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Reviewed By: chibi baka On: February 13, 2003 18:52 EST
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More!! More!! MORE!!! DARNIT!!! hehe |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 14:56 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok i like this story keep up the good work |
Reviewed By: Sam On: February 04, 2003 20:13 EST
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This is the first chap you write which have OOC chara. I mean... it's obvious Trunks isn't ok but nor Goku or Gohan (who's a doctor!) seems to notice or care.
I know, it's normal they're worried for Goten but it's not like Trunks is a complete stranger!
Goku wasn't that cold when Vegeta blow up half of the Tenkaichi Budokai!
I'm sorry to say that cause the other chaps were really good.
Ok, I keep wishing Vegeta would pay a bit more attention to his son (who BTW desperately needs it) instead than Leilani but this can be just me... ^_-
Poor Trunks! I just hope the guys will stop to blame him and help him for a change!
And when I said help I don't mean just send him by a doctor but give him some human warm also! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 11:31 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The LEMON!! Oh my god it was SOOO GOOOD!! I don't know HOW you can say you have trouble with them, GOD I love how Trunks talks dirty to Gohan! GAH!
But chapter 8, this is the one where I lost it. I've had a lump in my throat several times, but God I needed the kleenex with this one!! Poor Trunks is just SO pitiful! I just want to hug him and tell him everything will be ok!! I can't WAIT for the next chapter!! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 10:25 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god, this absolutely broke my heart!! POOR TRUNKSIE, to have this happen to him all over again!! And him internalizing it all over again, when he has to KNOW that Goten will love him no matter what!! It's just SO SAD!! WAAAH!! |
Reviewed By: hippiechick83 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 00:49 EST
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Poor Trunks! I know he's the "bad guy" in all this, but I still feel sorry for him. He doesn't even know exactly what he's done! Goten doesn't deserve all the pain Trunks has put him through. Then again, it's not like Trunks is doing it on purpose. I sure hope those bastards who hurt Trunks are caught soon and get their just desserts. I want to see them get ripped limb from limb by pissed off Super Saiyans! Blood, gore! Death, destruction! It'd be greatness! ^_^ Alright, I think that's enough input from me. I just want to finish off by saying this was a really, really great chapter considering you were most likely barely lucid due to pain killers. *two thumbs up* Total greatness. I can't wait until you update. ^_^ Until then, Peace and Out. |
Reviewed By: k-chan On: February 01, 2003 11:16 EST
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finally!! an update!! Loved it soooooo much!!! update soon plz!!! |
Reviewed By: Namek Kaia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2003 02:50 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ack! I almost cried! And that's hard to get me to do, especially over writing. So good job. ^^ Tons of emotion in this chapter. I'm dying to know what's gonna happen. Is help really going to solve Trunks's problem? Or is he beyond help? And what about the baby? I'm excited to finally see it. ^_^ I'm anxious for an update!! Amazing work on this so far. Keep writing! |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: January 31, 2003 14:07 EST
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WAHHH!!!! ;-; POOR GOTEN!!! Poor Trunks!!! You're not dirty Trunks!!! I STILL LOVE YOU!!! *bawls!*
Please update A.S.A.P. 'cause I REALLY wanna know what was in that envelope!!! O_o;;
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: bachnelkenwurz On: January 31, 2003 10:14 EST
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I’m so terrible sad. I think someone has to find the envelopment. Finally it would give some clues or even the whole answer why Trunks behaves sometimes that way. I still hope the baby is fine and I wish you to get better from whatever you have. If painkillers make you write your stories that incredible good I should take them myself. |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 10:40 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic is SO heart wrenching!! The ANGST!! The ANGST!! Poor Goten being beaten by his love, then Trunks not even knowing why, or even remembering!!
You know, I've never been a fan of male pregnancy in fics, but HONESTLY, I'm not just saying this because your my friend, PG, this is the VERY first fic I've read where it makes sense. The fact that they tried for so long to have a baby using a surrogate mother, that Goten saw the Dragon as their only hope of conceiving...it just is so right! Usually, I groan and roll my eyes when a Saiyajin male gets pregnant, but you've done it so beautifully, and kept them in character WITHOUT feminizing Goten in the least. VERY well done!! |
Reviewed By: Vatara On: January 30, 2003 09:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am eager to find out what was in that envelope. please contact me at vatara2000_of_the_elite_forces@yahoo.com
I would be interested in your storys and i have many great ideas! |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2003 10:53 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL I LOVED the Cheshire cat Vegeta, off to wreak havoc on the neighborhood with teenage girls! And what's with Saiyan princes fainting? LOL Nice bits of comic relief!
But THEN you had to have Trunks have an episode at the mall! Poor guy! So were these the guys that raped him? Is Kane involved? I can't tell, since he acted like he didn't know Trunks was with Goten! It sure seems like it though! I couldn't tell from the first chapter whether Kane was drugging the drinks or if someone else was doing it, just making use of the fact that Trunks was drinking with the guy. Such mystery!! |
Reviewed By: Namek Kaia On: January 23, 2003 23:59 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What?! You can't leave it there!! I gotta know what happens next. You have to update soon. I'm dying to know what's gonna happen. Is Trunks going to get over this? Or will it always be his "dirty" secret? Is the baby okay? Or did Trunks screw up big time? So many questions. I gotta know! You're doing great with this so far. Can't wait to read more! Keep those chappies comin!! |
Reviewed By: Chris On: March 31, 2003 15:26 EST
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Leilani kicked butt!! She did the whole I'm so cute and innocent act,...then BLASTED that guy AWAY!!! I would love to see a picture of that!! And they obliviated ALL of those...there is not a word FOUL enough to discribe them. Oh,but they had the baby, HAPPINESS!! And now an OTHER ONE!! Those to are sex fiends for each other, aren't they. Woo! Bad guys gone, Guy gets..no KEEPS...um..Guy, "Firefly" loves papa again, and baby's born, WITH ANOTHER ON THE WAY!! I feel fulfilled. All it is right with the world. ::content sigh:: The story rocked...Minus the raping and all, but it gave the whole thing character. Things really need to stop being sugar coated all the time. But yeah, keep up the good work when you write other stories. I like the ones you have so far. |
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