| "Trinity" Reviews/Comments [ 100 ] |
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Reviewed By: delihn64 On: March 07, 2003 12:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the best fanfiction I've read in a long time. Your style is wonderful and smooth. It makes the actual reading enjoyable. If I have to work to hard just to read the words, I don't like it as much. The premise is also well thought out. I like the portrayal of the characters. They're close to the originals with enough quirks thrown in to make them really interesting.
There were a few points that could use some work. I like the story coming from multiple points of view, but sometimes the transitions are a little hard to follow. There were a couple spots where I didn't know who's thoughts they were. And for some reason, the word balls in the third chapter took me out of the story for a moment. I don't really know how to make a man's crotch sound less crass, but maybe there's another way to word it so that it matches the elegance of the rest of your piece. I'm really looking forward to future chapters. Keep it up. You're a really excellent writer. |
Reviewed By: shiek On: March 07, 2003 06:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please write more, it's absolutely outstandingly captivating!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Myself On: March 06, 2003 22:35 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
More please. |
Reviewed By: Moonshine587 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 11:51 CST
Comment/Review:
Great story. Can't wait to see how the 3 of them get together. Keep it up, and update soon! |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 11:23 CST
Comment/Review:
lol
Go Goku! Get him where it hurts the most! weee!!
This chapter was awesome ^_^ But WHY did it take so long for you to update!?
*smirk* Trunks and Goten with a bondage mag.... naughty little boys! shame on them! lol
As always Xero, you have out done yourself ^_^
So when does Vejiito get to go a-courtin? I can't WAIT too see that.. *snicker*
anywho, keep up the good work, and don't wait so long to update!! you're gonna kill us all if you do that again!!
~huggles n kissies~
toodles! |
Reviewed By: moonglaive [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 11:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yay! Go Bulma! You tell that > Chichi off....
I love the story! The characterizations are great! Can't wait for more!! |
Reviewed By: Lauryn [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 11:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally! I was beginning to think you'd abandoned this fic! ChiChi's as bitchy as ever, and I couldn't help but laugh when Goku hit Vegeta in the...er.. jewels, lol! PLEASE don't wait another three months to update! *pouts* I deserves more attention from its creator! |
Reviewed By: I Luv Vege [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 06:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this is a really good fic!!! I luv it!! Its so unique and original! WELL DONE!! Please update soon!! |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2003 18:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*rips her hair out*
you just stopped it! Please keep going! You're writing is hipnotic and addicting! MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE! gimme gimme gimme! |
Reviewed By: Spencers13 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2003 16:12 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Wow! Very unique idea! I hope you get a new chapter up soon! I'd like to see this Vejitto courting! ^_~ I'd also like to see how Vegeta gets drawn into the mix. He would seem a tougher nut to crack than Goku. I'll be watching for updates! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2003 16:55 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my God, EXCELLENT chapter!! I LOVE your characterization of the Bitch from Hell!! Bulma getting Goten a special gi was precious...Vegeta giving Goku a job...Vejitto's musings about Goku...ALL excellent plot points. My favorite bit, though, was how you described Goku stretching on the beach after Vegeta left. Absolutely poetry in motion! I had the perfect mental picture though the scene, your imagery was perfect! As if I would expect anything less from you!! ^-^ Wonderful job, as always! Looking forward to the next chappy! |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2002 19:40 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was good me want to know more too |
Reviewed By: Tobe On: December 31, 2002 17:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so cool! Hurry and finish it before I die of suspence.
Tobe |
Reviewed By: Dark Serapha [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2002 12:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOHOOO! Way to go, Vejitto! *cheers hybrid on
This story is so refreshing! And I can tell you a thousand times how much I love your style, Xero, and still not be done with it! Can't wait for the next chapter.. GO, VEJITTO, GO!!!! |
Reviewed By: Lauryn [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2002 22:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've been waiting so very long for the next chapter to this fic, and I'm very pleased you've finally posted it :) You're writing skills never cease to amaze me. It's flawless... except ya forgot the 'l' on 'Videl' at one point, lol! The story is developing nicely and I certainly look forward to the courting :) I'll be waiting :) Fantastic work! |
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