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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2006 22:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I particularly liked this chapter. A lot happened in it. It makes perfectly good sense that sesshoumaru wouldn't leave mizuki on her human night & they would keep it secret. I am so pleased with the fight & Izuma's comments. "well, of COURSE I wasn't planning on mating her." he is young, cocky and stupid enough to think that sess's threats could be ignored. Plus, it really wasn't realistic to me that he would develop this sudden respect to the extent that he would court a human. besides, like I said before, he's a child emotionally. Hideaki probably knows more about what happened than you let on. He is the northern lord; deep like the lake you described him as in the beginning, but definitely intelligent. He knows something happened, can probably guess exactly what it was, and didn't say a word, both because he thinks merkamou was in the right & because he doesn't want to cause a problem so close to the new war. So now Rin wants Merkamou. Good job. Of course, the lady of the east arrived with her four guards. Four more possibilities for Rin to meet. I didnt expect the lady's arrival. Dragons must have lots of concubines, not loyal like dogs. it would be nice if one of the concubine's sons died, and not one of the Ladys.
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: February 15, 2006 22:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are doing a very good job with this,
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 15:38 CST
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geezus isamu is a jerk!!! I new he was up to no good when he tried to cop a feel. and I LOVE that it was merkamou that put him in his place :). Damn right!!! thats his rin! I excited to see were this story goes from here. Oh and now the lady is at the front door! plz don't keep us in suspence for so long and update soon :). good luck.
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 13, 2006 23:00 CST
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Chapter: 15 OUCH. Isamu shows his true colors and they aren't good. I like Merkamou's defense of Rin. It is good that everything is out in the open now. You had a REALLY nice cliff hanger to this chapter. I hope you manage to write more soon.
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 13, 2006 22:58 CST
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Ah so Isamu makes his move. Interesting. Poor Ri n trying to be what she is not to please him. That almost never works. Though I like the response to the sneak attack. Good Job
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 12, 2006 21:36 CST
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Chapter 13: Hey I finally caught up. I guess that means you will have to write more right? ;) We find out more about the bond. I would like to see what Bokusenou. That could get very interesting. Speaking of interesting more Rin and Isamu. That was very cute. Though to be proper Isamu shouldn't be anywhere near her room but hey who cares what a Taiyoukai does. I like it that Rin's swords get repaired and they are now more powerful. I look forward to seeing what powers are granted to them.
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 12, 2006 21:32 CST
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Chapter 12: It is nice that Mizuki has such care of Rin. I like how she talks the Captain into getting the swords. And Rin has more problems with being normal. At least Merkamou has decent device. I can feel Kagome's pain where she has to write a letter to a "friend" and tell her that her son is dead. That has to be such a painful letter to write. Ah Totosai. He can always be such fun. Mizuki biting him. That was so cute. I thnk in some way Kagome was encouraging her. Though he deserved it. Interesting that Kagome's and Sesshoumaru's bond is different from any other. It will be interesting to see where that goes.
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 12, 2006 21:24 CST
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Isamu and Rin together. Very Cute. Pitty he puts into her head the concept of "normal" Since when was ANYONE normal. Except Rin doesn't realize that. Though Rin got her revenge by using him as a pillow. Merkamou whinning like a pup to Kagome was cute. I'm sure *I* would stay away from her when she is in over protective mother mode.
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 12, 2006 21:15 CST
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Chapter 10: I like the argument at the begining about waking people up. That was cute. Pitty things went down hill for them from there. The poison bombs were a good touch. I'm glad more than exterminators were using that. Love the description of the dragon and how Rin took him on. I like how Rin and Merkamou worked together
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 12, 2006 21:02 CST
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Chapter 9: I wrote a big long review with what I liked then lost it :( Anyhow it was very enjoyable.
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 19:23 CST
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well I was hoping for some more juicy stuff, but I guess I have no choice to be happy with he innocent kiss. Hey! and what was Isamu doing in Rins room in the middle of the night??? Thats kinda leading toward stalker isn't it?? And just because the suspence is killing me can you give a heads up on which way the pairing is going?? rin/isamu or rin/merkamou ?? I know your probably not going to say but I just thought I would ask. Please update soon :)
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Reviewed By: Cindyve13 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 15:18 CST
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i'm happy to start my weekend with an update to one of my favorite stories at this time. How long will it be before the really juicy stuff starts to happen?? Rin is going to end up with someone and I'm dying to find out who :). Good luck and update soon . PEACE!!!
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 10, 2006 08:50 CST
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Chapter 8: I love Kagome's reaction to the bet. It was very cute. It is rather amusing that the common thought is that Merkamou and Rin should not be left together unsupervised. I quite agree given what those two can get up to. Are you sure they are "grown-ups" and not just kids in adult bodies? ;) I like the fight and how Rin ended it. He deserved it. The chase around Ah-Uh was very amusing. I like the change in the relationship
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: February 10, 2006 08:40 CST
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Chapter 7: I love the rules and the reciting of them. Very amusing. Kagome disaplining young Isamu-sama is also extremely amusing. The poor cub doesn't know what hit him. Sesshoumaru attacking the barrier seems to be causing more problems that helping. I wonder if he will ever realize what he is doing and the problems he causes Kagome when she is trying to make a point. All in all quite a fun chapter.
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Title: Matchmaker
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2006 13:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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