin!! what a hiliarious scene that was!! Please keep up the great work!! Look forward to reading then reviewing the next 3 chapters.
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