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| "Descent" Reviews/Comments [ 86 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2006 23:44 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Well I just knew Al wouldn't do anything for those new group. He and Ed may be on the outs right now but I'm sure the thought of fighting against the currant military and having to face his brother on opposite sides had to go through his mind. Not only that but all those people he knows and were on friendly terms with, fighting against them? I just can't see Al doing that, he's a soft-heart person who connects easily with others. He fights to protect those he cares for not destroy. That Rolond guy bugs me though, he has seen Ed? And he smiled when someone meantioned the Elrics . . . creepy. I loved how Winry supported Al, letting him make his own decisions and speak his own mind, but still standing strong by his side. They seem of the same mind set, they do make a good couple don't they? LOL, Roy had Ed forging his name. Hmmm, wonder what he made him promise to do? A rub down? A special meal? Don't believe it's sexual, it just didn't come across that way; well at least to me it didn't. Well, guess I'll have to wait and see. Great update as always, looking forward to what comes next from you. Keep up the good work, hope everything is going well for you and your not to stressed with all you got to do. Take care.
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2006 09:03 EDT
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great chapter, loved the roy/ed interaction. hmm, so now the people from the peoples government are in Reizimbol huh? not good, i wonder what al will do with the information, he wasn't really part of the military but surely he has feelings for those he was around all those years with his brother. well, now envy is on the spot huh? i wonder what izuma is going to think about russell and fletcher. keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: catmoongirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2006 00:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my goodness! I absolutely loved it! Normally, I find shallow, pointless Ed/Roy fics, but you have written one that surpasses that dominating Roy and manipulated Ed cliche. I'm an author and an FMA fanfic writer myself and I hope it makes you happy to know that your fantastic ability to so vividly express emotion and inner turmoil is something taht I desperately aspire to. I love it and I can't wait for the next chapter.
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2006 19:50 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hmmm...did i like this chapter? dee,deedee...of course i liked it! but i'm partial i believe cause i like everything of yours i've read so far. very good chapter so happy to see ed open up to roy finally. it seems whatever it that ed gave up to save al and put him back the way he was is really eating the poor boy up. hmmm, does this mysterious act have to do with a lot of ed's distress lately? or at least has been the finale straw to where he is unable to take anymore? does that act some how have to do with what is going on with russell and fletcher? though roy wasn't use to play a psycologist he didn't do so bad. can't wait to see what you have planned next. thanks so much for the update! have a great day.
| Reviewed By: KawaiiTenshi (too lazy to log in lol) [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2006 15:24 EDT
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awesome! but wait.... What did Ed give up??!!! HMMM????!!!!
| Reviewed By: KawaiiTenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2006 22:52 EDT
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yay i have time for an actual review! Aww Winry is warming up to Al *gets all fuzzy inside* so cute. and Ed, oh he's so stubborn, but Roy is too. they need to suck it up and tell each oher how they feel... or its gonna blow up in their face... "His jacket was feeling uncomfortably tight recentlyââ'¬Â¦ He frowned. Not just his jacket, but his pants were tooââ'¬Â¦" -- Hmm..... what is that suppose to imply.... HMMMM *thinks*
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2006 15:58 EDT
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very good chapter. well, does roy finally have ed where he wants him? will he finally get some answers this way? poor ed, he has so much self doubt and hate, he wants to run away from everyone...hmm, i guess he doesn't see that as anything similar to what his father did huh? so that was roy's concenious maes talking to him...it has some points but nothing that can't be over came. al and winry was a nice break, things are progressing nicely between them. keep up the great work. here's hopeing MediaMiner is finally accepting reviews again
| Reviewed By: vincents_lover_ffall [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2006 05:18 EDT
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Youve updated! Yaay! I was so excited! Im a big fan of your fan fics and I just want to say yaay! And they're great! And keep going! And I love Ed and Roy despite their little quirks...I love it! Keep writing! Yaay! Oh, and this might be a little late cause I havent checked the net for a while but happy birthday! :-)
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2006 15:52 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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good chapter as always. hmm, what is going on here? poor fletcher and russel, they always seem to get into trouble and on the wrong side. loved that fletcher followed his brother. this war sounds like the beginnings of another isbal. loved the shot hawkeye gave ed. boy, she got him with that one. ed has a lot of explaining to do, doesn't he? well, i can't wait to see how mustage gets the information out of ed and what is going on with this war. thanks for the update, I had been wondering where you were. keep up the good work, I look forward to more from you.
