| "Captive Heat" Reviews/Comments [ 83 ] |
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2004 00:17 CDT
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Well your spelling has improved a little but you still need help. You need to start putting spaces after your periods and commas. Seperate your dialogue from the descriptive parts of the story because the conversations are confusing to read. Plus it will make your chapters look longer. Think about seperating the character's thoughts too, because sometiems it's hard to tell when they're thinking and not talking. Other than that everything is fine. I don't want you to think that I'm riding you or trying to tell you what to do. These things I'v listed are what YOU need to do to improve your writing. Your stories are good but the spelling and grammar make them look like a 5th grader's work. And thats just being honest, there is no nice way to put that. I wish you luck, and update soon!
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Title: EvilAngel69
Reviewed By: EvilAngel69 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2004 01:08 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATE!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 07, 2004 19:15 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOW BOUT THIS, KAGOME SAYS YES WITH THE EXCEPTION THAT SHE CAN VISIT HER FAMILY WHENEVER SHE WANTS?!?!?
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Reviewed By: MikoMaiden [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2004 11:01 CDT
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Reviewed By: Mezus On: July 05, 2004 11:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There were some spelling mistakes and i got a little bit confused but its a great story! i hope you continue writing and please UPDATE ASAP!!!! tankies! ~ SexyChicklet17 ~
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2004 13:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOOOO THIS IS VERY GOOD PLEASE MAKE MORE
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Reviewed By: MikoMaiden [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2004 10:29 CDT
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Hey all good news! Ive made a whole new site! Distilled Elegane= A Kikyo Shrine. It is through Kikyo's eyes so it is depressing but very touching so come visit and email me your thoughts! http://www.geocities.com/kikyoshinto/ MikoMaiden
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Reviewed By: MikoMaiden [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2004 12:49 CDT
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O ya I just updated my Inu/Kag Mir/Sang site so come visit!Ep clips,music,images you name it!Fancition and FanArt too!Send them in please! ^_^! www.geocities.com/inuyashaandkagome04/index.html
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Reviewed By: MikoMaiden [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2004 12:47 CDT
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I unno how to pronounce yen....I heard it in the 1st movie where Kagome screamed it when she shot Inu Yasha with her arrow to the Goshinkubo tree. :S.Its like just....yen?
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Reviewed By: Biganimefan1 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2004 18:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GOOD BUT HOW DO YOU PRONOUNCE YEN?
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: June 29, 2004 01:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I like the paring but I have to agree with sublimetrickster the story needs more depth. There is so much you could do with this instesd of the "They need her because shes a miko and can help defeat Naraku" plot. I love that plot, but spice it up a bit. I've got ideas right now that I wouldn't mind running by you if you wanted. With that said I have to ask you. How many reviewers have told you to work and your spelling and grammar? Not in just this story but others? You don't seem to be trying even with us begging you to. Please if you don't want to at least prof-read your own work then get an editor! I'm sure someone would be glad to help you! But these mistakes are like road bumps in the story and there are a lot of them. I like the story okay so far really, but please try harder.
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Reviewed By: Doujo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2004 19:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your fic is good! just some grammar mistakes, but I'm not better... anyway, keep it up ;)
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Title: Hey Good News Friends!
Reviewed By: MikoMaiden [MediaMiner Member] On: June 28, 2004 19:04 CDT
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Hello everyone! It is I MikoMaiden heheh!I have a new website with episode clips,movie clips and music and such.So come on.Its a Inu/Ksg shrine and a Mir/Sang shrine! Read the character bios and shit its really cool! Arigato! http://www.geocities.com/inuyashaandkagome04/
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Title: huh
Reviewed By: Konno On: June 28, 2004 17:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh i hate Kagome! its not fair. Two hotties...one cutie...all for her...that sucks...it's just not fair...oh well..i'll get over it. Update please. oh and work on ur grammer.
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Reviewed By: musheesuh On: June 28, 2004 17:06 CDT
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nice.
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