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| "Digimon Tamers: Reconfigured" Reviews/Comments [ 54 ] | | Pages (4): [ « < 1 2 3 4 > » ] | Reviewed By: Sorry about my absence... On: February 11, 2003 13:51 CST
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I didn't mean to lose track of this series the way I have. Sorry for my slip-up. For the sake of simplicity, I'll include comments for Chapters 9 and 10 together in a single (LONG) review…
Odd that Alice would order retreat like that. After all, she had an advantage. Unless she has something in mind…
Half-sister? And with our luck, it’s on her ‘father’s’ side… What with the blond hair and creepy demeanor and all…
Good summary of Terriermon. Sometimes I think he has more in common with Henry than either wants to acknowledge.
…I dislike hearing only one side of phone conversations. True, it’s realistic, but it can be a real pain when it’s obvious something extremely interesting is about to be revealed. But, knowing you, we’ll find out sooner or later… Judging from the wrap-up of that conversation, sooner.
Good old Kazu. Well, maybe he will get his Mega level sometime. Especially if his Digimon has the same sort of connection Kenta’s does…
Hypnotic Enterprizes… Oh, THAT’S not obvious, Yamaki…
He wouldn’t be Kenta if he didn’t find something negative to complain about.
If there is a connection between Jeri’s Bakemon and Adventure’s Myotismon, then we’re all screwed. Judging from his comments way back when he first arrived, that doesn’t seem to be the case, but you never know…
…Gomamon likes making references to strange song lyrics. Yup, it must be the same one.
How can saying ‘I haven’t had a laugh like this since Joe was still alive!’ cryptic! Seems pretty blunt to me…
Well, we’ve seen that commercials can be both misleading and reveal important plot points, so this one could go either way.
Thank goodness. That ending was tacky, contrived and way too cheery. It always seemed more like a cheap wrap-up for a TV show, and that’s how I’ve seen it ever since it was revealed that Takato and the others watched Adventure on television.
Sounds like references to another fanfic. Should be, anyway: reading about these events would make it a lot easier than just hearing bits and pieces of a flashback.
Is Ryo the best guy to go to for advice on this? Then again, there really isn’t anyone else who seems to be involved with another friend of the opposite gender…
Something is up with Jeri… Hmm…
Why would she make up an excuse that could be easily disproven? Surely Takato would have known her brother’s birthday anyway, even without Ryo there to remind him of cake.
Renamon and Candlemon handle some obvious foreshadowing. Sounds like our resident two-tamer is in for a rough time in the future…
Poor Joe. He and Gomamon were one of my favorite Digidestined pairs in Adventure, actually…
Hmm. Agumon and Gabumon will likely show up sometime. Maybe as Omnimon?
More foreshadowing. If they keep hinting that Bakemon is bad, I won’t be surprised if he turns out to be good.
Heh, popular movie ref. Nicely done.
Complex set-up for a prank, but it was likely worth it to see the look on Henry’s face.
Poor Terriermon, has to stay behind with Suzie and her Princess Pretty Pants outfits.
…Uh oh. It can’t be good that Jake just found out about that. Well, hopefully nobody online will believe him. Hell, this could even be good for the team if one of the second-generation Digidestined sees his ranting and decides to check it out…
Henry and Jeri? Well, that’s an interesting development…
Now, what are the chances that Kazu would attend the same movie Henry and Jeri went to see together?
Perversion is infectious… Heh.
Poor Takato. Kazu was the worst possible person to see that and break it to him.
There’s nothing wrong with fanons. This one’s more interesting than most, in fact. So far there isn’t much sign of serious couple worshipping, other than some nice sprinklings of Kazu/Kenta here and there: not having to deal with “INSERTCOMBINATIONOFTWOCHARACTERSNAMESHEREFORVER!!!11” really helps. Plus, it doesn’t wrap up all nice and neat at the end…
Don’t push too hard to finish Darkened Hopes. Although I admit I’m now more intrigued by the premise, knowing what it is and all, nobody wants you to burn yourself out. Let it stay in Suspended Animation until you’re ready; nobody else matters. It’s your tale to tell, after all.
Ooh, closely guarded information…
Like I said, I like that there’s no serious couplings established yet, other than some hints here and there of Kenta/Kazu.
Ryo? Something happens to Ryo? Oh hell yeah! That will be sweet to see. What can I say, I dislike the guy.
So the Ring reference did have a point other than comic relief.
Poor Suzie and Lopmon are still getting cut out of the action. Hardly fair, plus it may set her up as vulnerable later. While I understand Henry’s desire to protect his little sister, the harsh reality may very well be that by denying her the ability to hone her skills now, he is setting her up for serious problems down the road as the war develops.
Pick your dance partner, everybody, and let’s get this battle started!
