| "I'm On The Outside" Reviews/Comments [ 117 ] |
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Reviewed By: ~Maggie~ On: August 23, 2005 01:32 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ark! I'm only on chapter nine but--but I don't know if I can go on! I'm in love with their friendship and I don't want to see them go through that pain....You immedietly had me hooked to this story from the beginning. I love the shy Inuyasha and the kind eyed Kagome and how they were brought together. Every litte chapter as they grew brought a smile to my face and some parts had me gasp. Lol--especially when he was like "When did you get those?!" That really happened to you huh? *pats* I don't think you've made Kikyo overly pycho ((some people go all out)) and I thought everyone was pretty in character so foo on those people who tell you otherwise ^^ I think my favorite chapter so far was the 8 ((at the club)) Let me tell ya hun, Inuyasha and Kagome dancing? That was incrediably hott!! ^^ And though I really want them to be together I'm glad Kagome brought them back to their senses before they did something that would have changed their world completely ((because we all know they would have!!)) I love this story and I'll just tell myself to shut up and read it ((they're going to be together, aren't they?!)) Your story is absolutely adorable and the first I've been able to read all the way through 'till this point instead of just searching for good parts ((Hehe)) Lovely writing and much love to ya! ^^
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Title: Thats a good end
Reviewed By: Crimson Warrior On: August 22, 2005 21:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great and when you start making a sequle I will try to be one of the first to read and review I hope. Oh and are you going to have Kag or Inu cheat on each other but then they get back together. Cause I'm a Kags/inu, mir/san, and sess/rin fan so if you make a prologue just say if it will be the same character parings as it was in this one.
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Reviewed By: Hybrid Kitten (formally known as Sangokirara711 but MM.org won't let me log in) On: August 22, 2005 13:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm happy you updated finally ^^ I really enjoy this story! And you mentioned having an artists' block, ne? Man, you made a good recovery. Everytime I get an artists' block... I don't always come back soo good ^^;; I can' t wait t read the sequel ^^
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Title: The Best Story
Reviewed By: llxsunsetxll [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 20:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOHH MY GOD!!!!!That was the best story I have every read. I almost cryed at the end, it was so sad. I cant wait until the sequal is here. Is it almost done? But anyway great job on the story. I hope that the sequal is even better!! :))
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Reviewed By: ameera4eva [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2005 08:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Love this story please up date when you get a chance
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Reviewed By: dudekiller [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2005 15:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
great job. update ASAP.
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Reviewed By: Knock-on-Wood [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is wonderful! That last chapter was amazing, and coupled with that song...it was so hot! :D Great job! I'm glad that you updated! So, please just update again soon when you can! I'll be waiting!
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Title: Lemonade is always nice!
Reviewed By: InuGrrrl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2005 12:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love this story & that was a yummy lemon :P
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Reviewed By: cyberdemon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2005 13:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
where's the next chapter? This is a great story but i REALLY need a new chapter soon.
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Title: GREAT!!
Reviewed By: twingirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2005 19:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's a great story. It's got drama but it's also got it's funny side too. I love reading it!!! Please update soon...
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Reviewed By: Night_Miko (not logged in) On: August 04, 2005 22:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
Those were some enjoyable chapters you have there. I cannot wait to read more in the near future. Keep writing and I'll keep reading and reviewing.
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Title: Staind lover
Reviewed By: Drysdale On: August 04, 2005 00:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just wanted to tell you that I myself am a huge fan of Staind and i apprieciate the fact that someone out there also gets a kick out of Inu yasha. be sure to buy the new album Chapter V in stores Aug 9th if you're really devoted like I am.
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Title: The story.
Reviewed By: Crimson Warrior On: August 03, 2005 21:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good but to bad it has to end soon.
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Reviewed By: godie6790 to lazy 2 sign in On: August 03, 2005 15:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG! i love your story! plz plz plz update soon. so cute!
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Title: ffrg review (chapter 1)
Reviewed By: angelica incarnate [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2005 13:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hi and thanks for submitting your piece for review. You requested a review of chapter one and I am unclear on whether you mean chapter 1 or the prologue, so I've read through both. I am, as a rule, simply not usually a fan of AU fics--that being said, I didn't mind what I've read so far of your piece. You give decently solid reasons for your characterization and have been wonderfully creative with the younger versions of InuYasha and Kagome. The plot is cute enough, though I'm not sure where you're going with it. It sounds like the main point of the story is for these two to find each other and I'm not saying that is a bad plot, it's just somewhat cliché. Perhaps in later chapters you've found a way to spice it up some. Grammar and spelling are good in these two chapters and I'm not seeing any problems with run-ons or fragments, so good for you and your beta, if you have one, you work well together (or you do an excellent job with your own editing). My biggest suggestion would be to find a way to get into a flashback without saying ~flashback~ -- it's rather unprofessional looking. You have a pleasant writing style and good, strong voice to your piece. Usually, I would suggest that since you've got a solid piece, you try inserting your own characters. But in your case, if you remove the story from the blended universe you've created, I think you would lose some of the heart of it. Thanks again for sharing your piece and best of luck to you as you continue to wri |
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