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Reviewed By: Nammu On: January 03, 2008 17:44 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This is fantastic, I assume you're making the harem as large as possible but I wondered about some side characters. Sarah= the daughter of one of Haruka's rivals and Keiarto's boss? plenty of room for fun. Mei = just to really mess with Naru life. Amalla= possible, complete another set of sisters. Mutsumi's Mom= I could see her joining the harem to help her daughter keep all the other girls in line with lots of hot lesbian sex (as well as the occasional fling with kei). Nyamo= I assume she will be joining soon, possibly with help from Haruka. Keep on going!
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Title: thanks
Reviewed By: someoneelse On: December 27, 2007 01:53 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thanks for the quick and lengthy followup. it was great.
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Title: CH 6
Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: December 26, 2007 23:50 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. Several bombshells dropped here. Tsuruko lays the groundwork for accepting a place at Keitaro's side. Haruka seizes the moment. And the other girls begin to realise how deep Naru's problems run within her. All in all, a jam-packed chapter. Excelent stuff! So, Keitaro's first time happens when he's buried underneath a mountain. Heh. When I think about it, that's probably the ONLY way he could have a moment that the others couldn't interupt. (Historically, being on an island on the other side of the Pacific is just not enough when it comes to those girls!) The more I think about it, the more amusing it becomes to me. I wonder if Naru will take a swing at the shrink. If she even shows up, that is. And Keitaro's reaction to her hurting Mei will be interesting as well. Could just be the final nail in the coffin of his promise, that. And I'm guessing he will find out, at some point. Granny Hina as well. Any explanation as to why Naru was evicted would have to include a summary of the events leading up to it, I guess. Yes, another fine chapter here. May there be many more. T
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Title: KC6
Reviewed By: seph6 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2007 18:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good chapter. It would be funny if the psychiatrist that Mei recomended is a pervert, and when Naru tell then about that they all would believe that she is over reacting like always.
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Reviewed By: denisud On: December 26, 2007 11:57 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well it seems that Haru will have an inside track as the Mistress and probable first concubine as she might have gotten herself knocked up! As for the rest Naru's seemingly kicked herself out while the rest will take a few chapters to sort themselves out! Hope kei can keep his strength up! ;-)
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Reviewed By: denisud On: December 25, 2007 15:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A few typos and missing words, and I like the fact that you didn't do anything sexual til this chapter. And of all of them haruka?!?!?! Well I also see as with many Hina fans that Nru's gonna go Psyho. I hope that Kei has got his vitamins as he'll be geting alot of the girls soon as if the hints I caught happen! BTW what happened to that Idiot Teacher? dennisud P.S.- the three families have to have a few connection in the education feilds right?!?
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Title: Rawk we want maor Rawr!
Reviewed By: zerothehero On: December 16, 2007 17:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love way this fic is being played out. I enjoy how you are portraying the emotions and seriousness of the situation. Your writing style is also quite developed compared to other author's I have read doing this kind of story. Although the idea of a harem which all the girls sharing keitaro has been done before it has never been done to this magnitude with almost every girl in the series having a stake in him. Also the idea of the scroll and the history of the family's is also a interesting spin I enjoyed. I hope you continue this story and it has a epic harem ending. Seriously though I'd want moar. Please I need maor. Don't make me beg.
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Title: where
Reviewed By: someoneelse On: December 16, 2007 04:06 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story but there has to be more right. the thing at the top says its completed. but it doesnt look completed. please finish this story. thanks. it was very enjoyable
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Title: oh baby!!!!
Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: December 14, 2007 09:10 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pleasepleasepleaseplease tell me that you have plans to continue this in the future. Having read (and enjoyed) many Hinata-harem fics before, the one thing that unifies them all in my mind is the fact that they eventually collapse under the weight of an ever-increasinely convoluted plot. While understandable, it is annoying. So I humbly hope that you see fit to continue, nay, finish this most excelent story. Kudos to a damn fine fic! T
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Reviewed By: alaska On: December 14, 2007 07:20 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent story so far. i do like the tension between all the girls so far. i also hope haruka and kanako become seriously involved in the choices as well. hopefully you will elaborate on the past relationship between keitaro, haruka, and kanako and how it will affect what direction you story will head in. looking forward to the following chapter.
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Reviewed By: Spartan429 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2007 20:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude, you have to update soon, otherwise I might go crazy waiting! This story has it all!
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Title: Enjoyed
Reviewed By: Catarate On: December 13, 2007 19:02 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I enjoyed reading this. It has the quality of some older fanfics with the right amount of hentai for it to still be tasteful. I greatly anticipate the rest of the story!
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Reviewed By: KC6 On: December 13, 2007 17:49 EST
Comment/Review:
Wow! Finally a love hina fanfic wited by A-Z Mark II! I have been waiting for this moment for so long... But if possible could you put more hentai? I feel that it was missing here. And if possible featuring Naru would be great.
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