| Reviewed By: The Cerulean Alchemist [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 23:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your writing is brillant. I love your FMA fics; all of them seem to strech the characters to their full potential. To be quite honest, I've never been a fan of yaoi fanfiction. It always seems to come off as dominatrix-esque. But you make it seem real, heartfelt, and as an actual relationship between two people would exist, not as some hormonal rampage. Bravo. Please keep writing. I wish more people here could weave a story like you.
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2006 11:25 EDT
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Happy B-day ZaKai, loved how roy was thinking about maes and their times together. how maes had helped him and his determination to be there for ed. sometimes just having another living soul who understands and can give you an anchor in life helps, right? the al and winry part was well done. it was a sad little chapter but, well written and was a great read. thanks again for giving us all a present on your birthday. i'm off to read the other one now.
| Reviewed By: Uniasus (being lazy) On: July 24, 2006 09:59 EDT
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Wonderful fic! I like how you did not have Ed jump right into being active like a lot of other fics consist of. I think you protrayal of his recation is much more realistic. Very nice, and update soon!
| Reviewed By: cryo On: July 24, 2006 02:41 EDT
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Wow *fans self* that was pretty heavy material. I'm pretty amazed Ed got that mean toward Winry - I am still sort of waiting to see where that anger was coming from. And eek, it looks like maybe both Ed and Roy are heading for a meltdown, wah! *hugs them both* I hope they both find what they need before it's too late...
| Reviewed By: cryo On: July 24, 2006 02:05 EDT
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May I register undying love? You got Ed and Al perfect here - Al spending all his time with Ed, even though he is attracted to Winry; Ed being emotional at having acheived their goal, and wow. Plot definitely coming, this is a story to watch :)
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 01:13 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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here i go again. loved how you wrote pinako. you did a great job with her character, she certainly seen right through to the heart of the issue didn't she? ah, age has a way of opening one's eyes. so, she noticed what was going on with ed all along huh? i'm glad pinako let winry know what was going on. poor ed, he is so torn about what to do and so sure they hate him. i can understand, it was a horrible fight. the scene where he is struggling with whether to call or not was so well done. riza and roy was a great scene as well. when roy asked if she here i go again. loved how you wrote pinako. you did a great job with her character, she certainly seen right through to the heart of the issue didn't she? ah, age has a way of opening one's eyes. so, she noticed what was going on with ed all along huh? i'm glad pinako let winry know what was going on. poor ed, he is so torn about what to do and so sure they hate him. i can understand, it was a horrible fight. the scene where he is was charging him for the talk, boy that's about right huh? she certainly has it all figured out just like pinako. well, expect the adult ladies of the group to have it all figured out the boys confused. lol, well that is a woman's job right? to be the counselor's for those in her life? seems roy hasn't dealt with all his demons either huh? but, sometimes it helps to have someone who can understand where you are more than the guys in the white coats. though is dealing with ed going to cause roy to go back and have to redeal with his problems from the past? it does seem the alcohol usage has gone up but, if things start to get more involved between those two will the alcohol usage go down. it seems roy uses it to fill in his emptiness. well, he did call to check. that was a great way to end the chapter and how you handled ed actually calling to check, him calling and happening to get al and just listening to his voice then hanging up. wonderful idea. keep up the good work. i'll be patiently awaiting more from you on this story.
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