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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 13:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thank you I love this story.
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Reviewed By: smilingkitsune On: April 18, 2007 10:48 EDT
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this is such a neat story. i love youko's personality in this he's such a perv XD what to do with that guy? looking forward to a new chapter soon
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Reviewed By: Yue no Rei On: April 18, 2007 10:01 EDT
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Such awesome chapters from an equally awesome writer. I'm not surprised. You have me hooked. I love how you portray the characters so nicely for the lack of better term. Im surprised that you dont have more people reviewing because you have such a refined writing style. I'm looking forward to the next chapter
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2007 04:50 EDT
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Awesome chapter!! If you had done nothing but have youko taunting and teasing Inuyasha, I would have loved it for that alone -- LOL!! "When I get my hands on you ..." "Promises, promises." Ha!! I also caught and was interested in the way Youko is already thinking of the group as his entourage. I see a power struggle in the future. And now Sess has been added to the mix. Well, we all KNOW who the leader of that pack would be if he wants to. LOL!! Having Gau infect Rin was the perfect way to get Sess involved. I like the way you took care of Kouga -- I love him, but even I don't think I could take one more smexy beast stirring the pot. Whew! His thoughts about Kagome and Inuyasha were interesting. This is just looking great!! Keep going!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2007 03:35 EDT
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Chapter 6 was very, very interesting! I am so curious as to how you will make the timeline work now. I liked Youko's teasing of Inuyasha -- that seemed VERY in character. And Inu seemed just a tad jealous of Kag's reaction to Youko, too. Then, he had the thought that since none of them were in a physical relationship, it was only natural that she would react like that. I'm not sure why he was thinking PHYSICAL relationship instead of just relationship, period. And then he got kind of puffed up thinking that, well, Youko does kind of look like HIM. LOL!! I just can't figure him out. He's jealous, but not. He wants her, but not necessarily HER because he's in love with her or anything. Then he acted REALLY jealous of Kurama. You know, I really don't think Inuyasha hads grown up so much after all -- he's very flighty in his affections. And Kurama and Youko's revelations about their little demon group, which apparently includes Shippou and Inuyasha (and I will assume Sesshoumaru)are really laying the groundwork for the future relationshops of the group, ne? But for the life of me, I can't figure out how that's going to work. You've got me SO curious!! Kurama and youko didn't act like they were MATED to Kagome. And the mention that the two women who had started the group had been missing for 565 years, ... well, what in the world happened to them? That sounds like neither of them mated with any of the demons. (And then there will be the whole thing about Youko dying and ending up in Kurama to deal with.) My mind is just boggling, and I will look forward to finding out the answers!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2007 04:12 EDT
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Another great chapter! I really like this "manipulator" you have invented. It's very clever. Loved Inuyasha's discomfort around the group's new pervert -- LOL!! He's not even sure if Youko LIKES girls. HA! I wonder what Naraku's plans for Gau are? How does he hope to use him against the group? This is a very interesting direction you are heading in.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2007 03:54 EDT
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I'm up to chapter four now, and I think it was my favorite one yet! I really loved the way Youko was beginning to yearn to join the group instead of just following and observing them. It was really kind of a poignant ralization for him, I think, but I'm glad to see he acted on it. I loved the way he was surprised that they were greeted so kindly by Jinenji's mother. I also really like the way Kagome and Sango team up on Inuyasha's human nights. Their friendship is the stellar point of this fic, in my opinion, and I love the way you write it. Great work on the mysterious illness, and the way Youko explained it to them. Nice job!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2007 03:55 EDT
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Oh! Almost forgot! I REALLY liked the idea that Kagome measured how far Inuyasha could leap -- that seems like something a person would really do. That way she has an idea of how far they can travel in a day and stuff like that. That was a terrific detail!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2007 03:51 EDT
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I'm up to the third chapter now. I am really liking the way you have Youko following them and observing them -- it's a very interesting way to tell the story so far! So, Miroku and Inuyasha have basically admitted to teach other that they both like/want BOTH girls, but Miroku prefers Sango. And THAT'S why Inu kinda/sorta, but not really focuses on Kagome? It will serve them both right to end up getting only ONE of the girls apiece, and have to SHARE her with another male. Hmph. And I am seriously thinking it would serve them both right to lose out completely. (Except I have such a soft spot for them, darn it!!) Seriously, what's up with the men? Kagome and Sango seem to have single-minded, faithful feelings for their respective man so far. And I think they would both be hurt to know the one they love has feelings for their friend. And it WAS funny that Youko has a healthy respect for menstruating females! See how smart he is?
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2007 03:23 EDT
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Just read the second chapter. I liked the way Youko prepared the firewood for them, and traded pocky with Shippou to appease his curiosity. I have to confess, I DO understand Inuyasha's thoughts about his feelings for Kagome and Sango since they had both stood beside him for so long, but, ... I hate the idea that he doesn't think he could choose between them -- that he didn't know whose sleeping bag he would rather crawl into. You really think he would have learned his lesson after the whole Kikyou and Kagome mess. So, as soon as Kikyou is out of the picture, he replaces her with Sango? I would think he might finally focus his attentions and affections on Kagome. Wouldn't Kagome be incredibly hurt to know of his feelings for her friend? I liked the way Youko made sure Inuyasha was out cold so he could get a better look at everyone. Too funny that he "molested" Inuyasha's ears!! And I really liked the detail about the girls' hair -- thanks to Kagome's modern hair products. I am wondering, though, at this point are the girls linked? Or does that happen later? I'm assuming it hasn't happened yet, since miroku keeps feeling Sango's butt and Kagome wasn't yelling at him, too. Oh! And loved Youko's thoughts about Miroku being a man after his own heart! LOL!!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2007 02:55 EDT
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Just read the first chapter -- that was a good beginning! th eidea of the girls being linked is very intriguing and has endless possibilities. I loved Miroku's explanation about the tension in his hand from carrying the Shakujo -- sounds reasonable enough. LOL!! And Youko's thoughts about clinging to Kagome like Shippou were so HIM. Even better was when he wondered what their reactions would be if he allowed them the privilege of seeing him -- HA!! Ego much? I really like the idea that they left a thank you for him. Nice!!
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2007 00:49 EDT
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I liked this chapter. When you mentioned going north to look for the sorceress (SP) near the wolves, I thought 'Kouga.' DUH!!! so now I'm inclined to think the 6th is Kouga, unless it is Suichi. DANG. I have a galloping allergy to mispelling, and I can't come up with the correct way to spell "sorceress" unless I look it up in the dictionary and this just doesn't feel quite right. I pulled up Word, and it has 'sorcery' but not sorceress. oh, well. On a note other than my peculiarities, it was fun to have the modern Kurama make an appearance. What on earth is going to happen to cause the group to lose the two women? One of the things I like about this fic is that you seem to have a clue where the fiction is going. i.e. you have an outline of sorts in your head. Trust me. This is an extremely rare and, IMO, prized feature in fanfiction.
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Reviewed By: DYquem [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2007 22:25 EDT
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Yay. another chapter
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Reviewed By: Icywolfflame [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2007 17:11 EDT
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this is pritty cool, I've followed it sence it was first posted and I am enjoying it compleatly! i cant wait untill the next chapter is posted, though at first i was a bit confused, i just reread it and it all made sence to me again.^__^
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Reviewed By: VixenOfTheFlame(nl) On: March 29, 2007 23:55 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Its late (Skool 2morrow) so I cant write everything I want just know this story is the shit.
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