| "Himitsu" Reviews/Comments [ 77 ] |
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Title: himetsu
Reviewed By: ~anz~ On: June 05, 2006 12:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very intense. You can feel the tension... Goten informing him he knows the truth ~an illusion shattered~ What's left...bingingfood!~ the great pacifier!gotta love it~ ~and Bejita
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Reviewed By: Rourinu On: April 30, 2006 20:31 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*goofy grin* Me love chapter very much so.... I was following this fic from the start at the Yaoi Hotel so long ago... then kinda dropped out of the fandom. Came back though just today to see what people were writing and was delighted to find your story again. I wasn't disappointed either! That was one of THE BEST lemons I've ever read. It actually lasted more than two paragraphs like most fics and was written so well. I eagerly await the next chapter.
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Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2006 21:07 CDT
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Yeah, we're all gonna need a minute here, to get over that one...INTENSE. All the much more so after all the buildup, but even a second reading of this chapter weeks after the first (gods, has it been that long already?) had my nerve-endings smoking the chair! Ouch. This is still so PAINFUL, their coming-together really does hurt, their attraction is fascinating yet so gut-wrenching that I'm still clicking away at times. I love these guys, I love them together, but GODS! Why must they suffer so? Of course I'm enjoying it too, how could I not? You are divine. *grovels for next chapter*
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Reviewed By: anastasiavesperman On: April 19, 2006 05:47 CDT
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I, uh, ack, I can hardly even put words to the way I feel about this story. I guess the highest praise I can give to any story is that it makes me feel like I'm _inside_ the story, not with the characters but _as_ the characters, and this certainly fits the bill. It has been my great pleasure to see your writing blossom over the years.
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Reviewed By: X. Sky On: April 18, 2006 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dear god, these chapters are so intense -- no wonder you had trouble writing this one! Wonderful, as always, and made even more so by the fact that this brutal surrender to their desires didn't end with declarations of eternal love or whatever. "..hate you..." he whispers into my skin. That's absolutely PERFECT.
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Reviewed By: It's Camaro On: April 11, 2006 15:47 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Style of Writing: 10 Spelling: 10 Originality: 10 Enjoyment factor: 1,000,000 HOLY SHIT GIRL! you have outdone yourself. Surely, worth the wait. Can't believe how hot that was. I had to keep wiggling my toes to be sure they were still attached. You're such a Goddess.
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: April 07, 2006 16:31 CDT
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That last part was so beautiful but so sad. I can't even imagine whats going to hapen in the next chapter. What was Vegeta thinking of doing, telling Bulma?I hate to say it but Goku is being a little selfish, has beeen the whole time. If Chi Chi would just given him some maybe this wouldn't of happen... but maybe it would of. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. Thanks
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Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: bdegrees [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2006 16:18 CDT
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Wow. I really feel for the boys, here. I mean, as much as I wanted them to do it, at the same time, I didn't want them to hurt the people they love. This was great. I'm sorry it was hard to write, but it was super easy to read..when I wasn't spacing out and drooling on my keyboard! Can't wait to see the aftermath.
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Title: Himitsu
Reviewed By: (MACCAM) On: April 07, 2006 12:30 CDT
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Holy shit, what a chapter. i can see why you had a hard time writing this chapter. I really like the end result, and your right he's not sorry. I know i wouldn't be ;P. I can't wait to read what will come next. BTW when will goku get his BJ?
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Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 17:24 CST
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Denial will get them nowhere fast, but acceptance won't bring peace. Thanks for the cliffhanger!
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Title: himitsu
Reviewed By: Evil_Vegeta [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 07:32 CST
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Cliffhanger!! How dare you do that to us!! such a cliffhanger...you must me evil :P But the chapter was awesome :D!! and I want more!! I'll be waiting for the next one but puhlease...be quick..I NEED to know what's going to happen !! lovies Evil-Vegeta
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Reviewed By: bdegrees [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2006 02:05 CST
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WOW! I really hope there is an update soon. This story is just amazing. The subtle turn of Goku's mind is very believeable and that is a little scary. I love your visual descriptions. This story is just awesome. One of my all time favorites, no question. Keep up the great work!
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Reviewed By: Webtester01 (not logged in) On: March 02, 2006 03:01 CST
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I wonder how deep Goku's passion for Vegeta really goes. They are both Saiyans and like species are attracted to each other on some level. Will this thing that both saiyans have burn out quickly like a candle burning at both ends? What has Goten been up to with his sneaking out? I look forward to your next up date.
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Reviewed By: RowinaDequina16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2006 20:15 CST
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You've captured the aftermath of infidelity perfectly. Goku's thoughts reflect his incomprehension of his own acts, his impression of being dissociated from his own body (when he sees his hands as unfamiliar, when he jumps V before he's even conscious of the act), his guilt and his feeling that it's impossible to hide. His honesty with himself is touching; his failure to be honest with Chi Chi is distressing, because he does realize that it's only a matter of time. Will he be strong and tell her? And V--obviously not being honest with himself, thinking he could just come over and say "it's over", especially to G in the bathtub...Their kiss, their closeness was intense, as usual--they are going to spontaneously combust. And they kiss with their eyes open! Superb chapter--bravo, and many thanks.
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Title: chapter 15
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy (not loggeg in) On: February 27, 2006 10:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
absolutely fantastic from the very beginning the tension that you created has slowly but steadily been buiding up, in small increments at first but then taking bolder leaps and bounds so intense and thick that its almost tangible, reaching its peak and climaxing in this remarkable chapter. You are a very talented writer I love the way you depict the characters the trace of pain in Vegeta's voice as he almost begs Goku not to let him continue, fearing the aftermath of what could happen if they crossed that point yet desiring it even more. The interactions between Bulma and Goku are very sweet, I'm quite perplexed at the situation between them two yet immensely fascinated, for his desire for Bulma seems to go beyond lust yet at the same time his passion for Vegeta seems more violently intense. I liked the way you depict how Goku has discovered his own heaven, yet not in the conventional christian sense, however even when in the midst of this heaven with vegeta it seemed permeated with the blazing heat of hell, whether its pure or impure i'm not sure, maybe it doesn't matter. The scene where Vegeta discovered Goku kissing Bulma I questioned whether he's angry because of the fact Goku was kissing his wife or jealous because he was not kissing him. He wants Him but he doesn't want Him to want his wife. The image of the melting snow turning to water as the heat between them increased was just beautiful. I'm also wondering about Goten where exactly is he sneaking off to? does he have a secret too is he sneaking off to taste the sin of a certain lavender haired Prince lol just seemed a bit suspicous as his absense is never explained. I look forward to your next update, this has been a brilliant story. p.s. Goku's characterization is dynamite his internal monologues are so insightful and entertaining
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