So she can handle two partners at a time. I suppose it’s fortunate she was the one who was saddled with two instead of one. Can you imagine Henry handling, say, both Terriermon and Lopmon?
Is Dragomon referring to Jeri in particular, or just a Tamer with a weaker partner?
So now Kenta finally is able to run his partner through the regular cycle instead of simply having Marineangemon on hand. Sort of a pity they don’t have that little Mega on hand, but…
Ironic that the same strategy Rika wanted the others to use is being turned against them. Dragomon cuts out of the fight only to have SkullSatamon take his place? It’s a bit too much like tag-teaming…
Ah, the Crest of Courage in card form. Was waiting for Takato to get that.
I like that he didn’t know what exactly to call out to activate it this time.
For some reason, Wargrowlmon’s little comment made me laugh. He certainly has his priorities straight, doesn’t he?
Well, that seems to take care of Phantomon. Still, I’m not so sure for some reason…
So we’re off to deal with… HYPNOSIS? Cute.
Like that Adam keeps getting it wrong. Nice touch.
Ah… This makes sense. So that particular link was supposed to always be around, but got delayed because of…
Takato and Ashley? Kind of interesting to think about. I like it a lot better than most pairing of a canon character and a created character, anyway. We’ll just have to see how this develops.
Was the little author’s note really necessary? I think you could pick up from just his tone alone what he was thinking about…
So Daisy and Babel are still around…
Go Henry! I’ve been waiting for something like that! He deserves much worse, but hey, take what you can get…
Janyu obviously doesn’t know what he’s talking about.
Something else I was waiting for, albeit not as seriously or nearly as long…
Hmn, so she does like him. Well, romances are never as easy as television and movies tend to try and make them…
Now, will Ashley end up at Rika’s, or Jeri’s, or…?
At least the commercial in 9 didn’t give away some of the plot twists for this part directly.
Nice jab at ‘The Lion King’. Shameless ripoff of a Disney movie that happens to be a shameless ripoff of a Japanese classic… I like it! | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2003 23:14 CST
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Hey, Don't sweat it. I don't hold it against you that you lost track. I mean, this story's on the seventh page now, the mere fact that you looked hard enough to find it tells me a lot about your devotion.
Oh, there's a very good reason for the retreat. Of course, I can't exactly reveal what tyhe reason is yet, but it will all make sense in the end.
Gee, ya think that in a story with so much revolving in one way or another around Yamaki it might be his side?
Actually, Terriermon seems to share more traits with Kazu than Henry.
Well, as you know now, there was no way that both sides of that phone conversation could have been heard.
Yep, good old apathetic Kazu.
Kenta defined.
Oh, now with the increasing hints towards Bakemon's nature, I refer you back to Episode Seven with Veemon and Salamon.
It wasn't actually the singing that was the giveaway, it was more the bizarre sense of humour.
Meh, everyone's entitled to the occasional dialogue slip-up.
Well, it was supposed to be obvious, but not utterly blatant. It was actually SUPPOSED to be a nod to the Tamers.
The commercial may be able to go either way, but everything besides the bit with Mikiko makes absolutely no sense until the actual story is written/read.
Geez, you just said more or less the same thing Kenta said about the ending.
Unfortunately, you can't fully read the events yet, but since you know that by now...
Compared to Takato's other options, Ryo's lack of experience with romantic problems is absolutely nothing.
Jeri was kind of put on the spot there and needed to come up with an excuse.
Oh, if you only knew what was coming for Rika. If you only knew...
Yeah, I was sorry about doing that to Joe, but I needed some reason that it was Gomamon transferred to a Tamer and none of the others.
Omnimon? Hmm, there's an idea.
Yes, the Ring bit took a fair bit of thought in the setup. And I'll bet when you first read it you missed that I had added a fairly useful new card.
Jake's message is actually on the fairly exclusive (only people who are signed up can use it) MSN Messenger. That said, it is definitely an international service, so it would probably be found in Japan.
Honestly, when I wrote that part, I was trying to make it like a groaning "duh" realization. Especially since the hints don't extend back through a lot of chapters.
Yeah, I thought of who would be the worst person to tell Takato, taking into account total lack of tact, attitude towards Henry, and connection to Takato, it eventually came down to ol' Hirokazu.
In order to finish Darkened Hopes, I would need to rewrite the first six chapters entirely so nothing contradicted either established canon or anything I came up with in this fic. So it'll take a while.
And while we're on the topic of Fanon, if you saw the Daikari worshipfest that was the original planning page for Darkened Hopes... *shudders*
Ryo gets his, the chapter's already written, and it's freaking sweet.
Oh yes, the Ring bit. I wouldn't spend so much time setting up something like that if it wasn't going to be significant.
