| "Runaway Puppy" Reviews/Comments [ 89 ] |
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Reviewed By: CrimsonInHumanBlood [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 00:47 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Lol, interestingly funny argument. I like it keep up the updates. I have no idea of what names that would fit well... hmm
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Reviewed By: LadyIvy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 00:38 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
So, the brothers have somewhat come to terms. I don't blame you for having Inuyasha return to the castle with little fuss--there really isn't much he can do against Sesshomaru in his current state. A litter of kids doesn't sound bad (changing my mind from twins). I gave you some boys names, so here are a few girls names. Chiyo (eternal), Akiko (bright light), Nari (thunder), Hana (blossom), and Kioko (happy child). Good update!
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Reviewed By: sesshykoi0106 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2006 01:01 EDT
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great i think it should be a girl or litter! but yes update as soon as you can!!!
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Title: Hi.
Reviewed By: Kelle Marie On: June 22, 2006 20:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi!!!! Make Inuyasha have three kids! One boy and two girls. I love this story!!! Woot!! I can suggest some names I guess. Hmmm....Tsuya[boy] ummm...Sana[girl]...Kihara[girl]....Haru[boy].....Sakaki[Girl]...yomi[girl] ...Jaharo[boy].....Dasuke[boy]. Thats all i can think of. I hope I have helped you!
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Reviewed By: CrimsonInHumanBlood- to lazy to log in On: June 22, 2006 19:56 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I reread over the story. it is good. its a bit odd though. but thats why it is good. You're not from MN by chance are you?
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Reviewed By: CrimsonInHumanBlood [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 19:13 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a bit confusing cause of the lacking of updates then again it is also my fault for not reading the last of the other chapter before hand but anyways. It is good so far. A bit of errors but that is it. You also forgot to put a WIP for the status of the story. Lol. I think you should get a litter of pups it would be a good idea seeing how he is a dog demon and dogs in general seem to have litters of puppies. If you need an extra beta I'd be glad to help you out ^_^
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Title: A Litter! A Litter!!YEAH!!!
Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 18:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the new chapter. Don't worry I'm sure you'll find a job soon, if you haven't already. Keep your head up! You working on a new story? I'll keep my eyes peeled for it! Why use just boy or girl or even twins? Go for broke babe! A litter! Not many stories use 1 boy or 1 girl, and in yoai stories twins are used alot, but a litter would be very interesting. Let Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru enjoy the joys and headaches of trying to keep 4,5,or6 babie in line ^_~. Thank you for the new chapter & update soon please.~ B reading U!
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Reviewed By: inuyashawifey [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 14:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story rocks i hope update it soon i want to find out what happens to Inuyasha by the way you rock to
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Title: Finally!
Reviewed By: LadyIvy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2006 13:27 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! You finally updated. I've been waiting to see what more you were going to do. Don't let that troll get to you. People who anonymously bash other's fics are cowards, and they're just doing it to get at you. Pay that person no attention--I've had someone bash my fics before and I laugh (after privately getting mad). So you have a few problems--they are easy to fix if you want, if not, that's your choice. It's your story. Anyway, on to the chapter--poor Inuyasha. He just can't catch a break, can he? I like how you had Shippo attached to Rin and not wanting to leave, because that is very accurate in the way children react. They're very resilient and adaptable. I wonder how long Sesshomaru takes to find them (although it shouldn't be long because Inuyasha is human and pregnant, so he can't have gotten far). I do hope he finds Inuyasha before Kagome and the gang find him. Sesshomaru and Inuyasha need a chance to seriously work out their issues if you want them together in the end. If not, then Kagome and company should find him first and spirit her away. About the baby...I vote for a boy or twin boys (the heir is most often male). I have a few names for you as well: Amida (the name of a Buddha), Kano (the god of waters), Kinji (Golden child), Masa (good and straightforward), Benjiro (enjoys peace), and Chiko (arrow, pledge). I hope this helps and I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Title: Outstanding Story
Reviewed By: Leslie On: June 22, 2006 12:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked your writing style, but I've definitely read better. It was still very good and I believe that if you continue to write these things, your writing style will improve. The spelling and grammar wasn't bad. I don't pinpoint other people's grammatical mistakes because I guess I'm use to them now from FF.net. If you haven't been there, you wouldn't believe how many mistakes one can find in those stories and I've just learned to live with them. I give you a 10 because I believe it's not fair to give you anything lower without something specific to complain about. Your originality/creativity wasn't so good. If I didn't like this plot so much and see the different variations within the same storyline, I probably wouldn't have bothered reading this. I've run into at least 5 different stories with this same plot (although definitely with different variations and details), although not all of them were necessarily on this website (I'm very new here). But the fact remains that this storyline is cliche. Moving on, I really liked reading this story (despite having a cliche storyline). I noticed some definite drama and angst, but it wasn't overdone to the point of being cheesy. I found a lot of cheesy stories with this same plot and I'm glad to find one that has good angst and good drama. As for the overall rating, I believe that it deserves a 9. I said earlier that I enjoyed your writing style and enjoyed just reading it. I have no complaints about spelling or grammar and unless the grammar is absolutely horrible, I generally try not to nitpick about small details. I would've given you a perfect 10 if not for the cliche plot. I think you might be one of those people who needs to remember to simply draw inspiration from other stories/movies, not write your own variation of that same plot (which is what you did). But all in all, I really enjoyed reading this story and eagerly anticipate the next chapter(s).
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Reviewed By: sesshys numba1 gurl [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2006 21:36 EDT
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I LIKE IT ALOT dont leave me haggin please update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Hope_Poe23 On: June 08, 2006 14:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
The reason I think so low of your story is mainly because of the spelling and grammar. The spelling and grammar affects a lot your style. I might've read the story and liked it a bit if you hadn't mispelled one of the character's name. It isn't Songo... it's Sango. And I read all ten chapters up until now and didn't find anything good enough to read except for the part where Shippou tells Sesshoumaru off. And only then I thought "Oh wow.. that's so cute!" So.. you lack a lot in description, but I'll give you a five in originality because although I've read other stories about Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha together because of rape, it doesn't show much of a new idea because it lacks more thoroughness in the writing. Basically... it sucks.
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Title: More please!
Reviewed By: Nikkie23534 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 11:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a really fun fic to read. I love it! I hope you got the job at Build-A-Bear, its a really fun place. Both of my daughters have bears from there, and they went last weekend to make two new bears for their upcoming siblings. More chapters please ^_~! Thanks for writting this~B reading U!
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Reviewed By: sesshykoi0106 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 01:16 EDT
Comment/Review:
great i love it keep it up
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Title: Poor Inu!
Reviewed By: LadyIvy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2006 00:45 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It looks like Inuyasha and Sesshomaru are off to a rocky start, although I do like Sesshomaru's analogy to them being a married couple (and him sleeping on the couch). I feel bad for Inuyasha--his brother rapes him, impregnates him, scares him, then basically kidnaps him and takes him back to his home. I'm surprised Inuyasha didn't put up a bigger fight than he did, although a bloody Sesshomaru is an impressive feat for a pregnant demon. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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