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| "A Tale of Ever After" Reviews/Comments [ 303 ] | | Pages (21): [ « ‹ 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 › » ] | Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2013 18:20 PST
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Caught it. Thanks and fixed. | Reviewed By: ponygirl2112 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2013 18:13 PST
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So happy to finally be caught up so I don't have to read over 100 chapters in pretty much 1 go. This bit doesn't make sense as written, you seem to have left out some words after bird here where InuYasha's trying to get Aki out of the tree; the bird the hanyou’s head and instead | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2013 14:17 PST
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LOL, someone tried to correct your grammar, but their own was so bungled you couldn't understand what they meant? Classic. Hey, nobody's perfect, but like you said, that's why you're constantly going back and editing this or that. Your story is grammatically a hell of a lot better than some of the stories out there. It's also a hell of a lot better purely story-wise! Absolutely loved this update, of course. One thing I love the most about your style of writing is how you take the time to research all your cute little details, like mitsuba, which is a moist loving and shade loving plant rich in calcium and vitamin c. And you know what else? The little purple flowers of hotokenoza do kind of look like mini snake heads, LOL. I loved the development with Aki at the end there, his amazement that Inuyasha would save him, especially at his own expense since he got nailed by the birds himself in the process. Also loved the revelation that his 'hero' Morio was really the bad guy, and the one who made his grandmother sick. With Aki also admitting that he'd been acting out as much as he was because Morio had specifically told him to, maybe they'll go a little easier on him so long as he cools his jets now. Looks like a lot of the air was sucked out of his sails at all he's just learned, so I'm looking forward to seeing how Aki behaves from here on out. Super looking forward to the next chapter! :-) | Reviewed By: Knittingknots [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2013 12:14 PST
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Someone wrote a review that talked about grammar. Unfortunately, I couldn't understand what points were being made because it was rather ungrammatical. Accidently hit the delete review button. If you would like to repost, perhaps with examples, I might be able to figure out what you are referring to. I'm well aware that not every chapter is perfectly error free, which is one of the reasons you will find me doing edits. And yes, Joben appears as a character in the original version of After the End, but he's not the same person in this story. So did Tameo, Hisa, and Hana. But they are my characters, so why not? I am also a retired English professor, so perhaps all you need to point out is where there errors are, instead of trying to explain to me why the errors are bad. Thank you! --Knittingknots | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2013 22:44 PST
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I like that Haname is trying to be nice, saying that she wouldn't mind it if Kagome came in, and telling Kaede not to leave Kagome waiting outside next time. I think I more feel sorry for Haname than dislike her any more these days. It was meant to be that Kaede left Kagome outside this one time, though, because otherwise she probably wouldn't have made a new friend in Amaya, or at least not yet. I really like Amaya, too, for sure. I'm glad Kagome's found somebody she can ask about vegetables or whatever, who knows so much about gardening. Our poor future-born miko's got to feel so lost, in a way, thrust into a world she knows very little about, granted by her own design and choosing, but so now here she is trying to figure things out but then at the same time it's hard for her to even ask anybody because they act like she should already know, so she's stuck with that feeling of trying to pretend she knows what she's doing even though she doesn't, just hoping to wing it and get by. Kind of like Inuyasha back during that meeting at Tameo's about the boys, LOL. At least he and Kagome are in the same boat, when it comes to adapting to village life, so that's good, and she's got honest friends in Kaede and of course Sango and Miroku, and now Amaya, who will help her out without making her feel stupid for not already knowing something. Great update, as always. Looking forward to seeing next week's chapters. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2013 09:13 PST
