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| "Descent" Reviews/Comments [ 86 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 ] | Reviewed By: Uniasus (being lazy) On: July 24, 2006 09:59 EDT
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Wonderful fic! I like how you did not have Ed jump right into being active like a lot of other fics consist of. I think you protrayal of his recation is much more realistic. Very nice, and update soon!
| Reviewed By: cryo On: July 24, 2006 02:41 EDT
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Wow *fans self* that was pretty heavy material. I'm pretty amazed Ed got that mean toward Winry - I am still sort of waiting to see where that anger was coming from. And eek, it looks like maybe both Ed and Roy are heading for a meltdown, wah! *hugs them both* I hope they both find what they need before it's too late...
| Reviewed By: cryo On: July 24, 2006 02:05 EDT
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May I register undying love? You got Ed and Al perfect here - Al spending all his time with Ed, even though he is attracted to Winry; Ed being emotional at having acheived their goal, and wow. Plot definitely coming, this is a story to watch :)
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 01:13 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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here i go again. loved how you wrote pinako. you did a great job with her character, she certainly seen right through to the heart of the issue didn't she? ah, age has a way of opening one's eyes. so, she noticed what was going on with ed all along huh? i'm glad pinako let winry know what was going on. poor ed, he is so torn about what to do and so sure they hate him. i can understand, it was a horrible fight. the scene where he is struggling with whether to call or not was so well done. riza and roy was a great scene as well. when roy asked if she here i go again. loved how you wrote pinako. you did a great job with her character, she certainly seen right through to the heart of the issue didn't she? ah, age has a way of opening one's eyes. so, she noticed what was going on with ed all along huh? i'm glad pinako let winry know what was going on. poor ed, he is so torn about what to do and so sure they hate him. i can understand, it was a horrible fight. the scene where he is was charging him for the talk, boy that's about right huh? she certainly has it all figured out just like pinako. well, expect the adult ladies of the group to have it all figured out the boys confused. lol, well that is a woman's job right? to be the counselor's for those in her life? seems roy hasn't dealt with all his demons either huh? but, sometimes it helps to have someone who can understand where you are more than the guys in the white coats. though is dealing with ed going to cause roy to go back and have to redeal with his problems from the past? it does seem the alcohol usage has gone up but, if things start to get more involved between those two will the alcohol usage go down. it seems roy uses it to fill in his emptiness. well, he did call to check. that was a great way to end the chapter and how you handled ed actually calling to check, him calling and happening to get al and just listening to his voice then hanging up. wonderful idea. keep up the good work. i'll be patiently awaiting more from you on this story.
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2006 00:55 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hey ZaKai! oooh, another chapter *does happy dance* sorry it's late and i get silly in the evening. ah, the morning after. you wrote that well. roy did allow ed to be in the dark about it for long, did he? al and winery had to have been hard to write but, it came a cross so well. poor al, sometimes no matter what you say it's wrong. poor ed too, that boy needs to open up and talk; about a lot of issues. roy at the store; oh, it can be so embarrassing sometimes when you pick up certain items. the small jokes just never stop do they? hmmm? *lol* that was a good one though. it never fails does it? you always run into someone you'd rather didn't see what you were buying. well, hawkeye will always look out for him won't she? another very entertaining chapter. keep up the good work, will be patiently awaiting more. *sits twittling thumbs looking hopefully at Zakai* i warned you that i was feeling silly! *smiles*
| Reviewed By: LisaK On: July 13, 2006 05:49 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this story
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2006 22:18 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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hello ZaKai, wow you certainly updated quickly. ed and roy in bed finally, you portrayed them as blushing virgins bumping around one another. it was very entertaining to read. my heart went out to ed when he looked at his automail, doesn't have much belief in himself. the whole interaction between ed and roy over ed's automail was very touching. does this go back to all his other problems with himself and his brother? the part where you describe ed's lips from roy's point of view and his observations on ed was wonderful. instead of portraying ed as some soft being you made him seem very real. nice touch. i personally like the fact that you didn't have them just jump right into having full on sex, doing it the way you did gives it a more believable point for the story. that's just my opinion mind you. really loved how you ended the chapter with the two wrapped in each other's arms, sweet ending. great chapter, thanks again for the update. oh, by the way got your email. as far as what i said about i liked your writing style well it's the truth! i don't say or write anything i don't mean. you are a very talented writer. i'll be looking forward to your next chapter. take care!
| Reviewed By: KawaiiTenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2006 16:08 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome...now al + winry...! right?
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2006 20:54 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another great chapter! i really like roy's voice of reason, maes, can just see that character leaning on roy's shoulder giving him advice. hated it when they killed him off in the series. my ghosh, how much more of a hint does that boy need? 'i'm better in bed then beside it.' lol. i know, poor ed is messed up and in your story see's himself as ruined. it was nice to see ed still himself though with the door. 'a nice person would have fixed it but, he didn't feel nice.' lol. al and winry together work very well, their interaction is very sweet. hmm, these dolls and the his soul attacting and transfering is very intersting, i'm looking forward to reading where you take that. ed in roy's bed? oooh, this could be a problem...*snickers*. yes, i'm sure something would be said if roy found ed in his bed humphing it...i don't know that it would be...bad though. thank you for remembering to post here. i'll be looking forward to more from you when you can get around to it. take care and keep up the great work.
| Reviewed By: BloodyBlack [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2006 15:33 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I love this story. your doing great i am also surprised that you haven't had more reviews by now. Well keep up the good work and up date soon!
| Reviewed By: littleolmee [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 15:30 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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just found your story. your doing a great job with it. very interested to find out just what ed did to be able to return al to his body. this organization you've created is an interesting twist as well. hmm, does ed's mood swings have to do with his coma? got a real big laugh out of that bit with mustage about hand to gland! that was a good one! i'm shocked you don't have more reviews then you do, your doing a great job on this story, it's well thought out, and really grabs you. hope you stay with this, will be watching for your next update. thanks for sharing this story with us, take care.
| Reviewed By: Lisak On: June 26, 2006 10:58 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Can't remember if I started reading this story here or on another site - anyway - great story and thanks for the update.
| Reviewed By: KawaiiTenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2006 14:09 EDT
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omg, that was sooo sad!
| Reviewed By: KawaiiTenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2006 11:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really like this so far, u are capturing them great. keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: RedEarth On: May 22, 2006 10:59 EDT
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Very nice.Update soon!!
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