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| "Blizzard" Reviews/Comments [ 67 ] | | Pages (5): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 › » ] | Reviewed By: MitoFreak On: July 21, 2006 21:08 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you are a very talented writer and I did enjoy the story. But I have to admit that I am a little dissapointed. Just like in Ships in the Night, the story was well developed, great dialogue and scene description the story flowed well. But the problem I have with both Ships and Blizzard is that you created all this drama and conflict between Keitaro and all the residents that you never resolved, you opted for a somewhat quicker ending that never delt with it. I'm sure thats the ending you always intended, I guess I'm just wishing there was more. Keitaro never resolved his problems with the other tenants in Ships and he didn't here either he just left. Since Keitaro did do that in the Anime and the Manga there are precidents, but I just wished you could have had more interaction especially with Naru, Motoko and Shinobu. Seriously, how would they deal with Keitaro and Shinobu's mom having a sexual relationship? Anyway, good story, I just wish you'd resolve more of the conflicts in your future stories.
| Title: So you're the Rod Serling of LH, I see...
Reviewed By: thebigW [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2006 09:05 PDT
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Life is good, then something breaks, and it all goes to hell. This one I liked. She's insane and she works in an asylum. Explains the pained look on Shinobu's dad's face in ep #2, poor bastard. See you next time, here in the Twilight Zone, Love Hina style... W.
| Reviewed By: Webdog On: July 20, 2006 23:04 PDT
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wow man... i got chills at the end. truely awsome.
| Reviewed By: Krubbsy On: July 20, 2006 02:41 PDT
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Awesome awesome awesome!!! New pairing, Keitaro going mad, what else could you want???
| Title: Another excellent work completed
Reviewed By: Fatuous One On: July 20, 2006 01:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, after having missed reading the other chapters until this point... I have to say that it was very... enthralling. I could have seen it extended in so many different, and disturbing ways, but suddenly... it ended. Perfectly, I might add. While you could have gone off into many other directions, I think that the way it ended is fitting, if disheartening. While this ending isn't as satisfying (that is to say, it isn't quite as complete feeling), I don't really think it was supposed to be. Regardless, well done, this is another bit of involving fiction that you've created.
| Reviewed By: Drool On: July 19, 2006 18:25 PDT
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The end seems a bit... abrupt I suppose, it dosen't have the same pace as the rest of the chapters I think. Regardless, that was a brilliant ending, Shinobu's Mother being called a 'resisdent angel' when she in reality is just as messed up as the people that she takes care of in the asylum, I love it. And I'm sure other reviewers will agree that we will love you forever and ever if you do more fics ^^ preferably with her ;) I love that character that you conjured up, as I'm sure others do as well.
| Title: wow.
Reviewed By: RAW19 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 17:09 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
as others have said, i to hope that you plan to continue this story in the future. the ending was great and very dark, but left much to be desired. as i've said before i don't think i've ever read something like this before, and i highly enjoyed it.
| Reviewed By: denisud On: July 19, 2006 16:53 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know where you got the idea for that last chapter. Also I think an epilogue is in order. Maybe Our two primary girls finding out about Nurse Mahera's 'treatment' of Keitaro. Seems so sad that he'll be tormented and abvused the rest of his short insane life dennisud
| Reviewed By: rdelancy On: July 19, 2006 16:31 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
not usually a big fan of darkfics but very good
| Reviewed By: SAnSa On: July 19, 2006 13:24 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another good fic. This is a great history but i think the end was a bit rushed(this idea had material for a lot more chapters). anyway i hope this fic gets a continuation or at least an alter ending. maybe not now, but in a not too distant future.keep the good work and i cant wait to see what new fresh idea youll come up with.
| Reviewed By: Tulkas On: July 19, 2006 10:12 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, that was unexpected. While I suppose it was a decent ending in its own right, it does feel like some of the character development was leading elsewhere. The repercussions from Naru's little ordeal had the potential to drag out for a while on its own, not to mention Yuki's odd change in the fourth chapter, something which seems to be brushed aside in the end. Also, the issue with Motoko and her eagerness to "spar" some more seems to be left hanging. I'd like to hope that you're considering writing more than one ending. Consider it a challenge to your creative abilities, if you will. All in all, a great story, but I guess I'm just a sucker for happy endings.
| Reviewed By: rentauri [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 09:04 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow this story was great, distrubing but great. A couple of things kind of ate at me in the end. First what were Yuki's feeleings. She seemed to always like to manipulate him but there were times that she was truly loving. I figured see enjoyed the manipulations and result but was there something under that. Also Motoko, it appeared as though you were going to use her for something big but then she kinda faded into the background. That wasnt really a big deal but it seemed strange. Overall a great story, nice style and characteriztions were top notch.
| Reviewed By: Alzrius [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 08:21 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An excellent fic, truly. My only complaint is that Yuki's juxtaposed feelings aren't ever fully explained. When she shows a bit of kindness towards Keitaro at the end of chapter four, that leaves you wondering what she really feels, but that's then lost amidst her use of him at the end of the fic. Does she really just see him as a sex-toy to be manipulated, or does she have some real feelings for him? The end of the fic seems to make that pretty clear, but I wonder. Also, as something of a lark, I kind of wish we could've seen Shinobu's reaction to finding out what her mother and Keitaro were doing (to say nothing of how her mother is in bed). I look forward to your next work!
| Reviewed By: Scyggy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 08:06 PDT
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That's... Fucked... Up... and that's all there is to it.
| Title: Dark...yet good
Reviewed By: A-Z Mark II [MediaMiner Member] On: July 19, 2006 07:13 PDT
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Nice wrap-up. Love Hina is such a happy place in cannon, but this one got a lot of the feel of NGE. Interesting contrast, my friend. Job well done!
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