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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2008 23:01 EDT
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Oh yeah a very welcome update. Amalla and Mutsumi in one update too. Wow, very well done. Great writing and there seems to be some more foreshadowing going on. So with that in mind we can count as pregnant Naru, Motoko, Haruka, and Mutsumi, unless of course she took some precautions. So that now leaves Tsuruko, Su, and Shinobu. Looking forward to more. Please keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: August 24, 2008 00:53 EDT
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So far I like how your tieing loose ends here and there dealing with the delinquint duo known as Haitani, & Shirai. Your doing great can't wait to see whats in store for Keitaro next!
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2008 03:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice short chapter. glad to see that Haruka is happy about being pregnant. i hope all the other girls like it too. i hope Motoko slaps the snot of the two losers. also, i hope Shinobu and Akiko do well on their tests. I hope to see more soon Chris
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Reviewed By: ShadowFang357 On: August 16, 2008 16:58 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is briliant and one of the best story I have ever read. I hope there will be some Lemon about Tsuruko soon. but as long there will be much more Lemon I will not complein about it. Please hurry up with next chapter.. P.s are the girls gonna get Pragnent Including Tsuruko? well I hope so..
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Reviewed By: BlackwolfHowls On: August 06, 2008 18:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I will say that this is the most enjoyable story I have read in a long time on Love Hina. I was amazed at the skill shown on this story when I stumbled upon it after reading some of your other excellent works. While the characters have to be Ooc for the story to work as well as it does, it does not detract from the overall original storyline, but I believe adds on to it. I look forward to the continuing adventures and will keep my eyes out for your other stories as well.
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: August 02, 2008 11:24 EDT
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Wow I missed a couple of updates and now I can't believe I missed them. Kitsune was (and probably still is) on cloud 9 and Haruka may be pregnant very good stuff looking forward to more!
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Reviewed By: Un named On: July 30, 2008 01:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good fic. But I have see that you don't inculde desirtvie text. For exmple you write "Keitaro could not bleave what he saw." And you don't tell us what he saw.
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Title: Legacy
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2008 09:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! Kitsune bites the dust. Haruka is knocked up. Naru and Motoko happy. I enjoyed these two chapters immensely and hope to read more soon. Going back a few chapters, I like the fact that Mrs. Otohime snuck into bed with Keitaro. With his luck she'll end up pregnant too. Something tells me that all the women in this story, except Granny will end up being with child. Hey, I like this, it is much better than some of the pap and drivel in these FF's. I also like the fact that the girls are practically throwing themselves at him and he is ravishing them willingly. Please keep up the good quality of this story. Until next time, Chris
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2008 19:49 EDT
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Interesting. Now the fox has been claimed. It also seems Granny Hina is a very adept director of events. If I'm reading things right there will be another Urashima within 8 months or so. I also like the idea of the other girls taking care of Shinobu, she really has become the heart of residence. Again I find this VERY well written and I'm very pleased with the updates. Keep going. I'm looking forward to more, and who he claims next.
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Reviewed By: littlemario123 On: July 21, 2008 10:01 EDT
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Another great chapter from you I cant wait to see what happens next. ^///^
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: July 15, 2008 07:21 EDT
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Oh My....a threesome between Keitaro, Naru, and Motoko in short very nice! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next. Our man Keitaro is gonna have to defend the throne soon so to speak.
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 23:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa! That was well done! Nice scene with Motoko and Naru taking care of Keitaro! Keep this up. Not that easy to write as much but this is a very welcome and well done update. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Legacy
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 18:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was great. our alpha male finally capturing his two top atagonists. and making them happy to boot. i hope to read more of this soon. chris
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Title: you sir, are awesome
Reviewed By: Newtob Exile On: July 07, 2008 15:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is without a doubt on of the best Love Hina stories I have ever read. The story contains just the right amount of narrative and H-scenes while never becoming boring or cliche. I thirst for evevy new chapter as a man begs for water in the desert. I check Mediaminer every day in the hopes of queching my hunger for this masterpiece. Gushing aside, I'm very pleased with your format and decisions regarding pairings. I find the lack of Girl on girl parings in the Love Hina Fic world to be surprising, seeing as all the girls have interesting relationships with each other. I find the recent Naru/Mutsumi interaction to be particularly well written and an enjoyable read. You decsion to make Haruka keitaro's cousin was a good idea, as is everythinhg on this fic. I'm eagerly waiting for new chapters!
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Reviewed By: LainEverliving [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2008 06:50 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful work as always... especially in the Naru/Mutsumi scene from Chapter 29. I know this is (and should be) mostly focused on Keitaro, but that scene between the girls had a wonderful sense of surprising tenderness that you captured really well. I think that feeling particularly comes across when Naru asks to reciprocate, and at the end of the scene as well. I hope that they will have the chance to express their feelings for each other a few more times in the future, as they're really a very sweet couple that deserves more time together. Otherwise, the characterization in these new chapters is terrific, and believable within both the reality you've created and the original series (with the occasional stretch here and there). Motoko particularly is really great in Chapter 31... the evolution she's gone through is really evident and very well handled. I wonder when Keitaro will figure out the secret of the romance novels... Oh, and Granny Hina is priceless. Great job with her (especially seeing as how she tends to be underused in most H-fics, probably for the obvious reasons). Please keep up the good work! I'll look forward to the next chapter! ^__^
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