| "Fruit of the Forbidden" Reviews/Comments [ 51 ] |
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Reviewed By: pandasammi On: November 02, 2008 00:07 EDT
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that stupid son of a.....ohhh tell me Kagomes going to catch Koga and that whore?? good twist though. tahts a way to get him out of the picture real fast. haha i think inu buying that necklace fpr her is cute. totally. lol
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2008 20:01 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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great update... nice of inuyasha to help miroku with sango... now inuyasha still has his problem... wonder what he'll do about it... so kouga and kikyo are seeing each other behind kagome's back... hope kagome finds out though... update when you can... please and thank you...
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Reviewed By: Ryan89 On: November 01, 2008 17:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story so far because of the different plot an the good writing with detail. So just keep up the good work and update please.
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Reviewed By: Lunabell [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2008 17:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really good story so far. But I gotta say Koga is a basterd!!!! ENYONE with kikyo is just blech.
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2008 07:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the Miroku and Sango part was pretty good... It was very awkward (GOD, my spelling sucks I had to write and re-write that word over and over again with different spellings just to try and get spell check to figure out my crappy spelling...)
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Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2008 14:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In Japan (from what I know from Ayashi no ceres) twins are thought o be the reincarnations of lovers who committed suicide together... (An old Japanese myth says that if two star-crossed lovers commit dual suicide, they get reincarnated as twins. from http : // tvtropes . org / pmwiki / pmwiki . php / Main / Twincest) Great story!!!
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Reviewed By: pandasammi On: October 31, 2008 01:32 EDT
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I liked the second chapter too. i liked the twist with Sango and Kagome ohhh how that made me giggle. just a suggestion i think a little add up to kagomes feelings about her brother and mabe a nude sence that has herself thinking shes insane and perverse would deffinately pump the story up. just a suggestion tho since you seem to be going off watever springs into your head. great job btw this story is getting off without a hitch
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Reviewed By: slowfatbunny [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2008 01:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story so far with a interesting plot thats different. The writing is good because you go in to detail which is important. So lets just keep up the good work and continue with updates please. Oh yeah I am curious about those pictures too of Kagome.
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Reviewed By: Ichabod2626 On: October 31, 2008 00:45 EDT
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Wow quick chapter, Interesting Kagome believes Inuyasha has someone special, I wondering if Kagome is going to confront him about his mood sooner or later. Looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: chichers On: October 30, 2008 22:39 EDT
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Well that is one take on things that i haven't read before. And to tell the truth i really like how this is going and i hope that you will continue to write this and update soon. I will be looking forward to reading more of this story in the furture.
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Reviewed By: ThisIsMeSmiling [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2008 20:07 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW. Kudos to you on this...I found it to be very well written and really interesting. Can't wait till your next update! :D ~Amber
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Reviewed By: Aditu M On: October 30, 2008 17:48 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was hesitant about clicking on this story, I almost didn't but by the end of the chapter I was glad I did. The summary you have up alludes to something ahead and a clue, maybe two, has substantiated that suspicion. I am very interested to see how you will take this story along for its ride, and in the future conclude it. I hold much hope that you will not neglect, much less drop, this story. You have not made it come across as a pwp, but something with actual substance, an element that sometimes seems almost rare. Keep writing and I hope that you will be inspired to update soon Best Wishes and Thank you for sharing what promises to be a lovely story!
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Reviewed By: Ickabod2626 On: October 30, 2008 01:03 EDT
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First off very nice start to your story and secondly I believe you need Inuyasha to have that internal struggle with himself. Society Has pretty much said that what he is thinking is wrong, sick, twisted, and not normal so therefore you wrote Inuyasha perfectly maybe if you decide to continue having Inuyasha focus on working towards leaving the situation like getting better grades so he can go over seas for college and that might lighten the mood a little bit but keep that Moral indecision and this story has great things going forward. Look forward to reading the next chapter. Ickabod2626
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Reviewed By: pandasammi On: October 30, 2008 00:09 EDT
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you know despite the obvious perversion in this story its really intriging. I like the plot ALOT. its different, taboo and totally....hot. lol
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Reviewed By: Bill76 On: October 29, 2008 23:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story so far because the plot is new and different and I am interested where you going to take it. So great job and keep up the good work with updates thanks.
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