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Lovely update! I really like Amaya too, now. Seems to me poor Isao's mother is just trying to go with the flow and is a tad bit victim of circumstance. Surely she knows her boy isn't the bad boy Haname thinks he is, and that animosity Haname felt towards Isao, that Aki only got into trouble when he influenced him, has got to have put up a buffer in Amaya's head to not become one of Haname or Chiya's sheep when it comes to listening to all their other nonsense. So I'm so glad to see her being nice to Kagome, and that was very tactful, too, the way Kagome tried to explain the vegetable situation. She's going to have to tiptoe around the truth like that, since most people, I don't think they ever really knew she was from the future, just that she was from another world, and there's really no point in trying to explain things. The more she'd explain about what all she had in her time, the more 'rich' the people of Inuyasha's time are going to think she was. So letting Amaya think that her shrine did indeed grow all its own vegetables, and merely somebody else besides her was in charge of doing it, was definitely the best way to go. I love that she offered to help Kagome learn, and that Kagome can tell she's made a new friend in her. Yay! I feel sorry for them all having to put up with Morio; hopefully Kaede's got some candy tranquilizers for him to eat, LOL. I wouldn't even want to fathom trying to get an adult male five year old to take a nasty tasting medicine he didn't want to take. All in all great job, as always. Looking forward to tomorrow's update. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2013 21:19 PST
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LOL, I like Daisuke, and I agree, Inuyasha doesn't have anything to worry about as far as that goes. If sending Kagome will get him to take his medicine then I'm sure Inuyasha will approve. He cares for the old man, bringing him wood like he does. I like Hana, too. At least there's one nice one in that family. Things look like they're plugging along nicely. Looking forward to the next update, as always. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2013 19:51 PST
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Wonderful update, as always. So Kagome's got her first taste of what it's like for the poorer people of the village. Even in a village like that, that as a whole is poor compared to say a nobleman's estate, there are still going to be richer and poorer among them. She's actually pretty well off herself since she's a miko and Inuyasha is warrior class, and being adopted into Tameo's ko like she is. Inuyasha might occasionally feel bad because of knowing what she gave up for him, the life she could've had in her century, but I don't think he's doing too bad when it comes to providing for her in his own. They even have a futon. And now that he's going to officially be on the village guard, that's got to bump himself up in status in some way, I would assume, never mind that whole 'protected by the kami' gig, LOL. Yeah, life is good. And starting to get hectic, from the sound of things. Pretty soon it'll be the roofing party and woman's sewing party. Super looking forward to seeing what happens next! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 04, 2013 08:43 PST
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Yay, progress! LOL. Really loved this chapter, though, I suppose that's getting a bit pointless of me to say because obviously, I love EVERY chapter, LOL. But I especially liked Inuyasha's talk with Susumu at the end there, and Susumu finally getting to the point and voicing his request. I agree with him, by birthright Inuyasha should be a guard of the village, being a warrior and sword carrier, after all. He's certainly not a farmer. And your mention earlier with the girls of Rin's interest in flowers and wanting to learn the names of everything made me chuckle a little 'cause it reminded me of me, and my recent endeavor to learn flowers because of my new job. I'm proud to say I mentally pictured every different blossom you listed off, LOL. | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2013 08:32 PST
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Lovely update, as always. Just another day in their lives; I love these little snippets. Kagome with Kaede, it's wonderful that she's learning so much, and yeah, back then a child's fever could be serious, indeed. Kagome's in a world without antibiotics, so she'll have to be more diligent with every little sniffle and cough. The herbs that work, they aren't as strong as our medicine, and so need to be taken early enough. Much harder to bring someone back from the brink with no IVs at your disposal. Loved the scene with Inuyasha and Susumu, too, and Inuyasha jumping up into the watch tower and then turning around and offering Susumu a hand, who'd started the climb up the ladder before Inuyasha's jump, LOL. Guess there's no point in being afraid of heights if you can't possibly get hurt in a fall. I'm not really afraid of heights, myself, but I have a healthy awareness of gravity, LOL. I could handle being up in a watch tower, but there's always a bit of underlying nervousness whenever you're up high in something you might possibly somehow fall out of. If a fall from great heights just equated to embarrassment, and possibly the wind knocked out of me if I landed wrong as the absolute worst that could happen, then I'd be up in trees all the time, too. Super looking forward to seeing what happens next! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2012 08:23 PST
