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| "Dubious Relations" Reviews/Comments [ 56 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] | Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 10:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i dont see the why of this chapter. i like chiyo but you have to tie up this chapter to how it shapes sess, otherwise this is a meaningless chapter. i do not like meaningless chapters. chapters must have a reason... and a chapter dedicated to chiyo must have relevance to the main fic.... which i dont see yet, you could of course always tie it up later, but your admission gives you away. so dont do that.... your fic is rather nice, and deserving but you keep trying to tear it down in your a/n. dont do that. dont keep saying it sucks... just say - if you feel less than happy that you werent happy with the chapter but you posted for you readers, that goes better. the reader is aware that there might be fic difficulties withour your initial judgement. just a tip. you're doing a good job, hence the nomination. someone thought it was wonderful and deserving enough to be voted. and being voted might get you more readers - so dont turn them off by making your efforts small by belittling them a bit. that was a longish gab. i like your fic, it wasnt perfect - like i said enough with the substitution already. inu should have gotten wise immediately after the 2nd disappearance of kags. still... nothing has happened to sess - which you left in a cliffie, as the reader is only left with your a/n to assure him of the non-rape. The reader is still left hanging about as to what will happen. so, i think the readers needs to know soon. am i too demanding? i hope not. i like to think i am a fair reviewer, that is, an unbiased one.
| Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 09:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you have sess IC. and kagome is IC. she is slightly tactless, and here you display it in all its glory. yes, i realize you exaggerate it a bit, but it is a useful plot device, and done nicely. thank you. i dont think i can stand sess being raped by naraku. i dont like the fics where inu is raped by naraku either (see slave in mm and aff - inu has undying angst in that fic, it bothers me terribly) i hate naraku, and thank you for not leaving it a cliffie. anyway, arent you happy i am reviewing by chapters, against my usual style... but anyway, my fault for missing this. your other fic - the oneshots also sound interesting - except there are oneshots wherein inu is death - and i'm not happy with that chappie. sorry for the short digression into your other fic. anyway, back to my reading
| Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 09:41 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
this didnt really suck - the reason why this is an 8 and the 10 because you cannot keep the facade going on for long without inuyasha catching on. i mean it just wont fly and keep inu IC. this goes for the rest of the inu gang. normally inu would have been highly suspicious when she didnt sit him the first time. inu is a very suspicious guy. he has to be. this is how he has survived. he would be the first to suspect that it wasnt kagome, particularly since he fancied himself as liking her a lot (mind you, i think he likes sess, except that sess was in this killing mode). anyway, that explains the rating. chapter wise it was okay, but stop with the fake kags already. enough is enough. dont make inu stupid, he isnt. and neither is miroku and sango stupid though they would have longer patience than inu.
| Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 09:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
me hopes that naraku isnt going to destroy sess's mating with inu. i could personally kill him if that happens. a long excruciatingly painful death - that is what is appropriate for the appalling creature that naraku is. i hate him. every fic i read reinforces that hatred.... so there is no need to add to my hatred, but i fear that is where this fic is headed. i like your description of a glowing sess - as mark of his mated state.... i really like it. and i agree that mates cannot harm each other. good for you. you went along the same lines. and so now i proceed, a little hesitantly... i do so hate naraku.
| Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 28, 2007 09:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you win. i wasnt going to do a review until i hit the end of the posted chapters but ... well, i guess you deserved it. wonderful fic, and a rare one for uke sess. sess is usually the seme, being larger, more powerful, etc. etc. and inu being the wonder half-breed. you have the powerful demon as the seme, and the explanation is just as wonderful. do you know snow? were you in any way influenced... by CH.. her funny seme inu! anyway, i like your take in this fic we have a powerful sess, the victim of his powerful heritage (snickers)... i mean all that power has to have a cost. i really hope sess has mated. inuyasha is the only universe where i do not follow the canon pairing ... the canon pairing being het (i do read doggieearlover's het fics) but my favorite has evolved into sess/inu fics. i love the 2 together, they seemed perfect.... and with no more inus... welll, i'm hoping they will repopulat the demon world with their kind... of powerful inu. enough gushing and let me get on with the rest of the posted chapters.... i look at mm every other day, how come i didnt see this up in the new fics... anyway, i'm seeing this now and reading... it most enthusiastically... i am very much enthused at your chappies.
| Reviewed By: Kamakura Yumi On: May 20, 2007 15:40 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, don't change a thing. I like a little teasing now and then.... I quite like this little side story. That's a lovely picture you paint of Sesshomaru as a bright, happy little boy. The thing is everybody has to grow up sometime, and if it was not in Sesshomaru to begin with, how else could Chiyo draw that coldness out? That's just my opinion. I'm curious though. What did happen to Sesshomaru's birth mother? Or did you already say, and I wasn't paying attention? *red face*
| Reviewed By: Polka Dot On: May 19, 2007 16:42 CDT
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I can guess what Sessy thought of the human wedding ceremony, but I still wanted to read it, will you go back and pick up where Chiyo left off.
