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| "Father, Mother, Lover" Reviews/Comments [ 121 ] | | Pages (9): [ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 > » ] | Title: i found it!
Reviewed By: chibi_kotsu On: August 11, 2006 22:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this story a long time ago and I loved it, and I cried ^-^ It was a great story and I'm so happy I found it because now I can leave this review!! Excellent job!!
| Reviewed By: Deaira On: July 12, 2006 22:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Man that was crazy! I thought they were gonna have a happy ending and here they all commit suicide...wow. lol. that was so good!!! i read this fic almost all day. the ending was a real twist though. what a shocker. im still like omg are you serious! after all those attempts ryou finally succeded in suicide. the ending was so cool! really sad but cool! im just stuck on that...yami shoulda destroyed the tape when ryou gave it to him. oh well. it was just like a movie....yay!...ima check out some of your other stories. i just relized that before this story i was reading another of yours. what a coincidence...on the same day...ok i gotta do my homework. lol. cant wait to read another of your fics!
| Title: Too bad.
Reviewed By: ifergotagen [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2005 13:08 CDT
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Its a pity they all died. Wether or not they are happy as they die is not the case, for when they die do they rarely exsist again without memory. Nevertheless, 'twas still a good fic. Dramatic, maybe throughout the entire story, but there were some points when it was lacked. For instense, when the fathers were killed Yami and Bakura should have had more going on in that little apartment rather then just 'intrude-kill-clean-leave'. Also, before I forget, you might need to catch up on your run-on sentences. I found quite a few of them that urked me. Your stories are all excellent, and this one proves you are right in the mind and have an overall understanding of all the characters, although you didn't event them. Good job, very nicely done!
| Reviewed By: Beysie [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2004 13:00 CDT
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Wow... this was so tragic! Almost started to cry... It's too bad that tape didn't get thrown out, then they would all probably have lived happily ever after! Now I have to go read your alternate ending... I do hope it has a happier ending...
| Title: Sniff
Reviewed By: L-sama On: July 09, 2004 00:22 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well that was good and depressing. I might go out and kill myself now. It was well written though.
| Reviewed By: Escaapi On: January 30, 2004 16:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow.. the last chapter was... completely random (gave me quite a shock). I have to say, I enjoyed reading this quite a lot. Just to whine: I really, really, don't like it when people write fanfics in English and slip in random Japanese words. It's not like they've taken an English class but they're still Japanese speakers.. It's like they're native Americans or something. They do not speak Japanese if they are dubbed. Not even a tiny bit. Well, it's hard to say what I mean to say, and it probably won't change anyone's writing style. Now, to justify my bitching, an explanation of how I rated it (ten is high, right?): Style of Writing: 6 The Japanese words thing, mainly, and it moved way too fast at parts. Most of it was a bit awquard (how to spell that word?) sounding Spelling & Grammar: 5 Spelling mistakes, lack of commas. The usual. Originality/Creativity: 8 I don't read YuGiOh fanfics a lot, so it might not mean anything. Enjoyment Factor: 10 Ah, morbid enjoyment of yaoi (and death). It validates my existence. Overall rating: 7 Just as writing and fanficry in general, sort of on the good side of mediocre. On the other hand, my friend really likes it. Heh. ::looks at the other reviews:: It seems I'm alone in my opinions. H'm. ::writes more:: HA HA HA! I WILL NEVER SHUT UP! ::ahem:: It didn't make me cry at all. To make me cry, it has to be better thanWhere The Red Fern Grows (I nearly cried at that. I did not actually cry at it.), or about as good as this story that was in the back of our school editions of The Clay Marble. I cried at school reading that story.. I'm so ashamed. Yeah, but I'm going to shut up now, and tell you that overall, I did like this story. In case you're just skimming, I'll repeat: Overall, I did like this story.
