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Reviewed By: SKnFS [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2008 10:02 CDT
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I loved this chapter of course, probably cuz you're such a fantasic writer and I haven't yet found a reason to dislike anyhing you've worked on. I liked the last part of this, that he was willing to blame himself but at the same time he off set it by saying he could still blame her. I thought it was childishly cute. His denial is also entertaining because I can especially relate when I tried to avoid hanging out with my best guy friend because he wanted to be more than friends and I went into an "I don't need guys" mode and then it became "it's all his fault" mode and continued from there. It was horrible, poor guy. I'm glad he had such patience for someone as insufferable as me. It was enjoyable and I can't wait for the next chapter. You continue to be among my favorite writers. Good luck.
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: October 21, 2008 01:01 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry I didn't review the last chapter.^^ I want to say that both chapters were astounding! I loved them. Update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2008 03:17 CDT
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I think the line I liked best in this latest chapter was the one where Hiei wondered when she began stealing little pieces of his heart. That is just worded so well. A masterful touch. ^_^ Because that is a much more accurate description than simply "stealing his heart." It's gradual, and she's doing it piece by piece, with all the little things she does without even knowing she's doing them. As you also said so well, she's just Kagome. It's not one particular thing he can pinpoint, though he is certainly able to list more and more things he enjoys about her. ^_~I liked the idea that he ended up just staying there,too, because there wasn't any other place he preferred or needed to be. So reluctant, but so helpless to resist. I suppose he will have to start meeting her in her room now that the weather is turning cold. ^_~ I'm still loving this!
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2008 03:20 CDT
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Very nice! A great follow-up to the last chapter. And yes, there's just something very appealing about a jealous Hiei. ^_^ Again, you managed to really portray Kagome in a very "real" fashion. Not being able to get Hiei (and Inuyasha) out of her mind, even though she was so angry at him and hurt by what he had said, just struck me as a very realistic reaction. I loved the tidbit you threw us that she supposed Inuyasha had probably found someone else by now--someone who didn't remind him of Kikyou. That was a nice touch. Having Hiei stay away after their last encounter was very much IC for him, too, I think. And I liked the way you had Kagome tell him that emotions are only weaknesses if you think they are. Very, very nice! This was a wonderful treat. And, BTW, I would recommend "Flame of Recca." I actually read it before YYH and I have heard the two compared quite often. (There's also a big "tournament" arc in FoR.)
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: October 13, 2008 00:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're so welcome. I loved the new chapter. I can't help, but bounce with giddiness when Hiei gets jealous.^^ I can't wait for more updates! :P Thanks for answering my questions.^^
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Reviewed By: HeartStar [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 12:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh i love that he was jealous wow sorry that was not able to review soon I have been looking for work and finally got hired i love you story please update soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 07:34 CDT
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thanks for the update, can i have another tomorrow?
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 05:32 CDT
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Hmmm. Nothing like a little case of jealousy to bring out one's true feelings. I really enjoyed this one, but it stirred some thoughts about popular fanon premises. I was very interested that you had Hiei talking about human emotions like demons don't have any. And that he didn't know the word for jealousy. That struck me as strange. I realize that it seems to be popular to write him as denying having emotions, but I can't remember an instance in canon where he ever did so. Actually, I can't remember ANY demons in either IY or YYH claiming such a thing. For the most part, they seem to be a rather passionate, violent, envious, greedy, prideful lot. LOL! And even if Hiei had never actually FELT jealousy before, I have no doubt he would have heard the word. Demons would call it the same thing. Sorry--I'm not criticizing this--these thoughts just struck me as I was reading it. Also, his thoughts that if he had been a thief he would want to steal her away and keep her from everyone hit me as a bit odd, though I knew what you were doing with that, because, um ... he WAS a thief. LOL! Was raised by a gang of thieves. He seemed to be the one who organized the theft of the three artifacts he, Kurama and Gouki stole. So, I would think he would have first-hand knowledge about thievery and the appeal of it. I really liked the way it sounded, though, to have him thinking about it in terms of what Kurama must feel. It worked so much better to have him express it that way. It gave the whole piece an almost poetic feel. The imagery of him enjoying seeing the fire in her eyes was beautiful, too. And I cackled when she threw her shoe and hit him. That was great! The interaction between them came off very realistically, and makes me tingle with anticipation at what will happen next. Your writing is a pleasure to read. ^_^
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2008 03:21 CDT
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I just about choked when Kagome asked if she should call him Yanagi. Yanagi is the female heroine of one of my other favorite manga series: "Flame of Recca." She's very mild and sweet--a healer who sacrifices herself and dies at the end to become a fiery angel to help the hero overcome the villain. LOL! (Then she is returned as a human.) I liked the idea that Hiei felt indebted to her, despite the fact that her healing wasn't necessary, and that he chose to help her by teaching her to meditate. I particularly liked the way you kept her real by having her be distracted by his nearness. ^_~ This is a wonderful series of connected stories. Can't wait for the next one! P.S. I didn't realize I had missed reviewing for one--sorry!
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Reviewed By: SKnFS [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2008 01:39 CDT
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I absolutely love this. Their relationship is building slowly and not just wham-bam, I think i love you! I also like your style of writing, it's very thoughtful and intelligent. I look forward to more. Good luck in all you do.
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Reviewed By: touketsumizu [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2008 02:10 CDT
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i really love this fanfic!!!! and i love how you write the story, very descriptive. just reading it makes me feel that i'm there watching the scenes unfold. I can't wait for the next update!!!
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: October 04, 2008 18:13 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nah! You didn't make me wait too long.^^ I hope you plan to have a detailed lemon for this pair. Not that I'm a pervert, mind you. :P It's just that with this sort of detailed fanfic you have to have a great lemon that isn't rushed. That ruins the feel of things. I like how you're taking this fanfic in a slow direction. I do hope that you'll lengthen the chapters.^^ Anyway, update soon and great work. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: loretta537 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 17:13 CDT
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these are good, although i agree longer is better. i really would like the others to wonder what he's doing and find out about her and/or for him to find out about her trips to the past.
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Reviewed By: LadyNorth76 On: September 27, 2008 13:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fanfic so much!!! Please update soon. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: Kaggie On: September 21, 2008 12:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, are you leading up to a lemon or what? Also, could you try to make your chapters longer? Update soon. Thanks.
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