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| "Polarity" Reviews/Comments [ 73 ] | | Pages (5): [ 1 2 3 4 5 › » ] | Reviewed By: BaIewood On: September 01, 2015 23:45 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed the story just wanted to pipe in and say, Thanks
for Writing!
| Reviewed By: dimriver On: February 16, 2013 07:28 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked your story. You have good grammar, I love the tiger transformation for Ranma. You have your own original story line, which s cool. Only negative would be excessive bashing of some of the characters. | Title: da
Reviewed By: Carozo On: January 20, 2012 17:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool story! | Reviewed By: Shinkicker [MediaMiner Member] On: April 27, 2011 03:55 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Oooh you have to update this again at some point it's just too awesome to let slip into obscurity. | Reviewed By: Cloud1014 On: June 27, 2010 21:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
---Hey, what's taking so long with the updates? Please, continue this and your other SM/Ranma cross! Happy writing, and update soon!
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 23:34 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
CHAPTER 15: I'm afraid you really went overboard on the flippant dialogue in Ukyo's case. But I don't have any serious complaints in this chapter. ///// CHAPTER 16: Oho, that's a pretty good angle on explaining Cologne's behavior ... it rings false IMO, but it's very tolerable. And OTOH, Happy's more than a little bit TOO deep in the 'kind wise master' routine -- I mean you'd think that saving her life, at such cost to himself, was at least worth a good solid grope or two. ///// CHAPTER 17: Okay seriously did you put Happosai on medication and I didn't notice? This is really out of character for him -- the calmness much more than the altruism. Interestingly enough, your author's notes seem to imply a return to form? ///// CHAPTER 18: Nope, not yet. Nice chapter though.
| Title: Chapter 14
Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 22:38 PDT
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Cologne's ... abrupt about-face from "how can I help you, oh living legend of my people?" to "goddamn it I'm gonna make that boy pay" is at least conceivable due to the several major shocks she sustained that day (in terms of surprise). But I really doubt she'd outright confuse Ranma's statements with Setsuna's: "Treason? Dishonorable? How dare that boy," ///// On another note, hopefully Ucchan doesn't get caught up in what primoses to be an epic beatdown.
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 01:50 PDT
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CHAPRTER EIGHT: Whew. That's just about the worst-case scenario from my point of view. I hate to drop a story in the middle, so I'll try to keep going. If Nerima drops completely off the plot radar, I may be able to manage it. If not ... I doubt I can continue to stand what to me is intolerable character bashing simply in order to get to the rest of the story. ///// But points for Happosai, I always like when the old fart reveals he has traits beyond perversion ... in addition to perversion, of course. Although I'm disappointed that he let Ranma be stripped of Anything Goes (losing him as student and heir), let alone that Ranma practically volunteered for it. ///// As usual, no complaints on the SM end of it, or the Ranma-SM interaction.
| Title: Major minor nitpick
Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 01:23 PDT
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"Ryoga? He's not even around, and even if he was he wouldn't give a damn." EXCUSE ME. Ryoga may be heedless of collateral damage when he fights, but he is perfectly willing to lend a hand when someone is being attacked. Hell, even that bastard Taro wasn't above a little altruism now and then.
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 01:12 PDT
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"Akane said you were probably faking to get sympathy from your other fiancées." God. Damn. It. She watched it happen with her own two eyes, man. Akane is good at jumping to conclusions, but seriously, she has to have a starting point to jump from. ///// On the other hand, I owe you an apology. I castigated you earlier for the uncharacteristic deviousness of Akane's apology-extraction scheme, when apparently it was on purpose all along. I disagree most strongly, but I misjudged you. ///// Frankly, at this point, I'm hoping for mind control, or malevolent forces corrupting Akane, or something equally dramatic, because it seems more and more to me like you're completely aware of how far off the rails you're portraying Akane. And there's some 'splainin' to do.
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 00:55 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, I (and Ranma) stand corrected: it was a one-woman conspiracy. Not any better, or more plausible IMO. Akane isn't necessarily above fishing for apologies, but it's more like a demand than a sting operation when she does. Moving on. ///// CHAPTER 4: It's really a shame that I had to revise a complaint from last chapter, because I have none for this chapter. Really. I loved the fact that Ranma faced foes who acted as a military force, and that he revealed familiarity with such and a willingness to adjust tactics accordingly. And War was awesome: "the kind that wins" indeed. Oh, Famine was fine too, but IMO the Ranma part of this chapter was so brilliant it puts the other in its shadow.
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 00:36 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
The scene introducing Ami to Nerima was exquisite, even if overdone. (In five minutes she sees half the oneshot characters of the manga?) And the senshi meeting was well done also, with people reacting passionately but not insanely. ///// HOWEVER. Your depiction of Akane was simultaneously touching (from Kasumi) and LUDICROUS. When did she ever conspire with anyone to extract apologies from Ranma? Ever? You seem to be suggesting that she's been driven literally insane with jealousy.
| Reviewed By: Final-Fan On: April 25, 2010 00:19 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Unless I'm grossly mistaken, you wrote this in 2008. So I'm somewhat disappointed to see a rehash of the tired intro, "Everyone dogpiles Ranma in the Worst Day Ever(tm), especially Akane who shows no signs of the maturity she developed in the late manga and if anything is worse than ever, and he gives up and leaves for X crossover series." Maybe I'm wrong, but that seems where this is headed. And yes, that may seem like an oddly specific cliche, but IMO it certainly is one: I've seen it enough times. Sailor Polaris: well, on second thought I bumped the Originality/Creativity up from 5 to 6, because of the fact that she wasn't from the Moon Kingdom per se but rather a refugee from another, destroyed world. Also the ... unauthorised relationship with the Princess, heh. All in all, IMO setting one's story as post-manga means you need to have a better reason for separating him and Akane. In the Hinako story arc, IIRC, she was the LAST fiancee to get upset, only blowing her stack when she stumbled on him bending her over a desk, hand on boob, yelling "I have you now!" or something. By the end of the manga it's clear they're going to end up together, though it wouldn't be unreasonable to ask if they STAY together. The low rating is largely due to my dissatisfaction with such a cheap maneuver as I THINK you're pulling; but I may be wrong, and even if I'm not, time heals all wounds and I'll like the story better once you leave Nerima behind (justly or unjustly) and move on. I only REALLY hate stories that keep going back to rub salt in the wounds and remind us how awful Akane or whoever is.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2010 07:44 PDT
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Shit, 6 months since an update? I know life can kick your ass, but this is ridiculous. Still, a brand new spanking chapter, hehehe, concluding one aspect and building on to a new one. So far so good, looking forward to the next one. Continue to update will ya? Ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2009 21:42 PST
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Could we see an update before the new year? BECAUSE THIS CLIFFHANGER IS KILLING ME! Besides, it's been almost 2 months since an update, and while I love your stories, waiting more than a month for a new chapter is rather annoying. In spite of this, I'm looking forward to the next chapter as it comes out. So, update again soon, will ya? Ja ne.
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