| "Legacy" Reviews/Comments [ 178 ] |
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Reviewed By: Un named On: July 30, 2008 01:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good fic. But I have see that you don't inculde desirtvie text. For exmple you write "Keitaro could not bleave what he saw." And you don't tell us what he saw.
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Title: Legacy
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 29, 2008 09:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! Kitsune bites the dust. Haruka is knocked up. Naru and Motoko happy. I enjoyed these two chapters immensely and hope to read more soon. Going back a few chapters, I like the fact that Mrs. Otohime snuck into bed with Keitaro. With his luck she'll end up pregnant too. Something tells me that all the women in this story, except Granny will end up being with child. Hey, I like this, it is much better than some of the pap and drivel in these FF's. I also like the fact that the girls are practically throwing themselves at him and he is ravishing them willingly. Please keep up the good quality of this story. Until next time, Chris
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2008 19:49 EDT
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Interesting. Now the fox has been claimed. It also seems Granny Hina is a very adept director of events. If I'm reading things right there will be another Urashima within 8 months or so. I also like the idea of the other girls taking care of Shinobu, she really has become the heart of residence. Again I find this VERY well written and I'm very pleased with the updates. Keep going. I'm looking forward to more, and who he claims next.
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Reviewed By: littlemario123 On: July 21, 2008 10:01 EDT
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Another great chapter from you I cant wait to see what happens next. ^///^
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: July 15, 2008 07:21 EDT
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Oh My....a threesome between Keitaro, Naru, and Motoko in short very nice! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next. Our man Keitaro is gonna have to defend the throne soon so to speak.
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 23:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa! That was well done! Nice scene with Motoko and Naru taking care of Keitaro! Keep this up. Not that easy to write as much but this is a very welcome and well done update. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Legacy
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 18:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this was great. our alpha male finally capturing his two top atagonists. and making them happy to boot. i hope to read more of this soon. chris
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Title: you sir, are awesome
Reviewed By: Newtob Exile On: July 07, 2008 15:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is without a doubt on of the best Love Hina stories I have ever read. The story contains just the right amount of narrative and H-scenes while never becoming boring or cliche. I thirst for evevy new chapter as a man begs for water in the desert. I check Mediaminer every day in the hopes of queching my hunger for this masterpiece. Gushing aside, I'm very pleased with your format and decisions regarding pairings. I find the lack of Girl on girl parings in the Love Hina Fic world to be surprising, seeing as all the girls have interesting relationships with each other. I find the recent Naru/Mutsumi interaction to be particularly well written and an enjoyable read. You decsion to make Haruka keitaro's cousin was a good idea, as is everythinhg on this fic. I'm eagerly waiting for new chapters!
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Reviewed By: LainEverliving [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2008 06:50 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful work as always... especially in the Naru/Mutsumi scene from Chapter 29. I know this is (and should be) mostly focused on Keitaro, but that scene between the girls had a wonderful sense of surprising tenderness that you captured really well. I think that feeling particularly comes across when Naru asks to reciprocate, and at the end of the scene as well. I hope that they will have the chance to express their feelings for each other a few more times in the future, as they're really a very sweet couple that deserves more time together. Otherwise, the characterization in these new chapters is terrific, and believable within both the reality you've created and the original series (with the occasional stretch here and there). Motoko particularly is really great in Chapter 31... the evolution she's gone through is really evident and very well handled. I wonder when Keitaro will figure out the secret of the romance novels... Oh, and Granny Hina is priceless. Great job with her (especially seeing as how she tends to be underused in most H-fics, probably for the obvious reasons). Please keep up the good work! I'll look forward to the next chapter! ^__^
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: July 04, 2008 14:01 EDT
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Wow it's really great you updated and giving us two chapters no less which were nice to read. Hopefully all the outside forces won't ruin Keitaro's love life (Teacher, Therapist, Kentaro and the Others) Nice job so far looking forward to more.
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Title: What a Romp (no pun intended)
Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 17:26 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has been a fun story so far. I find myself climbing the walls waiting for the updates that seem to come somewhat sporadically. Understandable though as I have to write quite a bit both for full time work and school. Keep plugging away and please don't torture us with the long lags between updates. I'm looking forward to the next first time. I'm not sure who it will be. Keep up the great work
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Title: Legacy
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 17:16 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is one of the best FF's I have ever read. Thank you for making this enjoyable for adult consumption. I get sick of people being afraid to show actual affection of their characters for each other. Yes, I like the fact that you have put Keitaro and Haruka as lovers, I hope that continues in future chapters. I would also like to see him in liaisons with Shinobu and Kitsune, maybe Motoko also. It is also good to see someone with a good imagination and not using the same old story lines as others have with these characters. Also I like the fact that Haruka is his cousin in this story and not his aunt. She does make a good soulmate for him. But, be that as it may, tweeking the story line(s) as you have made me addicted to this story. I have read it through 3 times and I enjoy it more each time through. I await your next installment. Chris
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Reviewed By: Painter AL [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2008 03:34 EDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cant wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Weapon-01 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2008 23:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've just finished 29 chapters in the past five days, and though I'm not a big Love-Hina fan (even in H-fics) This is a very well done story. Keep up the good work!!
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Reviewed By: Sicksorrolw On: June 19, 2008 18:39 EDT
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Wow pretty cool Naru and mutsumi getting it on...can't wait to see whats next.
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