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Read this last night but couldn't leave a review; stupid iffy Internet connection, LOL. But anyway, I loved this update, of course, as always. I must admit, it is kind of suspicious that Miroku would insist upon meditating where the conversation inside the house would inevitably distract him, if he really needed to meditate that badly, LOL. Maybe eavesdropping is how he meditates, LOL. Sango's comment about Chiya was unexpected, but I know you will reveal/explain more later, you master of dropping hints and planting seeds, you. The closing scene was adorable, Inuyasha watching Kagome puttering around the house until finally losing it and snatching her up like prey, LOL. Dinner can wait, indeed. Good update! Looking forward to next week's chapters. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2012 08:15 PST
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Yay! Lovely update; what a wonderful Christmas present, LOL. Loved the scene with Inuyasha fishing and the boys watching. That's hard, to catch a fish that way, though I imagine Inuyasha has advantages over a mere human attempting such a feat. Good for the human boy who managed it! And I liked how...Jiro was it?...stopped them all from fighting over who can sneak up on fish the best and such. Not something to fight over, indeed. I love how all your scenes are just like real little glimpses of random, everyday life. Keep it up! | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2012 11:47 PST
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Charming little update. I loved the first scene, Kagome arriving at Sango's and life at Sango's for a moment with the girls. Of course, mustn't forget Chika. I was glad you tossed in mention of her. I also liked that closing scene, back with Inuyasha and the others. I can understand the guys going a little overboard with discussing where the shed could go, LOL, since like they pointed out, it's not often they actually have so many options available. I definitely agree that it can't be too close to the house, 'cause of the smell, so the best option is probably either where Miroku picked out, or maybe back near the tree that might fall and just cut down the tree. That would certainly solve that problem, unless of course losing that tree means losing the shade that would've kept the shed from getting too hot in the summer, LOL. Well whatever, I'm sure they'll figure it out. Looking forward to the next update, as always. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2012 16:53 PST
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Another wonderful update, as expected. Loved the banter between Daitaro, Tsuneo and Inuyasha, and even before that, Tsuneo's wonder at seeing Inuyasha pull the tree along and Daitaro's assurance that the hanyou was truly the man they'd seen him be the day before. So glad to know that Tsuneo himself is not against our hanyou, even if the rest of his family is, or at least used to be. I'm sure, for the most part, they're going to calm down now - except for Aki of course, LOL. He's too stubborn, and good for Kinjiro, having him in chains, LOL. Tsuneo's comment to Inuyasha that his shed wouldn't get built by wishing reminded me of the previous conversation between Aki and Kinjiro, and how the boy actually thought such things were done by magic, at least for youkai. It would be nice, LOL, but nope, Inuyasha's gotta work hard just like everybody else, he just doesn't have to work quite so hard at pulling felled trees is all. All in all great chapter, of course. Looking forward to seeing what happens next. :-) | Reviewed By: SplendentGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2012 08:12 PST
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This was a pleasant chapter. I can see both Kagome and Inuyasha's sides regarding the laundry, LOL. On the one hand, it would be quite lovely indeed to have a total lazy day in which to just lay back and watch the clouds and do absolutely nothing. On the other hand, what better time to bust the laundry out than when she's not juggling it amidst a bunch of other chores and jobs? Now she can get it out of the way, and clear it from her plate of things that need doing. After all, Inuyasha's chopping wood, so he's certainly not sitting there doing nothing, either. I liked Miroku coming by, and the mention of Momoe. Can't blame Kagome for forgetting all about that, after everything that happened yesterday, though like Miroku pointed out it wasn't really a good day for a blessing, anyway. Not after so many negative things happened. And it would also be a good thing if Kagome could get some crash course pointers from Kaede first, too, so Momoe doesn't find out Kagome has no idea what she's doing, LOL. At least Inuyasha's not the only one whom people just automatically assume know certain things that he actually doesn't know. Loved that banter between he and Miroku at the end there. All in all, fabulous chapter, as always. :-) Keep up the awesome work! | | Pages (21): [ « ‹ 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 › » ] |
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