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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 05:32 CDT
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Hmmm. Nothing like a little case of jealousy to bring out one's true feelings. I really enjoyed this one, but it stirred some thoughts about popular fanon premises. I was very interested that you had Hiei talking about human emotions like demons don't have any. And that he didn't know the word for jealousy. That struck me as strange. I realize that it seems to be popular to write him as denying having emotions, but I can't remember an instance in canon where he ever did so. Actually, I can't remember ANY demons in either IY or YYH claiming such a thing. For the most part, they seem to be a rather passionate, violent, envious, greedy, prideful lot. LOL! And even if Hiei had never actually FELT jealousy before, I have no doubt he would have heard the word. Demons would call it the same thing. Sorry--I'm not criticizing this--these thoughts just struck me as I was reading it. Also, his thoughts that if he had been a thief he would want to steal her away and keep her from everyone hit me as a bit odd, though I knew what you were doing with that, because, um ... he WAS a thief. LOL! Was raised by a gang of thieves. He seemed to be the one who organized the theft of the three artifacts he, Kurama and Gouki stole. So, I would think he would have first-hand knowledge about thievery and the appeal of it. I really liked the way it sounded, though, to have him thinking about it in terms of what Kurama must feel. It worked so much better to have him express it that way. It gave the whole piece an almost poetic feel. The imagery of him enjoying seeing the fire in her eyes was beautiful, too. And I cackled when she threw her shoe and hit him. That was great! The interaction between them came off very realistically, and makes me tingle with anticipation at what will happen next. Your writing is a pleasure to read. ^_^
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 03:21 CDT
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I just about choked when Kagome asked if she should call him Yanagi. Yanagi is the female heroine of one of my other favorite manga series: "Flame of Recca." She's very mild and sweet--a healer who sacrifices herself and dies at the end to become a fiery angel to help the hero overcome the villain. LOL! (Then she is returned as a human.) I liked the idea that Hiei felt indebted to her, despite the fact that her healing wasn't necessary, and that he chose to help her by teaching her to meditate. I particularly liked the way you kept her real by having her be distracted by his nearness. ^_~ This is a wonderful series of connected stories. Can't wait for the next one! P.S. I didn't realize I had missed reviewing for one--sorry!
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Reviewed By: SKnFS [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2008 01:39 CDT
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I absolutely love this. Their relationship is building slowly and not just wham-bam, I think i love you! I also like your style of writing, it's very thoughtful and intelligent. I look forward to more. Good luck in all you do.
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Reviewed By: touketsumizu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2008 02:10 CDT
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i really love this fanfic!!!! and i love how you write the story, very descriptive. just reading it makes me feel that i'm there watching the scenes unfold. I can't wait for the next update!!!
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: October 04, 2008 18:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nah! You didn't make me wait too long.^^ I hope you plan to have a detailed lemon for this pair. Not that I'm a pervert, mind you. :P It's just that with this sort of detailed fanfic you have to have a great lemon that isn't rushed. That ruins the feel of things. I like how you're taking this fanfic in a slow direction. I do hope that you'll lengthen the chapters.^^ Anyway, update soon and great work. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 17:13 CDT
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these are good, although i agree longer is better. i really would like the others to wonder what he's doing and find out about her and/or for him to find out about her trips to the past.
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: September 27, 2008 13:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fanfic so much!!! Please update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: Kaggie On: September 21, 2008 12:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, are you leading up to a lemon or what? Also, could you try to make your chapters longer? Update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: Kaggie On: September 21, 2008 12:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, are you leading up to a lemon or what? Also, could you try to make your chapters longer? Update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2008 02:29 CDT
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That was nice. ^_^ Her thoughts about a burden shared being halved were good. And I enjoyed the way she looks forward to seeing him at night, even though he's just a comforting presence. I really giggled at the way he finally had to say something, even though he was obviously trying to imply that she should go away. LOL! I think he would go looking for her if she didn't show up, though. ^_~ I really love the way you are building this story, one shot at a time. ^_~
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2008 00:24 CDT
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The fourth one makes a very interesting addition. So, she told him her story, and the truth about why she had jumped into the well. That had to improve his opinion of her. I laughed at his thoughts that "It was only unfortunate she was sparing him all the gory details that he wanted to hear and instead telling him all the emotional crap better suited for one of his teammates." I was intrigued that he refused to give her his name because he didn't want to make that connection with her. He's fooling himself right there and fighting to deny something beyond his control. He's already passed the point of no return, whether he likes it or not. LOL! "He prided himself on his unpredictability, and yet she had made him predictable." Give in to the light side, Hiei! LOL! I am wondering what comes next. They've met. He knows who and what she is and now he knows her story. She knows what he is and even without knowing his story, she obviously accepts him. Where do they go from here? I'm looking forward to finding out. ^_^
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: August 31, 2008 16:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the update ASAP!^^ I love the fanfic and the new chapter. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: August 30, 2008 00:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait for you to update. I hope Kagome is immortal though...like it's a secret that will be revealed. That would suck if she died on Hiei like that.^^ Update soon please. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2008 03:11 CDT
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I love these so far keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 18:06 CDT
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will kagome ever learn about the splitting of the world into two and the barrier between them? if so will she ever see the others again? will she meet yusuke, kurama, and kuwabara? will she meet and maybe train with genkai? can you change this from 30 to 100+ chapters?
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