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| "The Intertwined" Reviews/Comments [ 76 ] | | Pages (6): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 16:07 EDT
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I thought this chapter was great. I think i'm finally getting a hang of your plot...maybe. I don't know if i worded that right. but one thing i have to say: Everytime i check my email and see that you udpated, it lights up my day like the never-present Sun in the Arctic. hehe....i don't think i said that right either....
| Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 04:01 EDT
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Oh, that was a GREAT chapter! I really enjoyed Miroku's observation of Sesshoumaru. (Especially since I think they may be spending a lot of time together. Heh heh!) Seriously, though, it's a nice idea thatthey would become familar with each other and even find admirable traits in each other, too. And Miroku feeling somewhat privileged to be able to see the side of Sess he was seeing, I think says a lot. Brilliantly done! And we got treated to some of Sess' acerbic wit in this. That's exactly how I always picture him. And I enjoyed Sess' thoughts about the interesting friendship(?) Youko and Inuyasha have struck up. I think that rang very true, too. Youko's teasing, yet trying to teach him seems to set up what will be a very interesting dynamic in that group. (Especially since Inu is still getting flustered over Youko's suggestive comments. Heh heh!) I think Sess' thoughts revealed a lot about Youko, and even if they do divide up into two threesomes, I can easily see this group staying together. I liked Youko teasing Kouga about being whipped, and Inu getting so tickled by it, then having the situation turned back around on HIM -- too funny! And how nice that Youko refrained from adding insult to injury by not pointing it out to him. Hmmm. So, I'm wondering, is it just that their auras are mixed, or do they actually have each other's abilities now? They mentioned that Sango had not been a miko before. Can she see and purify the Shikon shards now? And does that mean that Kagome will be able to fight and slay demons like Sango does? I'm very interested to find out about all the pest-critters coming to them. what's up with that? And lordy day! Someone please teach Inuyasha to be more circumspect -- he even embarrassed ME with his comment about them "squatting" outside. LOL!! Can't those other three males DO something with him? LOL!! This was just a great, great chapter!! And congrats on winning the contest!
| Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 20:55 EDT
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i guess i will explain, cuz i just remembered things. The story is continuing in a fluid, non-repetant manner, you're style of writing is like any other author's. you have barely any spellign and grammar problems, the originality is pretty much there. I really enjoy the humor and the way you KNOW every character in your story. You can type out their personalities perfectly. It's refreshing from some of teh other stories i've read.
| Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2007 20:47 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
ello. i think you're a fantastic writer and you should continue with the story!! MUAHAHAHAHA. wait.....you're not the one who said she wasn't gonna keep writing if no one reviewed, are you......nope. anyway, wonderin when teh next chpt. will come!! Keep writing! um, teh ratings explain themsleves. that's basicalled what i think, so no point in explaining.
| Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: May 28, 2007 03:14 EDT
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Hahaha I have to admit my reviews cannot match the ones that madmiko gives but I do try XD Im very interested where you do all your research for all these little facts here and there that pop up in your story. I wonder what Naraku's trying to plan with his little spell of his, granted its not a very little plan. I can bet it is actually quite a big picture going on
| Reviewed By: darknessmoon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2007 19:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this and it gives me somthing to read as my parents put me under house arrest and i'm home schooled! please keep writing
| Reviewed By: Drachegirl14 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2007 13:18 EDT
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So much going on, but ti's written so well, with few errors. Might I question the pairings? But not that that's my point. I just want you to keep going as best you can, kk?
| Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2007 04:09 EDT
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THAT was FABULOUS!! I kept trying to get the darn page to scroll down more, but it just wouldn't cooperate. *sigh* Nice, long chapter. And SO much good stuff in it! I love the care you took to describe the effects of the henbane and the details about the auras and the layers. Excellent -- that kind of stuff just adds so much when I'm picturing it in my mind. And the obvious research you did really added to it. You know, I kept wondering how in the world Sess and Sango would get together -- it's not a pairing you see often, and I never could see it -- until NOW. Good golly, Miss Molly! How obvious and perfectly logical!! When you mentioned that Kohaku might have been playing up Sango's appeal to Sesshoumaru, I literally hit myself in the head and said, "Well, DUH!" I'm now totally sold on the idea. It makes perfect sense. And while I just couldn't believe Inuyasha let the other two go after the girls without him, I just loved that as one way of showing his growing maturity. It was great that he recognized the very real need to find adequate shelter, and realized that as a human, he wouldn't be as much help if they had to fight Naraku to save them. So, kudos on that! I really, really loved the detail you put in on Naraku's spell, all the while not letting us in on what his final plan for it is. (AArrgghh!) And I DOUBLY loved the idea that he was intentionally forcing one of their allies, Youko, Miroku, or Kaede to be the one to seal the spell by having to use the ingredient necessary to counteract the henbane. That was pure evil and simply brilliant. My hat's off to you! And I was getting a little worried that Inu and Miroku were going to end up having to convert and comfort each other when the silver-haired hotties got the women, so I loved it when Inu covered Kagome in his haori and had them use the monk's robe to cover Sango. Maybe he IS differentiating between them and his feelings for them, after all. Whew! And hopefully, the two long-time companions won't be completely left out in the cold when the loving starts. Heh heh!! This was just awesome, and SO worth the wait. The only thing is, NOW I'm dying for more!
| Reviewed By: adara205 On: May 02, 2007 00:01 EDT
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fuckin great! plz don't make me wait to long for the nxt chapter I no longer hav a televison and that tends to leave my house a bit boring.
| Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: May 01, 2007 05:50 EDT
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Interesting chapter with Naraku's plans beginning to fall in place. I loved the well planned out thoughts.
| Reviewed By: smilingkitsune On: April 30, 2007 13:06 EDT
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Once again a fascinating chapter with much thought and hard work put into it. I love the plot of the story and the twists you keep throwing it. Thank you and keep itup.
| Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 29, 2007 00:58 EDT
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THAT was a terrific chapter! I loved the way Naraku's strategy worked. The distractions his puppets created were perfect. The whole thing was so well-written, I felt like I was watching the anime. Oooooo! I just can't wait to see what his real scheme is! Loved the lustful looks he was giving the gals, too. (Hey! Naraku may be evil, but he's an evil hottie. Heh heh!) I did have to giggle that Youko, of all people, was the one to make sure the gals had some clothing on. The whole chapter was just ... SO GOOD! Now i'm just going to be dying of suspense until the next one! Excellent job! (Oh! And what was your new commission? Is it posted? I'm going to check your gallery. You know, I'd love to have a couple of other pieces ...)
| Reviewed By: kizuna4me [MediaMiner Member] On: April 26, 2007 15:02 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great and interesting story!! update please!
| Reviewed By: Sam_Sama_Death [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 19:40 EDT
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You've done exellent keeping in character, though I saw a few errors with word choice. Still, you did do a good job, please do continue!
| Title: update please
Reviewed By: lady silverfox a.k.a. mychelle 79 On: April 18, 2007 19:18 EDT
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good story please write more please!!! make it a kagome youko story please!!! lemon,lemonade,lemonlime lemons all around so lemons anyone??!!!
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