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| "Himitsu" Reviews/Comments [ 77 ] | | Pages (6): [ 1 2 3 4 5 6 › » ] | Reviewed By: renangel On: May 04, 2010 23:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know if it's just me, or if it's because you did such a great job writing from Goku's pov (which you did!) but I find Goku incredibly and disappointingly selfish in this fic. Now, this is not to say that you didn't do a great job writing this fic, because you did, but all of Goku's reasonings etc just came across as very childish and made him a somewhat unlikeable character for me. Part of being an adult is to know when you should/shouldn't go for things. Only little children demand and take and think they have a right to do so despite anyone else's say. Now, this isn't to say that Vegeta didn't have some faults here as well, but he tried a whole hell of a lot harder than Goku did. For Goku to keep coming back when Vegita explicitly asked him not to was just wrong.
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Cloudface On: June 17, 2008 00:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE LOVE LOVE how you just metaphorically equated their fighting to sex. HAHAHA...I busted out laughing when you said that when they release a ki blast, it was like cumming. Hahaha. I didn't think I would enjoy this story as much as I am.
| Title: Oops, foget again
Reviewed By: xixixi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 11:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry about that! I have to say I am a bit over exited! Can I ask Bejita has marked Goku, will that bear any effect in future? Keep up! I am your new fan!
| Reviewed By: xixixi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 11:00 CST
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I forgot to rate the novel in my previous comments! Here is it. BTW, I love chapter 15! it is so intensely beatiful even if they did not even have sex! The mix of anger and desire, god they are made for each other!
| Title: I love the story very very much!!
Reviewed By: xixixi11 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2007 10:53 CST
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OMG! First it is hot! if I do have nose bleeding, I am dying of blood drain now. My mum monitor my temperature recently because I am trying for a baby. My temperature is insanely high these couple of days. I dare not tell her it is your story. Second, it is angst. I feel chest pain for both Bejita and Goku. I love both of them so much I want them to be happy. I personally don't think Buma will have big problem. She loves others before Bejita and will love others if she has to if Bejita leave her. But Goku and Bejita are each other's destiny. No one in the universe can replace each other. (that is my believe hehe,) The only thing is going to kill them is their only guilt! I don't know how you going to cure them from that. I feel so strangled for them. You are a hell of writer you make me lost appetite to eat and drink and interest to work and going out, only thinking of the angst of the two suffering. Please please continue, you are my tormentor.
| Reviewed By: topbear On: November 03, 2007 11:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it soo much! this is striking! Please continue, fast! I am beggingyou!
| Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 00:58 CDT
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that last review was a mistake, sorry about that. Mediaminer
| Title: ch 1
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 00:55 CDT
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Interesting start, I like the way Vegeta interacts with his employees, very funny, especially the stalker assistant. I was slightly dissappointed with the entrance of Chi chi, only because I thought she would act more stronger to Vegeta, when she arrived I couldn't really distinguish her from the assistant, she seemed a bit timid, I guess I imagined Chi chi as someone who would just waltz right in to his office, or give a bold knock on his door. Bulma's new place seems very suspicious, its not haunted is it? lol I wonder why she fell out with her parents? And what will her first day at work be like? Also what type of company does Vegeta run, is it the same industry as Capsule corp, are they rivals?
| Title: Himitsu
Reviewed By: SofiaSon (again...) On: October 06, 2006 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was pretty sad and angsty how it ended. Vegeta let her feel guilty, probabaly so he didn't have to face his own shame. It is messed up, but it seems to workout for the best. Or as good as it can get. The ending does demand a sequel, but I think that you should leave the story as it is. It's perfect. It was also very funny when Goku came to Vegeta's place and burned down all of his expensive stuff. You manage to incorperate every feeling in this story. Like 'Bejita Unattached', you made this one very characteristic and heated. Sexually and emotionally. I really do like your work. As everyone else implied, this story must have been hard to write, but as good as you are, I don't think that there is one fic you can't pull off. It isn't just mindless sex with you. It's always something more, always something at the end of each chapter that must leave even you wanting more. You must have been compelled to write this, not by reviewers, but by the expressive talent you possess. I think I've written enough. Alas.
| Title: Himitsu
Reviewed By: SofiaSon (don't feel like signing in) On: October 06, 2006 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry, I just don't see how it is that Goku has never had a BJ before! Chichi is such a prude, like she isn't human. If I were his wife I would give him a BJ every day, without question. Goku is way too hot not to be desired, but you twisted it in such a way, this story is ingenious. It seems true though, he really only probably had it twice in the series, and his wife is a bitch.... so you made it perfect. You got his life right down to a science. You're so talented, it's almost too good to be true. I love this story, it reminds me of a story I read called, "The Houseguest". It is different though, definitely original. All of your stories are good, so it should come as no surprise. I am so giddy with excitement right now, you don't even know. You portray them so well, it almost as if you created the idea for DBZ/GT yaoi. You are the queen of threesomes, yaois, and out right hot sex!!!!! Keep it up! 100,000,000,000 out of ten! (Too bad I can't do that...)
