| "Blood-Red Eyes" Reviews/Comments [ 217 ] |
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Reviewed By: me On: September 05, 2003 00:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update! |
Reviewed By: Heli On: September 02, 2003 21:30 CDT
Comment/Review:
Write new chapter soon. Or I will tie you up and scoop out your intestines with sporks. |
Reviewed By: dragon On: August 23, 2003 21:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I havn't read this story line before, I cant for the next chapter |
Reviewed By: UPDATE SOON On: August 21, 2003 22:03 CDT
Comment/Review:
I HOPE THAT U HAVEN'T FORGOT THIS FIC PLEASE CON'T UPDATE ASAP!!! |
Reviewed By: dragon On: August 21, 2003 01:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
YOUR STORY IS AWESOME I CANT WAIT TO READ MORE |
Reviewed By: Taiyo On: August 20, 2003 18:08 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would make youkai Inuyasha practically rape her.
cuz if he doesn't hold himself back, he would be really rough with her! Ex: rip at her with his claws, not arouse her thus making it painfull for her, do whatever he wants at any pace he wants even if it's hurting her.
Then when he's fucked her so much that he's tired, Inuyasha will wake up to see her in a mess.
.......I just think that that would make a nice little fluffy scene.... |
Reviewed By: Dragon Tamer On: August 11, 2003 16:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It Was Terific One of the best ones I've reed so far like last time I loved it But You realy need to update soon. PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorry about my spelling |
Reviewed By: Bunny On: August 10, 2003 12:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fanfic please hurry and write the other chapters. lol ^.~
Bunny |
Reviewed By: Shinjata On: August 10, 2003 01:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Friggin great dude. Hope you update soon! I need some more lemony goodness. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: inucutie On: August 09, 2003 04:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
great fic.i like totalally love it.so could you like update soon.i've been waiting for like 2 weeks now. |
Reviewed By: Nikki On: August 02, 2003 18:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT |
Reviewed By: otaku kiwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2003 02:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
im an idiot i spelled write wrong...so embaressed... |
Reviewed By: otaku kiwi [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2003 02:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story totally loved it!!!
Die kikyo die!
also u said u wanted to see the inuyasha human and youkai plushies, nee? Ive seen the human ones at yahoo japan store auction thing...plez right more!
nice lemon chapters too ;P |
Reviewed By: kaoru wolf On: July 23, 2003 20:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
An okay style of writing, good and much better than the majority of Inuyasha fanfiction out there, but it doesn't have you completely wrapped up in the story. I think you need more description. Since this is Inuyasha's POV, smell should be more of a factor. You mentioned him smelling Kagome and Kikyo's scent, but what about the rest of the world around him?
I thought that was a tad unrealistic. He's not just suddenly smell Kikyo a mile or so away. There are other things to distract him, like that plants around him, the smell of the campire, Miroku and Sango. And how much did he smell? Did Kagome's scent of fear wash over him in a wave, or was it a light, almost imperceivable aroma such as Kikyo's scent from Inuyasha's distance? You need to find some ways to describe scent a little better, a thesaurus is very useful in that aspect.
The only other little piece of your fic I didn't like was that I found Kikyo fairly OOC. You have her sneering at Kagome, which she never really has done. She frowns at Kagome, and smiles politely while mocking her to make Kagome feel childish.
She's calm and collected most of the time, exept when Inuyasha does something really...dramatic, is the word I'm looking for I guess. Then she lets her mask slip and becomes bitter and convinced she needs to take him to hell.
She just seemed too...I guess too emotional without much need. That bothered me a little bit.
A lot of fic writers make the mistake of making her like that, which is more fitting for Kagura that Kikyo, who's more neutral with a strong (and really strange)love/hate towards Inuyasha than just flat out evil.
Anyway, I really enjoyed this story. It's a really impressive shot what would happen if Inuyasha became full demon. I like the way you portrayed Kagome in this fic, as well as Sango. I'm sorry if I offended you with my criticism above. I just felt you deserved more than just the standard 'It was good, so write more' review.
Anyway, I'm off to read what else you have written. Good job on this. |
Reviewed By: Dragon Tamer On: July 21, 2003 14:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was Fantastic please write more soon.
P.S. Thank you for getting rid of kikyo I hate her so much. |
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