| Reviewed By: Escaapi On: January 30, 2004 16:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow.. the last chapter was... completely random (gave me quite a shock). I have to say, I enjoyed reading this quite a lot. Just to whine: I really, really, don't like it when people write fanfics in English and slip in random Japanese words. It's not like they've taken an English class but they're still Japanese speakers.. It's like they're native Americans or something. They do not speak Japanese if they are dubbed. Not even a tiny bit. Well, it's hard to say what I mean to say, and it probably won't change anyone's writing style. Now, to justify my bitching, an explanation of how I rated it (ten is high, right?): Style of Writing: 6 The Japanese words thing, mainly, and it moved way too fast at parts. Most of it was a bit awquard (how to spell that word?) sounding Spelling & Grammar: 5 Spelling mistakes, lack of commas. The usual. Originality/Creativity: 8 I don't read YuGiOh fanfics a lot, so it might not mean anything. Enjoyment Factor: 10 Ah, morbid enjoyment of yaoi (and death). It validates my existence. Overall rating: 7 Just as writing and fanficry in general, sort of on the good side of mediocre. On the other hand, my friend really likes it. Heh. ::looks at the other reviews:: It seems I'm alone in my opinions. H'm. ::writes more:: HA HA HA! I WILL NEVER SHUT UP! ::ahem:: It didn't make me cry at all. To make me cry, it has to be better thanWhere The Red Fern Grows (I nearly cried at that. I did not actually cry at it.), or about as good as this story that was in the back of our school editions of The Clay Marble. I cried at school reading that story.. I'm so ashamed. Yeah, but I'm going to shut up now, and tell you that overall, I did like this story. In case you're just skimming, I'll repeat: Overall, I did like this story.
| Title: it's akane1313
Reviewed By: akane13 On: January 26, 2004 18:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
okay, okay. So I was being a little mean in my other review. Sorry, I always tend to be a little mad at sad endings. I read the other reviews and realized that I hadn't even told you that I really liked the story. Ya gotta understand, though: When someone dies at the end, it's both sad and happy, but when people read it, they have mixed reactions. ex: a christian: "oh great. Sure they were going to hell either way, but why go so fast?" If someone commits suicide they go to hell in this religion. (of course, being...not straight gets you the same results not that it maters to me. Gay guys rock!...tell no one) Or those who don't believe in any sort of diety or afterlife: "so now they're dead and nonexistant...crap" But hey! It's a really great story and I think I might read it again. I already told my friends to read it.^_^
| Reviewed By: akane1313 On: January 26, 2004 18:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it would've been a 10, but I got kinda mad when you killed them all. Although I'll admit, I kinda saw it coming...I'm still mad though. I was worried throughout the whole story but kept reading thinking everything will turn out fine, and then you know what? They all commit suicide. (sarcasm) great ending.
| Reviewed By: CynicalSpiritValea [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2003 22:51 CST
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and the plot thickens but thats ok! im loving this it really is a good fic you have going here, and im adding it to my favorites man!
| Reviewed By: some one On: November 18, 2003 20:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMFG!!!I can't believe how much I cried at the end!!! I usually never cry but this story!!! GOD!!! It was reeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaallllllllyyyyyy sad and it kept making me read more and more.i'm still crying!!!*wipes tears*
| Reviewed By: chibichan*~ On: November 17, 2003 23:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my goodness. Your story has just... wowed me. I love it. The ending almost made me wake my siter up I was bawling so much. XD what a sap I am. You are my fanfiction god right now lol. I'm going to read it again. :D
| Reviewed By: al On: November 03, 2003 23:45 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i don't think i reviewed for this but if i did then this is another one. I personally like death fics as long as the fic is good. They always come back alive in your other fics after all. ok i think my hand is turning numb and i can't reach the window. more rereading tomorrow. sigh... i can't wait that long
| Reviewed By: Sisilaya On: October 04, 2003 21:14 CDT
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So.... Ryou's dad killed them all after all, even if it was through the tape.. I'm kinda really sad now, your story really touched me but I despise the end (sorry, I know it's your story but neither of them deserved this ,>
| Title: Wow!
Reviewed By: Heero lover On: October 01, 2003 17:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! It's gut renching, it's heart warming, and makes you want to rech all at the same time! I will say that the characters weren't as 'in' character as I would have liked but if you forget that's it's Yu-Gi-Oh then it's VERY good! I don't normaly like Yaoi but I really liked you're fic! I had a hard time reading it 'cause my little bro is always hanging around but I stil liked it A LOT!!! The ending was a little sudden and overly 'trying to make the reader cry' but it's still a good fic!
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