| Reviewed By: Nikhol Keyes [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2006 01:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I know this may sound crazy, but I check back for updates on this story 2-3 times a day (when a computer is available, though). I'm going nuts waiting for the next installment, as this story has really grabbed a hold of me. I apologize for not reviewing earlier, or on each individual chapter as I read them. I began reading on June 6th, unaware that this fic was in progress and had just been updated. I tend to try and avoid incomplete works, as I tend to lose some sleep when waiting for new chapters, to put it mildly. Needless to say, the plotline you have going for you in Himitsu is very original and... difficult to pull-off, I'd say. As far as I'm concerned, you're going into uncharted territory here, and not just with Goku's sexual discovery. I think it's more of your presentation of and setup - how everything has been playing out seems realistic, and is going at a nice, even pace to boot. I know I didn't delve into specifics, but I wanted to at least make sure you were aware of others who were enjoying this story. I await your next update!
| Reviewed By: Nikhol Keyes On: July 09, 2006 00:52 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I know this may sound crazy, but I check back for updates on this story 2-3 times a day (when a computer is available, though). I'm going nuts waiting for the next installment, as this story has really grabbed a hold of me. I apologize for not reviewing earlier, or on each individual chapter as I read them. I began reading on June 6th, unaware that this fic was in progress and had just been updated. I tend to try and avoid incomplete works, as I tend to lose some sleep when waiting for new chapters, to put it mildly. Needless to say, the plotline you have going for you in Himitsu is very original and... difficult to pull-off, I'd say. As far as I'm concerned, you're going into unchartered territory here, and not just with Goku's sexual discovery. I think it's more of your presentation of and setup - how everything has been playing out seems realistic, and is going at a nice, even pace to boot. I know I didn't delve into specifics, but I wanted to at least make sure you were aware of others who were enjoying this story. I await your next update!
| Reviewed By: NikholKeyes On: July 09, 2006 00:52 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I know this may sound crazy, but I check back for updates on this story 2-3 times a day (when a computer is available, though). I'm going nuts waiting for the next installment, as this story has really grabbed a hold of me. I apologize for not reviewing earlier, or on each individual chapter as I read them. I began reading on June 6th, unaware that this fic was in progress and had just been updated. I tend to try and avoid incomplete works, as I tend to lose some sleep when waiting for new chapters, to put it mildly. Needless to say, the plotline you have going for you in Himitsu is very original and... difficult to pull-off, I'd say. As far as I'm concerned, you're going into unchartered territory here, and not just with Goku's sexual discovery. I think it's more of your presentation of and setup - how everything has been playing out seems realistic, and is going at a nice, even pace to boot. I know I didn't delve into specifics, but I wanted to at least make sure you were aware of others who were enjoying this story. I await your next update!
| Title: All praise is deserved!
Reviewed By: Zogeta On: June 12, 2006 05:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't care if this sounds gushy or over the top. I only just found the mediaminer version, I've been reading on the Hideaway until now. You're the reason I got into fanfiction when I read "Bejita Unattached" so long ago. You are an incredible writer with a gift for every emotion and for spilling the heart of the characters on the page. And you've made the characters so three dimensional and intense, it makes for both brilliant and emotionally testing reading. A part of me wants Goku and Bejita together, another part knows that that it would be unfair to Bulma and Chichi. There is no easy way out and I'm dying to see what you do with the ending. Maybe something open-ended, maybe forgiveness...I'm very excited to see the end, but sad for it to end at all. The sex scenes, the angst, the all-encompassing pain Bejita feels as he's caught in the middle...it never ceases to make my heart do funny twists in my chest. You are an incredible, wonderful author breathing fresh life into fanfiction, and fiction in general. Please keep up the amazing work and I hope you are never stuck for ideas. You rock, Rena-sama! From a very early fangirl, Zogeta
| Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: June 06, 2006 18:59 CDT
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That was intense. I don't even want to know how bad Vegeta is feeling with Bulma apologising when she really hasn't done anything that terrible. This chapter more than any showed how alone Goku really feels, and that was touching. I also felt that it really captured how torn Vegeta is, between his love for Bulma and his desire for Goku. But then the whole triagnle gets even more messed up because Bulma does hold feelings for Goku and Goku holds feelings for Bulma. I don't know how your going to work it all out (if it can be) but somehow I know you will! Thanks
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