| "Tales of the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 68 ] |
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 05:56 CDT
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I was so happy to see a third one up for this collection! It started my day out right. ^_^ I am really enjoying the way you have, so far, switched back and forth between their POVs. Kagome's thoughts were wonderfully written. I have to confess to being one of those people who don't like to see her brought so low that she would contemplate suicide because it seems to go against her nature. But you did a beautiful job of showing that she would view death as the beginning of a new adventure. And she is sorely missing her friends and companions. Her conclusion that they must be dead seemed perfectly logical, too, since she has now seen two demons. Why else would they not come see her? And, of course, Hiei has been observing her as she has worked through all these thoughts, so he would have picked up on her mood, which is why I can accept that he thought she was trying to kill herself. However, he must have thought she was incredibly stupid to attempt it by jumping into a dry well, since the fall wasn't even enough to injure her. At first, I was really surprised that he had jumped to that conclusion, considering the well. And I am interested that she did not correct him. She WASN'T trying to kill herself. I don't think that's something Kagome would want anyone to think of her, either. I liked the meaning you put on how important WORDS are to demons and why. (Though there are plenty of demons in both IY and YYH who don't subscribe to that philosophy and flap their jaws a lot. LOL!!) All in all, this was a very thoughtful piece and I am looking forward to seeing how you use it to build on for the next one(s).
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2008 03:43 CDT
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The second glimpse was as great as the first--maybe better. I always love Hiei's POV. He was intrigued that she had seen him, but still not sure how to categorize her. So, a demon came after her. Just by chance? Or her specifically? And did Hiei realize what she was before she purifed the corpse? I couldn't quite tell, but he didn't seem as surprised as I expected him to be. I loved his indignation that she might think he was following her like a puppy. And her thinking of him as a bloody guardian angel was a nice touch. I loved the moment when she touched his face. Beautiful. I can't wait for more of these!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2008 03:35 CDT
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Oh, I love it! Thirty of these interconnected scenes featuring Hiei/Kag? A dream come true! Great start with this one. I liked the way you set it during those three years after she made the wish. What a fantastic first glimpse of her future. ^_^
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2008 11:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yes !!!!!!!!!! please update again
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2008 04:37 CDT
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this is a good story, i hope to read more soon
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Reviewed By: DYquem (NSI) On: August 22, 2008 23:35 CDT
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very nice. "My bloody little angel." I particularly liked Hiei's assessment of humanity in chapter 1.
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 05:06 CDT
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okay you just can't leave it a one shot. make a two or three shot. update soon
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Reviewed By: touketsumizu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 01:18 CDT
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why is it going to be all one-shot??? (whines) i love what you just wrote and it would be so great if you continued it.
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