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Title: Great Story
Reviewed By: wrathchylde [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2004 10:27 CDT
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Great story. You've got better grammaatical skill than 90% of the stories I read here and it's so refreshing. I love the idea of Rin being the dominant, perverse, woman of the world. I'll be looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: InsaneAuthoress [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2004 21:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWWW THIS STORY IS AMAZING! And oh so funny! "So funny Sesshomaru's reaction to hearing the term 'Son of a bitch' Or something like that haha i started cracking up! I see no flaws this fic is just plain good so keep it coming!
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Reviewed By: darksqall [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2004 13:41 CDT
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hey pretty good fix UPDATE SOON
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Reviewed By: Skiddy16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2004 23:52 CDT
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that's so cute. yur writing style is so awesome. so does this mean that rin was in teh centre for a while? with teh 84 thing?
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Reviewed By: ME On: April 07, 2004 20:54 CDT
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Great set of chapters!! SO glad you update alot and frequently!! thanks!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Hououza On: April 07, 2004 19:12 CDT
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Excellent chapter! As were the ones before, sorry for the prior lack of reviews, been a hectic couple of weeks. Look forwards to seeing more. Good luck & best wishes, Hououza
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Reviewed By: baf kittie On: April 06, 2004 17:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. I can't wait to see what happens next. Please post this on AFF.net. Lots of peeps would vibe on this if they have not seen it.
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Reviewed By: Mysterious AM On: April 06, 2004 11:48 CDT
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Still doing a very good job! I have to say, though, that instead of offering information in an author's note, if you want to improve with something like that, then you need to work on integrating it with your story. Just writing an author's note is the easier way out, and then you don't have to work harder to make people see everything that you want them to. Make things a little more obvious. Because I had no clue about the time frame and such until you mentioned it. LOL, sorry, I am very big on people improving their work any way that they can, so I try hard to offer advice. ^_^ Hopefully nothing will be taken wrong because I really do love your story. I'm enjoying it a lot, and I hope you continue to post so much. Other than what I said before, you do a very good job. Your grammar and spelling are good, and your characters aren't OOC. And I LOVE the parts where Inuyasha is totally clueless about kagome! I enjoy those so much! I can't believe he took her shopping. Where in the world did he get the money? And Sess his credit card. It would be interesting if you showed us more about their lives before the center.
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Reviewed By: skiddy16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2004 20:15 CDT
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hey it's like the eps. update soon.
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2004 16:24 CDT
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Thanks for the author's note. That made it much more clear. I liked the way you had the fight sequence in Chapter 13 parallel the canon for Inu Yasha and Kagome's chunk.
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Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2004 18:08 CDT
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This is excellent! I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next. One thing wasn't clear to me, though. Just how long had Inu Yasha and Sess been in captivity? I had gotten the impression it was more than 50 years but they seemed OK with credit cards and cars (I know they had cars 50 years ago). Also, how did Inu Yasha come up with the cash or credit to buy stuff for Kagome? They just seemed to come up to speed awfully quickly.
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Reviewed By: Skiddy16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2004 14:31 CDT
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this story is realli kool. original. so seriously how old is rin caus its kinda weird im imagining ehr to be liek 12 but she has a dildo ans stuff so okay clear that up for me please.
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Reviewed By: mona On: April 04, 2004 09:38 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
love it!!!!! oh my god!!!!!! you are so incredibly talented. please update asap
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Reviewed By: mona On: April 04, 2004 09:37 CDT
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Reviewed By: Laura-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2004 05:55 CDT
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wow, this story is getting more and more interesting every chapter you write! Keep writing!
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