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Reviewed By: PrincessCrakALakin [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 18:36 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok, phew! Bulma doesn't ahve to worry bout goin to the bathroom now with the handcuff on! Haha, that would have been funny though. Can't wait to see what happens next!
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Reviewed By: PrincessCrakALakin [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 18:15 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Trunks, use the force within you! or ki, whatever... Hey, I was wondering, what if Bulma had to go to the bathroom? Vegeta's not really thinking this through... She wakes up and she finds out she handcuffed to the bed, and you know the first thing you have to do after you wake up, go to te bathroom. That must really suck... hehe, guess I have to find out in the next chapter! C'ya!
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Title: Excellent!!
Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 16:36 EDT
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Wow, that chapter was really well-written. I really like the internal struggle being personified like that. And that his first instinct is still to protect his wife and son (though he doesn't want to acknowledge it). Poor Trunks. Nice imagery with the angel mural.
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Reviewed By: JASON E On: May 15, 2005 16:32 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HEY ANOTHER AWESOME CHAPTER.. LIKE ALWAYS. I'M GLAD THE 10S MOTIVATED YOU. ILL BE WAITING FOR YOUR UPDATE. PEACE
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Reviewed By: Raine123 On: May 15, 2005 16:03 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE! RIGHT NOW! MORE MORE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2005 23:55 EDT
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Hey! A new chapter! :) Veeeerry interesting... So Vegeta's going to try to "remake" Trunks. I wonder how that will turn out. Good start though. Well -- from an evil Vegeta's perspective anyway ;) Looking forward to next chapter!
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Title: OMFG!!!
Reviewed By: Jason E On: May 07, 2005 20:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i got a shout out from you. cool. anyway i think i just sh*t in my pants LOL. that last chapter was so...disturbing and dark n issh. well i like it! heh, poor Trunks, that could leave a kid traumatized. n poor bulma, n poor vegeta! n poor me, i have to wait til next chapter! UPDATE!! ill give u a ten to motivate you n make u hurry up n drop ur socializing n write the next awesome chapter. n besides u deserve it
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Title: HOLY FUCK!!
Reviewed By: NSB On: May 07, 2005 18:13 EDT
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o-O HOLY FUCK I cant believe he did that ....shit im just so so ...IN LOVE WITH HIM STILL!!!!! HE'S A PSYCHO!!!!!!!!!!!! But i love Getapooh that way *sighs* Ok so Trunks killed a man...poor baby and Bulma is still handcuffed to the bed what more punishment can she wistand I mean really I know shes mentally strong but damn it'll be a miracle if Vegeta gets some at the end of this story personaly his dick will grow black nuh uh no loving forever but knowing me that rule would last 2 seconds damn him hes so hot.Ok so girl I adored the chappy i was at the edge of my damn seat evil evil ;) UPDATE SOON I WANT MORE!!!!!!!! LATER>:)
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Reviewed By: Subu [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 17:49 EDT
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as i saw you update, i went directly to your story. it is the most dark story i've ever read.i just simply love it. plese keep it this way , well at least for a few more chapters.
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Title: yugiohchick
Reviewed By: yugiohchick [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2005 17:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa... that was... whoa... speechless... Poor trunks(tear) hope it doesn't affect him though... Anyways, I REALLY appreciate the comments, and I'm sorry it took me such a long time, but thanks anyways. I'm sorry to say that i am barely starting to write ch.8, you see, I have to write a research paper, and I have a bundle of exams at school, so It's study! Study! STUDY! Anyways, I'll TRY to make my chapters a bit longer, and i hope you like chapter 8 when it comes out. And please write more, it's sooooooooo goooooood! "yugiohchick"
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Reviewed By: Raine123 On: May 07, 2005 16:45 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MROE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Trisha (i seriously need to register) On: May 07, 2005 16:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG. i dont know what to say. that was so evil. im talking about Vegeta. my god, what's happened to him? i cant wait for your next chapter. that was an awesome chapter, i actually FELT it, if you know what i mean. im trembling in my seat. ahh im gonna have nightmares!!!! all thanks to you and your scary a** fic. lol
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Title: torn
Reviewed By: awesome On: May 04, 2005 18:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When I began to read this, I was in complete shock. I like the way Vegeta is so dark, and evil. Oh, and would you give me any pointers, i myself, am writing a fic. My pen name is 'yugiohchick'. It would be a TREMENDOUS help to me, because sadly, writer's block came for a long visit. Anyhow, i really enjoyed this fic, and i hope it turns out to be great. Oh, and you should make Vegeta have inner battles with himself, that should make it more interesting.
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Reviewed By: Jason E (JE) On: May 03, 2005 17:24 EDT
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now this is what a darn good fanfic is supposed to be! hurry up with the new chapter i want more!!!!
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Title: Torn
Reviewed By: Trisha On: May 03, 2005 00:04 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow too much angst. i like the story very much. i feel sorry for bulma though. i cant believe vegeta did those things to her. and vegeta? whats going on with him? i know he's being controlled but i dont knoe...i knoe bulmas the only one who can stop him, i have a feeling.i hope he chooses his family in the end. well update soon. cant wait for the next chapter. thanks for writing such a good story.
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