Ch 10 comments coming tomorrow. | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2003 16:49 CST
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Told you this was coming today, now let's get down to it.
Don't worry too much about Suzie not getting in on the battles, she'll get a more important role soon. In fact, the next chapter's timeline is somewhat mixed up. Starts pre-battle, ends with Suzie asking Henry where Ashley went.
Yeah, I made Rika the one with two partners because of her experience with the card game. *skickers at the thought of Henry trying to control two dogbunnies*
Actually, Dragomon was referring directly to Jeri, but also foreshadowing a revelation on his true nature coming... eventually.
Kenta's into the usual rotation now, and as such you'll see him being developed more.
Oh, it'll seem more ironic when we get to yet another revelation later.
Well, given the title and the fact that the Goggle Boy always gets everything first, and the fact that Courage never goes anywhere near anyone else...
Of course, it's not like Takato should instinctively know what to say to activate every single card (I'm still mad that he knew how to use the Blue Card in "Grow, Mon, Grow")
Yeah, that line was supposed to get a quick laugh.
That should take care of Phantomon, but please keep in mind the name of his official Mega stage... I may have said too much already.
Yeah, I figured I couldn't have Adam messing things up one episode and speaking perfectly the next. So, Adam speaks normally in scenes with just his family because there's no basis for comparison.
Yep, one of the first things I did while writing this story was figuring out how Ashley and Impmon were connected.
The thing that makes this one better is that most "created" characters are annoying Mary Sues/Marty Stus with all the romantic success anyone could ever want and no problems whatsoever. (see also: Ryouki)
True, the author's note was somewhat unneccesary.
Yeah, the Monster Makers are all still around.
That bit was supposed to be one of those fisting-the-air "Huzzah!" moments.
Of course Janyu doesn't know what he's talking about. It's not exactly like Yamaki was going to tell Janyu what Henry had said when he hit him, so Janyu only heard the story Yamaki wanted him to.
What can I say, I aim to please.
Nothing comes easily in this fic. Henry's hobbies have unfortunately left him with no ability to pick up subtle hints in relationships, so he couldn't tell, even when she revealed her secret past which she hadn't even told her partner about to him.
Or *smirks*
See ya next time. | Reviewed By: coconut 2003 On: February 03, 2003 18:59 CST
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that was cool! I think the origin of impmon was the best part and vary well writen. the questions I have to ask is whare did the kokuwomon came from,and do you watch frountier? | Reviewed By: Venris On: January 31, 2003 20:34 CST
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Oh wow, I just sat down and read all 10 eppisodes @_@;;
I'm hooked!
And I LOVE the comercials(sp?) Its such a reminder of my old tamer days! I need to shuffle through my tapes to see if I have any of them.
I love the plot develoupment. Ashley and Adam really stick to me. *waves a fan-made banner of the two* I think I'll sit here a rot away, waiting for the next chapter *plays with her Kotemon Plushie* | Reviewed By: Nyachu On: January 26, 2003 10:54 CST
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I just read chapter 10; I'm really into this fanfic now. I check almost every day for updates. Oh, and I know you told anyone who knows the name of Jeri's brother to correct you if you got his name wrong and you got his name wrong. I don't remember what you thought it was, but his real name's Masahiko. Just telling you in case you want to change it. I also like how you're putting the crests in your story. I thought about doing something similar in my fanfiction, but you beat me to it.^_^ I can't wait to read chapter 11! | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2003 19:24 CST
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Oh, and the "Eggmon" line was actually a reference to the Beatles' "I am the Walrus" (I am the eggman, I was the eggman, I am the Walrus) | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2003 19:22 CST
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Actually, Coconut, "The Ring" was an English remake of the Japanese cult classic "Ring" (or "Ringu" by some accounts). So Sadako (Samara's Japanese counterpart) is more entrenched in Japanese minds than Samara is in North American minds. I take these kinds of things into account when I write my fics. | Reviewed By: coconut 2003 On: January 16, 2003 15:24 CST
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that was grate! this story is relly starting coming together. but I dont think the folks at japan gets "the ring" so if this was a real show I dont think thay will understand that part as much as us canadins will.and was that "eggmon" thing a sonic reference? | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2003 16:09 CST
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Chapter 9 is almost complete, but is not as it was supposed to be. The Crest Cards has been moved up to chapter 10, as I started writing it and couldn't fit everything I wanted into the space for one chapter. So, the major plot revelations were left as Chapter 9, and the battle itself (and all subsequent incidents) will be Chapter 10. Actually, all I have to do is come up with a title for the current Ch 9 and I can wrap it up and get it up here. | Reviewed By: Nyachu On: January 01, 2003 23:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a totally enjoyable fanfic for me, and you deserve all of those tens I gave you! I found a link to this fanfic on PDU's message board and I was bored and wanted a good fanfic to read and your comments intrigued me (I've always been a fan of Tamers). I also agree with Togepi's (from PDU) comments on your fanfic. It's rated R, but is a good read. It's not like other fanfics that just have crap strewn about, it actually has a story and a plot that make this fanfic definitely worth reading. It's dark and serious with some humor in it too (I just love humor in fanfics). I also thought "Hentai Henry" was hysterical (and I hate hentai). I also love the fact that you decided to include the coupling of Kazu & Kenta (they're my favorite in Tamers!!) because I don't read too many fanfics that are about them in that way. That makes your fic all the more enjoyable for me. ^_^ I just finished reading Chapter 8 tonight and I look forward to reading Chapter 9! This is fanwork that keeps me interested and coming back for more! | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2002 00:40 CST
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First, to "Coconut". True, Icedevimon was loaded, but then again, so was Leomon. What am I getting at here? You'll see...
