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Title: Suggestion
Reviewed By: KomugiStyle On: July 26, 2007 00:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Alright so i read chapter one of your fic. I quite liked it, thats for sure but some things kinda irked me in your writing (just a friendly suggestion). Kekkai.. i felt you overused the word to the point that your ruined the meaning. In general its best not to use Japanese words short of Baka, Hentai, Kawaii and Hoshi because it ruins the english understanding factor. As i have fluency in Japanese, i understand and dont mind the occasional Japanese reference. But to use Kekkai several times over and over in the same paragraph.. i found myself counting the number of times you used it over reading what it said. At points, i skipped over the section cause every sentance had Kekkai in it. Even using barrier in english that many times becomes unnerving to the reader. But, your storyline is refreshing so I would love to continue to read it (so dont worry I dont hate you lol) Just in the future (providing you still write after 2 years went by) please don't abuse words.. especially Japanese ones. Much luv!
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Reviewed By: Tigeris-sakura On: December 17, 2006 03:51 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi again!! It's been awhile and I just finished rereading your story, It is still wonderful to read and I hope that you get the chance to update to tell us what memeries inu-chan is missing. Shin is to cute and I hope that Shin and Kirara have kittens. So onegai shimasu update soon!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Teela [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2006 04:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!!!! I didn't notice you had another story this one is just a great if not better i can't desied...but now you must continue this one too lol ~*~T
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Title: me likey!!
Reviewed By: kitsunenomiko On: June 01, 2006 09:53 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really am enjoying this story!!YOU MAY HAVE THE ENTIRE CAST PLUSHIES!!*gives plushies*YOU CAN ALSO HAVE MY HOMEMADE PROTECTER COOKIES!!They protect you from flames!!You rock!!Can you also read my fic 'The Symphony of Dark Angels?it only has two chapters but it got 2 reviews!!could you try it please?my account is named tempestflame.
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Reviewed By: Tigeris-sakura On: March 22, 2006 00:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi, your story is so cool!!!!! I really enjoy your story and can't wait until the next one. The only thing that bugs me is the unanswered question that Kagome is going to be sacraficed at the end and leaving inu-chan, just like what happened with Sessho. Also I really like Shin and hopes that Kagome gets to keep him. I'll be waiting for the next one!
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Title: A Light Amongst The Darkness
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2006 09:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: Konnichiwa!
Reviewed By: Lady_Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 06:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Konnichiwa *Bow's* onigai, onigai, ONIGGAAAII finish the story I need to know what happens, please continue don't let your fan's suffer... Lady Kagome may Kami blees you and all the ones you hold dear
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Title: Konnichiwa
Reviewed By: Lady_Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2005 07:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Konnichiwa Talilea Sama, *Bows* It is an honnor to read such a great story I love it, I shall continue the other chapters as soon as I am able, I hope and am shore they are just as good, Fare well... Lady Kagome may kami bless you and all the ones you love...
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Reviewed By: parvatilotus nli On: September 15, 2005 16:25 CDT
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beautiful story so far, i cant wait to read more.. :) you are gifted!! ~kat
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Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: March 08, 2005 11:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that was great you made the whait worth it that was a great chapter keep up the great work
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Title: A Light amongst the Darkness
Reviewed By: sailormoon1996 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2004 17:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to say you story is so compleying and so moving that i just couldn't not stop reading it. Please don't let others negitaive comments get the better of you. You are a great writer an one of the few writers who can capture a reader an hold onto them and lead them through the story, and make them believe the are in the story fighting along side the character fighting with them. So please continue to write you beautiful stories for people to enjoy them. An you drawing were great...alot better than i can do.(I can only draw stick figures!)
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Reviewed By: Blademaster On: November 09, 2004 16:05 CST
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Welcome back Tal, I was hoping you didn't just forget about the story or give up. I'm glad you don't care about those flame sending fucks anymore. Keep up the good work. Oh,and what does huggles mean anyway?
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2004 00:34 CST
Comment/Review:
okay, so i've only read up until chapter 5 and i think your work is AWSOME!!! i know i have yet get into eveything but the words and the rythem that you have created surrounding the characters and their motivations and definitions is flawless. i love the idea that someone has finally picked up on the fact that Sesshy has to be the 'ice prince' for a reason. i can't wait to finish reading this and i will let you know what i think of it at the end. :-) great job so far!!!
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Reviewed By: JMarie-Serena On: October 10, 2004 23:10 CDT
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I was talking to Tal and she asked me to tell her readers that she should have the internet back in a montha dn there will be a two chapter update then. She's sorry but that's all she could do!
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Reviewed By: firelord [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2004 11:12 CDT
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why havent you updated yet you have a realy great story going hear i hope thet you update soon
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