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Reviewed By: Kimaya Aya [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2007 12:45 CST
Comment/Review:
The um cliffy yeah it was good but not good enough. Need to do better. But the overall story was good. Ciao.
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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2007 18:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A very nice chapter. I don't think my consistency detector will be of use in this chapter because I got a massive headache halfway through (caused by sleep deprivation, not your writing), so I had to stop and go get some sleep. I really liked the whole thing with the ceremony, so your research payed off I think. I had no idea that Kagura was the name of a dance. That explains some things about the character... anyway, It looks like dog boy is relying on his nose a little too much and jumping to conclusions... not too unusual for him. I really look forward to the next chapter and I am sorry that I don't have much more to say about this one. I think it was good and it really sets up the rest of the story nicely. Oh... and Sesshoumaru's nightmare. I think you did a great job on that. The nightmares of a demon would have to be truly terrifying, especially for one named Sesshoumaru.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2007 18:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
God I just wanna hit InuYasha over with a foam covered bat... (Which is a very good thing (especially when he thinks that Miroku is cheating on Rin).) I love how Sesshomaru is at the end of the latest chapter... it is purely wonderful! Kagome doing the Miko thing was very cute! The Sango and Rin part was super funny!
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Reviewed By: Punkrock_grl92(not signed in) On: December 16, 2007 13:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ugh, not ANOTHER Sess/Kags fic!! Sorry, but I absolutely HATE that pairing with a HARDCORE, DEEP PASSION. I might actually be interested if it were Inu/Kags. But I don't really like Sesshomaru's stuck up personality or how he's all 'emotionless' and all. And sorry to burst your bubble, but Sesshomaru would NEVER protect humans... That annoys me. But other than the pairing, it seemed like an ok fic (from what I've read) and looked like you are pretty good at writing. Sorry, but I probably won't be reading anymore of this... =[
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Title: Kikyou
Reviewed By: Amarioko [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2007 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kikyou! I knew it! The moment you had him sketch Kagome I thought "Probably gonna call himself Kikyou." Lol >.> Love the story. Lovelovelovelovelove. ^^ •Amarioko
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Title: OMFG
Reviewed By: Sesshomaru_Kagome_lover_4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2007 13:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I so fucking love the part where you change Sesshomaru's sex...let alone he's going to look like the girl he's going to protect...I love the way you think!!!!!! I wish I had a mind like yours smart and a good way to keep people interrested I love it...Well hello I'm your new FAN NOW...Please keep up the good work...TOODLES...lol...Buh Bye
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Reviewed By: Naomi_Ikahen [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2007 03:50 CST
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moreee :)
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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2007 11:50 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I usually don't read chapter revisions, but for some reason I did on this one. I didn't think there was anything wrong with it before, but I do like this version better. I only read the parts with Sesshoumaru in it. It looks like the only thing you changed was the scene in Kaede's office. I think you did a great job of keeping Kikyou from seeming like a split personality and more like something between an alter ego and a character an actor plays... I really hope that you put up a new chapter soon. I really like these characters, so I want to see what happens to them!
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Reviewed By: Lunasoleil On: November 24, 2007 11:41 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is totally original yet it still follows the plot for the Inuyasha anime. The only thing that is a little different is Sesshoumaru protecting all humans, normally he only protects his lands. All the characters have the same personality. Love it. Hope your having fun writing it cause it's fun to read and very ingenious and brilliant.
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Reviewed By: Kimaya Aya [MediaMiner Member] On: November 14, 2007 15:51 CST
Comment/Review:
Please write more especially with an ending like that
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Reviewed By: inu_luver_2004 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 21:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really don't know what to think of this fic. I mean the whole Rin and Sess thing is kinda making me pissy to the whole thing. At this point I almost want Inu Yasha and Kags togther and that is not a pairing I'm really into. Your making the story more about Rin and Sess, well actually about Rin and it isn't why I started reading it. I hope it improves soon. Sorry if this seems like a flame but your not really following your desription at all and leaves me completely lack luster for this fic that held such promise in the start.
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Reviewed By: sweetness92490 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 18:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE THIS STORY.... UP DATE SOON!!!!;)
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 16:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NO, you rule! I've loved the 'Rin parts' so far, they have been funny and great. GREAT cliffhanger.
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Reviewed By: WiccanMethuselah [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 16:26 CST
Comment/Review:
Were you planning on making any lime/lemon yuri with Sess in his female avatar, or were you going to have them run into each other as Sess/Kag?? The way things are building right now, I think throwing any citrus in would be just fan-service, you know? I feel that you should continue this story the way it appears to be heading with the Sess/Kag plot and not bow to any gratuitous demands for citrus just for the sake of citrus. I like the premise, I love the way you have developed the characters so far, and I strongly feel that you should continue to do YOUR story YOUR way!! Please? :D ~~Wiccan~~
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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 15:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wouldn't worry too much about Rin stealing the spotlight. If she didn't, and without trying, she wouldn't be Rin. I trust your judgment as an author. I say go with the original plan on the lemons. If you have slow reviews until then, it won't be much of a problem once new people find and read the story. The story needs it's background before we can have anyone jumping in the bed. Just about every time I have seen a Sess/Kag story where there was a lemon early on between those characters, it just doesn't seem to work right. They can still be a good read, and the alternate universe thing helps a lot, but if you jump in too early, the best you can hope for is a good read when with this story, you could have greatness, in my humble opinion.I really hope you can update soon, because you left poor Rin standing there scared and confused and I can tell her emotions are going to rush through her really fast and then she is going to do something, and I hope she's ok... I absolutely love Sesshoumaru and his female avatar. I bet Kaede is going to need a little break after he leaves just to soak it in... I can't wait to see how Sessh reacts when he sees just who Kagome is and then his frustration... now that he knows or at least has a big hint that his charge is what those people doing the Eyeless Murders are looking for, things will be interesting indeed. I really hope that Kagome runs HOME and not into a dangerous situation. I'm looking forward to the next chapters!
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