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| "Rehabilitation" Reviews/Comments [ 83 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Short-E [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2006 16:48 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't want to leave the computer for anything while reading this. It's accually one of the best stories I've ever read. Please update soon.
| Reviewed By: peregrine829 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2006 15:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Once again, another enjoyable chapter (even if nothing of any consequence actually happened). I was just a tad disappointed with Ed's reaction to Malfoy. I expected Draco flat on his back with Ed's blade at his throat before even finishing his sentence. Certainly I would not have been so benevolent as to have allowed Draco or his toadies to escape uninjured.
| Reviewed By: SparkieGoesHuzzah [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2006 01:26 CDT
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Yay! He did keep the pieces. Great update, I was starting to worry wether or not Malfoy was going to be mentioned. I demand that the little pansy gets his arse kicked. (Hehehehe)
| Reviewed By: Moonshadow14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 09:50 CDT
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... Please ignore the evil computer that hates me. Again, I'm sorry to take up all these reviews. But here's what I was trying to say: I hope that I answered your questions, and I hope you update as soon as you can!! and i'm sorry that my whole answer was a confusing run-on sentence. ^^
| Reviewed By: Moonshadow14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 09:46 CDT
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I have also just realized that my previous review...kind of died. So here's the rest of it(
| Reviewed By: Moonshadow14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 09:40 CDT
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ohh yeah!! Sorry for taking up another review, but I forgot to say that you get 1000 points for calling Snape an overgrown bat! ^^
| Reviewed By: Moonshadow14 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2006 09:35 CDT
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YES!!!! An update!!! Well, you asked in the beginning of the chapter what I love about the story, so... here it goes: You write very well, with no confusing, run-on sentences, and capitals and puntuation in the right places (it's really surprising how little editing goes into some stories on mm, so it is very much appriciated), and also your style of writing isn't too drawn out or too short, it's got drama and comedy in all the right places, and it's a crossover for two of my absolute favorite things (but it would be cool if Jurassic Park were in there, too, but that would probably be kind of hard and confusing, and would probably cause you to lose far more sanity than you would like). (
| Reviewed By: SparkieGoesHuzzah [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 13:27 CDT
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I also have a question. Does Ed keep the pieces of metal from the first chapter in his pocket or something?
| Reviewed By: SparkieGoesHuzzah [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 01:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I give it a ten. I loved it so much, please continue on with this story. I'd be all weepy and sad if it ended with "And his auto-mail was fixed-----THE END"
| Reviewed By: peregrine829 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 16:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First, I'd like to say that your a wonderful author Now moving on to specifics. You really captured the essence of Ed'd personal demons, from the attempted suicide, to the lecture from Mustang, to his confrontation with Winry. The fact that he couldn't look Mustang in the eye and instead averted his gaze to the floor shows how Ed refuses to accept the truth that Al made his own choices in life and willingly chose to sacrifice himself for Ed. You also knew exactly when to inject humor into a situation to keep it from becoming too dark. Most enjoyable in that respect would be Havoc and Hughes encounter with Snape and Mustang's brief "talk" with Hawkeye in the Room of Requirement. I read both of these at least three times to savor the mental images before continuing on. Finally, what Mustang said to Ed may turn out to be my favorite line of the story: "But if you live, Ed, that is the true challenge. By living, you can repent for any sins you may have committed. You can make things right again." I am absolutely obsessed with Rurouni Kenshin and that line is almost a direct quote (on an unrelated topic, I always thought Mustang and Seijuro Hiko could have been best friends or even brothers, their personalities are so alike). I hope this review is more to your liking. I usually prefer short, succinct reviews, but I understand that it is often beneficial to hear the advice/critcism of others.
| Reviewed By: Flame Phoenix (NLI) On: July 20, 2006 13:41 CDT
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Ah, yes. Sorry I haven't reviewed yet-- I've been reading this for some time now, and I'm not much of a review person, soo... ^_^;; However, as Chloe stated below, the whole story is made as plausible as it is because of how close Al was to Ed. I thought it was a little OOC for Roy to be shouting at Edward (usually he talks normally and gives the facts straight), but I can see why you would have him do that. Overall, a pretty great job with this story! (Now if only you would update Technicalities...)
| Reviewed By: timydamonkey [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 09:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very good. I've rated the originality 8 because, although this is certainly an interesting and original premise of a HP/FMA crossover, the actual crossover is a common idea... points for not making it the same old story like so many others, though. I'm glad Ed's got over the mopeyness. He needed a wake-up call and he's got one - because Al's sacrificing his life is pointless if Ed throws away the life that Al died saving. Ed would never react 'well' to Al's death, though I think he would possibly push a bit more to get the Stone. Then again, he hasn't much choice about where he is now. Hope that makes sense. Additionally, I like the way you haven't made Ed randomly blab his past to people he doesn't know, considering he won't even tell it to Rose - Al did that. He's a private person; if anybody found out anything about him, it's highly unlikely it'd be because he told them. Another plus point: you haven't immediately shoved Ed with Harry, Ron and Hermione. A lot of people do this and it's confusing as to why he'd end up with them right off the bat and getting on like a house on the fire. It's far too coincidental for my liking, when that happens. And you've done a great job keeping people in character... although it was a little shaky with Ed doing so much moping at first, but then Al means a LOT to Ed so it's a plausible reaction. Snape, Fuery and Hughes struck me as particularly amusing in this chapter. Enjoy your writing! -Chloe.
| Reviewed By: ChaosChiq [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 02:33 CDT
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Okay I would like to make the following corrections to my review, which I just looked over: -I was reading and trying not to laugh -You said ten words or more -be there to try and help Ed through the surgery? Thank you aaaand good night.
| Reviewed By: ChaosChiq [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2006 02:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, it's like 1:30 in the morning here and I was reading adn trying not to laugh at the same time. You said ten wordsor more so I'm writing more than ten words. My review sounds tired and dreary but please keep in mind that I'm half asleep. Okaaay so anyways I love your story so far please keep going um, hmm I dunno what to say otherwise-oh yeah, could Harry, Ron and Hermione be there to try and help Ed through the sugery? I was kinda hoping that it would help them mature, knowing that someone who's like their age can go through that. I was thinking it could make them stronger. I was tempted not to read this story because Al dies but then I just wanted to see what happens so good job. And this may sound annoying but I don't care: Update Soon! Pretty, pretty, pretty please?
| Reviewed By: peregrine829 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2006 00:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn you for killing Al!! Now that I've got that out of my system... Please update soon!! It's been a while since I've found a really good fic like this one and been able to read it cover to cover!
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