| "Tales of the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 68 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kaggie On: September 21, 2008 12:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, are you leading up to a lemon or what? Also, could you try to make your chapters longer? Update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2008 02:29 CDT
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That was nice. ^_^ Her thoughts about a burden shared being halved were good. And I enjoyed the way she looks forward to seeing him at night, even though he's just a comforting presence. I really giggled at the way he finally had to say something, even though he was obviously trying to imply that she should go away. LOL! I think he would go looking for her if she didn't show up, though. ^_~ I really love the way you are building this story, one shot at a time. ^_~
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2008 00:24 CDT
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The fourth one makes a very interesting addition. So, she told him her story, and the truth about why she had jumped into the well. That had to improve his opinion of her. I laughed at his thoughts that "It was only unfortunate she was sparing him all the gory details that he wanted to hear and instead telling him all the emotional crap better suited for one of his teammates." I was intrigued that he refused to give her his name because he didn't want to make that connection with her. He's fooling himself right there and fighting to deny something beyond his control. He's already passed the point of no return, whether he likes it or not. LOL! "He prided himself on his unpredictability, and yet she had made him predictable." Give in to the light side, Hiei! LOL! I am wondering what comes next. They've met. He knows who and what she is and now he knows her story. She knows what he is and even without knowing his story, she obviously accepts him. Where do they go from here? I'm looking forward to finding out. ^_^
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: August 31, 2008 16:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the update ASAP!^^ I love the fanfic and the new chapter. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: August 30, 2008 00:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait for you to update. I hope Kagome is immortal though...like it's a secret that will be revealed. That would suck if she died on Hiei like that.^^ Update soon please. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2008 03:11 CDT
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I love these so far keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 18:06 CDT
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will kagome ever learn about the splitting of the world into two and the barrier between them? if so will she ever see the others again? will she meet yusuke, kurama, and kuwabara? will she meet and maybe train with genkai? can you change this from 30 to 100+ chapters?
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2008 05:56 CDT
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I was so happy to see a third one up for this collection! It started my day out right. ^_^ I am really enjoying the way you have, so far, switched back and forth between their POVs. Kagome's thoughts were wonderfully written. I have to confess to being one of those people who don't like to see her brought so low that she would contemplate suicide because it seems to go against her nature. But you did a beautiful job of showing that she would view death as the beginning of a new adventure. And she is sorely missing her friends and companions. Her conclusion that they must be dead seemed perfectly logical, too, since she has now seen two demons. Why else would they not come see her? And, of course, Hiei has been observing her as she has worked through all these thoughts, so he would have picked up on her mood, which is why I can accept that he thought she was trying to kill herself. However, he must have thought she was incredibly stupid to attempt it by jumping into a dry well, since the fall wasn't even enough to injure her. At first, I was really surprised that he had jumped to that conclusion, considering the well. And I am interested that she did not correct him. She WASN'T trying to kill herself. I don't think that's something Kagome would want anyone to think of her, either. I liked the meaning you put on how important WORDS are to demons and why. (Though there are plenty of demons in both IY and YYH who don't subscribe to that philosophy and flap their jaws a lot. LOL!!) All in all, this was a very thoughtful piece and I am looking forward to seeing how you use it to build on for the next one(s).
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2008 03:43 CDT
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The second glimpse was as great as the first--maybe better. I always love Hiei's POV. He was intrigued that she had seen him, but still not sure how to categorize her. So, a demon came after her. Just by chance? Or her specifically? And did Hiei realize what she was before she purifed the corpse? I couldn't quite tell, but he didn't seem as surprised as I expected him to be. I loved his indignation that she might think he was following her like a puppy. And her thinking of him as a bloody guardian angel was a nice touch. I loved the moment when she touched his face. Beautiful. I can't wait for more of these!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2008 03:35 CDT
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Oh, I love it! Thirty of these interconnected scenes featuring Hiei/Kag? A dream come true! Great start with this one. I liked the way you set it during those three years after she made the wish. What a fantastic first glimpse of her future. ^_^
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2008 11:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
yes !!!!!!!!!! please update again
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2008 04:37 CDT
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this is a good story, i hope to read more soon
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Reviewed By: DYquem (NSI) On: August 22, 2008 23:35 CDT
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very nice. "My bloody little angel." I particularly liked Hiei's assessment of humanity in chapter 1.
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Reviewed By: yusukekuramasgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 05:06 CDT
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okay you just can't leave it a one shot. make a two or three shot. update soon
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Reviewed By: touketsumizu [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2008 01:18 CDT
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why is it going to be all one-shot??? (whines) i love what you just wrote and it would be so great if you continued it.
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