| Reviewed By: Polka dot On: May 16, 2007 20:17 CDT
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It's hard to have sympathy for Inuyasha when he's such an idiot.
| Reviewed By: KamakuraYumi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 14:36 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pregnant Sesshomaru. Love it! I can't promise you'll get a larger volume of reviews if you move it to the Yaoi section, but it will be a little easier for the right readership to find your fic. I was a little disappointed at first that there weren't any lemons but I have to say Inuyasha teasing little erotic remememberings at the oddest of moments are red hot. I'd go so far to say it's more fun than reading an actual lemon! I just love Inuyasha's reaction to finding out that Sesshomaru is pregnant and mated. Typical man! It couldn't be his, could it?! So, how come Inuyasha does not remember marking him? Replacing Kagome was a bold and original move. That ear grabbing was just cruel! Poor Inuyasha! I really like this one and I look forward to the next update.
| Title: **hugs**
Reviewed By: asialisek [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2007 23:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ganbaru = to try one's best ganbarimasu = please try your best~ n_______n and I mean it too! mm mmm lot's of pent up anger our Sessy has for our Inu.... two stubborn inu.. **shakes head** Just need to beat the snot out'of each other, kiss'n'make'up .. heh. but! that's not insinuating that i'm not IMMENSELY enjoying the drawn out angst. oh yes. yes I am. ^__^ and okee for sleazy Naraku (he is sleazy after all), and messin' w/ Sessy's head~ haha, I love how so many things are out in the open, but no one has yet to connect the dots. YAAY! PLEASE ADD MORE SOOOOON~~~~~ GAN~BA~RI~MASU~~~~~
| Title: **kudos!!**
Reviewed By: asialisek [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 09:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aaaaaaaaaaaaaww~ Sessy got caught... **not gonna nag not gonna nag not gonna..** @__@ please please say it ain't gonna turn into another rape story na no~~~~~~ >__< hopeless romantic that i am... **sniffles** those stories have a tendency to turn really icky.. can't ever finish'em.... **sni~~~ffles** other than that, mmm... gah! figure it out already baka inu! **gnaws on sleeve** n___n mm.. of course i wish the chap. was longer.. mmm... and... gah! need to know what happens!! nee~~~~~~~d to kno~~~~~~~w~~~~~~ gyan~ T_T baka-inu needs to realize what he did... **pinches his ears** i'm really anticipating more~ **hugs** beat that writers block down w/ a blunt stick~~ a blunt stick with splinters~ **smiles innocently** GANBARIMASU!!!!!!
| Title: uber awesome Sess-uke excuse tactic~~~!!
Reviewed By: asialisek [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2007 20:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yaay. I like where this story is going. I think it's tricky making sesshoumaru a believable uke, but so far so good. The guy is calculating, way too serious~ totally fun to mess with, but too often when it comes to these fics is either he or Inuyasha turned into a bubbling girl that just happens to have a penis. @_______@ I hope that's not what you had in mind~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ **humbly begs** I luv the setup for this story~ I like that yer makin' it hard on Inuyasha, his conflicting emotions concerning Kagome (and I'm curious what happened to her too...........) I also like that it's got a serious kinda feelin' to it~ and I hope it'll end up being a baggillion chapters!!!! X3 In other words~~~~~~~ **takes deep breath** write more please write more please write more please write more please~~~~~~~~~~~~~ **cough** KUDOS!!! ... Kudos~~~~~~
| Reviewed By: Strawberry_chaos [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2007 20:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another awesome chapter! Very intruiging. This story just keeps getting better and better! But you skipped the lemon!!! *cries* i imagine that would have been etremely difficult to write though lol, with sesshy having to explain things to inuyasha! Anyway, the details you wrote were enough to keep me happy. You bothered to research the castle! And the way you've written about it has come out really good as a result. Great work! This is a really good plot! so far, i think each chapter has been even more interesting than the last. pleeeease update as soon as you can!
| Reviewed By: Strawberry_chaos [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 18:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
iii!!! Great chapter! You write so well, and i LOVE it when Sesshy's the uke! i'm totaly excited to read the next chapter, so please update soon!
| Reviewed By: Strawberry_chaos [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2007 12:00 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is really good so far! I love it! one spelling mistake i noticed a few times though- it's tessaiga, not tesseiga. Poor inuyasha! I hope he's ok! Let Naraku eat kagome or something! that would be funny. I'm really looking forward to reading more, so update as soon as you can please!
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