And as for Gomamon, yes Preciomon is listed as his "True" Mega, but research will show that Marineangemon doesn't have a "True" Ultimate, just a whole assload of potentials. Therefore, I did what worked best in the context. Besides, I think it's kind of suitable that Marineangemon would come from a Rookie who's equally ill-suited for fighting.
Now, onto the meat of this session: the questions and comments from my ever faithful Anonymous Reviewer.
What, you've read eight chapters of this and you still think I would be predictable enough to just go with the Posessed Puppet on its own? Give me a bit more credit here.
Oh, you'll see how things turn out in the Wong household eventually. For now, let me say this, any development with Suzie will not be beyond this fic's current scope... okay, bad example. Don't worry, nothing too... extreme... will happen with Suzie.
Yes, in case you missed my previous comments, Ryo got his start at the same time as Yolei did, according to "Our War Game"/the second segment of the "American super-edited Digimon Movie", which was watching Omnimon destroy Diaboromon.
Yeah, Henry's realizing how Ashley looks at him at this point... and when you see how that's eventually resolved you may hate me.
Impmon is aware of what Henry's being told upstairs (or at least the first part), but let's be honest even with a Tamer he is still very self-centered.
And the Yamaki-bashing throughout the fic has officially reached its completely unexpected pinacle. I hated him from the start, and the more I wrote here the worse a character he became until we eventually get to implications of drunken incest.
The narative version of chapter 1 is partially an experiment and partially a nod (or pleading) towards fandomination.net. The problem is that it really does take a fair amount of work to go from one version to the other, so I suspect the first chapter will be left on its own.
Sadly, Jake IS a model of my brother. Granted the "khwooow" thing is exaggerated a bit, but that's really what he's like.
Takenouchi Designs - Gratuitous Adventure Reference number 2 for this chapter.
Actually, that means that cell-phones are so much a part of Japanese culture that the main feature that originally set Pokemon Crystal apart from Gold and Silver was a cable to connect the GBC to your (incredibly common) cell-phone and actually call people up for battles. In other words, it wasn't surprising to the family that Adam had (or seemed to have) a cell-phone after about a week in Japan.
I don't think he's gonna be doing much healing for a while...
Yes, and for my stance on that argument please see my response to Coconut's question.
Of course that line's going to spark debate. How could it not? That was the entire idea!
Yes, Icedevimon is Rika's secondary partner for now, however you may have noticed that my twists tend to put emphasis on secondary Tamers/Digimon for the most part. Just saying...
I'll gladly take a break if the well of ideas goes dry. I'm trying to avoid all the mistakes I made which ended with the premature death of Darkened Hopes. One of these was indeed tapping so deeply into the idea well that it ran dry.
Okay, this would normally be the part where I ask you indignantly how predictable you think I am, but in this case it's almost inevitible. Just like how no one besides the resident Goggle Boy can get anywhere near Courage. | Reviewed By: coconut 2003 On: November 29, 2002 21:59 CST
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That was cool beans. worth the wait! But I thout icedevimons data was absorbed so how did he came back? and I thout gomamons REAL mega was preciomon? TOO MANY QUESTIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!! But then again its your story. (I lerned that the hard way) | Reviewed By: Proplayer On: December 06, 2002 18:59 CST
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I thought it was dead, but it lives on. Sure the chapters have gaps between them, but I don't have much time to read fanfics anyway. Keep it up, please. There are so many plot twists that I'm way too anxoius to see the later episodes. | Reviewed By: Pistoffveemon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2002 08:45 CST
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My computer's been screwing up lately. I have the next chapter nearly complete, but unfortunately it's in the shop on my good computer. Not only that, but I may end up losing everything on the hard drive. So if I take a while after this, you'll know it's because I've had to get the computer back and possibly rewrite the entire chapter. | | Pages (4): [ « < 1 2 3 4 > » ] |
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