| "Kagome! Where are you?!" Reviews/Comments [ 409 ] |
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Reviewed By: kikitravel(I am a member of MM.org) On: March 21, 2004 11:20 PST
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I like the Alternate History, though I have a problem with the Philippines. They wouldn't become a state, no matter what the cost. The country, even back then, was very corrupted and abused. One of their earlier presidents practically raped the economy and now they are hesitant to trust any of the others. During WWII, they looked up to the Americans. They were their idols. But they could only stand the USA for a while. The Philippines has a tradition of asking for help, and then complaining about it once the help is given. The USA wouldn't want to make the Philippines a state, the state of the economy and the poverty would drain the USA of its money and resources. Maybe they would make it a territory, but that would basically draw the line. I don't have anything against the Philippines, I'm just stating some observations that I noticed while living there. Love the story!
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Reviewed By: InsaneAuthoress [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2004 20:44 PST
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Wow inuyashas young life sucked. So when you said that Sesshomarus mother will eventually tell him, is that going to happen when they eventually make it back? This chapter was intense very enjoyable. And does Inuyasha remember how happy he was when Sess took him, or is he POed cuz Sess left him in a village. Also i love how everything was so well planed! Perfect. I wonder how they're gonna get out of this. Amazing!
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Reviewed By: Kitsune_Bi [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2004 13:53 PST
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Omg Omg OmGGGGGGGGGGGGGG Sesshou NO! AHHHH DIE HITLER DIE!!!! I HATE THOU'S WRETCHED EXISTENCE!! grrr grrrr grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr. GREAT CHAPTER! Poor Inu-chan! DIIIIEEEEEEEEEEEE SESSOU-KUN'S MOTHER!!!! I HATE HER TOO!! Wretched being. hiss.
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Reviewed By: 12blue12(logged off) On: March 19, 2004 09:35 PST
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hey coolie chappie as usual. i wonder how fluffers is gonna react wen he learn of guns beta and i wonder how kag is gonna react. this should be qite interesting well hope u update soon cya!
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Reviewed By: Yami Bakura On: March 19, 2004 09:04 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked that you had sesshomaru be interested in kagomes time. You are doing a really good job with this and I hope that you write more soon. I am enjoying this story alot.It almost makes me disapointed to know that sometime it will come to an end.
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Reviewed By: Kiamia On: March 19, 2004 05:11 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an interesting idea, but lacking in its execution. You need to be more descriptive and flesh out your dialouge more. I found your grammar and spelling less than stellar. A beta would be a good idea. You've portrayed Sesshoumaru, in my opionion, as someone who is rather slow on the uptake. Despite his rather unhealthy obession for Tessaiga he's actually very bright. I think perhaps you're making him a bit too dog like. He's an inuyoukai not a dog. He shows little to no dog-like traits in the manga. He's simply too regal and dignified. Also it's really bothersome to cross reference your other stories to grasps certain aspects of your story. It goes along with the idea of showing your audience rather than telling them. On Kagome I don't feel she's being particularly waton, but either she's loose or she's not. The whole ritualistic materbation pretty much settles makes my decision. Sesshoumaru is not human, or even part human. I find it a bit of a strech that in a magic free world he'd become one. I think I would have preferred him weakened almost comatose. Could have gotten some actual fluff in there. Which goes back too the need to actually build their relationship. Right now it's based on lust, which isn't a bad thing mind you, and a stressful situation. Smut for the sake of smut is fine. Great even. But in a plot driven story..you need well plot
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Reviewed By: Inari-foxgoddess(not logged on AGAIN!) On: March 18, 2004 19:42 PST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like your writing style! it leaves stuff to the reader. update soon!
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Reviewed By: BRL On: March 17, 2004 18:15 PST
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Doing bad thing to them? "Bad", like *how*, exactly? Bad as in..pain? Humiliation? Torture, even? Or "Bad", as in...*evil chuckle and pervy grin* baaaaaaaaddddddddd? Lol! Okay, moment over! Anyhow, yet another outstanding chapter! ~~Black Rose Lady~~ red_flame204@hotmail.com
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Title: GAH!
Reviewed By: Chipmunk_knumpihC [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2004 16:59 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE! I've been reading this on AFF.net and it's the best story ever please get the next chapter up asap! *Does a happy dance, trips over her dogs falling flat on her face* Ow...*Gets up, hands Jeffs a cookie and a muffin and dances some more until she's roughly dragged off by men in white coats muttering about escapees.*
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Reviewed By: InsaneAuthoress [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2004 13:36 PST
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Crap i was not expecting Hitler that crazy son of a bitch to show up! Hows is Sess supposed to fight him?! Well when you think about it give him a machine gun and he'll do some damage! I mean everyone in this area can't love Hitler! This was one of your most interesting chapters! Especially when sess was having those nightmares that were going backwards. Oh another thing im interested in is that Sess read the History book right? So he won't be so brainless about the crazy son of a bitch Hitler! Well like i said Great Chapter!
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Reviewed By: Nagasaki [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2004 22:45 PST
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loved the chapters.
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Reviewed By: 12blue12)logged off On: March 16, 2004 20:20 PST
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holy crap hitler thats interesting didn't see that comeingwo wow and i thought it couldn't get any worse boy kag is eother gonna freak out (thats wat i wud do if i was taken by hitlewr the crazy bastard) or be all self confident for fluffers and be scared shettles inside both just suit me fine just o wonder how sessy will reacy wen learns of hitler? well coolie update and plz update soon cya!
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Reviewed By: yami bakura On: March 16, 2004 20:06 PST
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I like your story progression. But I think the next chapter on Nazis is just a little to daring and over the top. This is a very touchy subject to write about. Other than that keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: MysticAngel On: March 16, 2004 18:05 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really loving the progression of this story. There haven't been any odd moments of OOCness with the characters because you understood the ways they should behave in certain situations. Sometimes the background info you give for the new worlds gets too involved and confusing, but it's not much of a problem to be concerned with - just one criticism; be careful with editing. (I know it's difficult to write and post as quick as we -your humble readers- would like you to AND edit perfectly as well, just a suggestion though!) Anywho, keep up the good work, very spiffy story! :)
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Reviewed By: BlueGreen On: March 14, 2004 20:48 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*shifts nervously* hmmm...i kinda didnt want sess and kagomes's first time together to be so...is 'wild' the right word? im hoping that the 2nd time will be a little calmer. ANYWAY. enough of that. i LOVE this story!! its so kawaii! :D great job
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