| "Cannot Be Broken" Reviews/Comments [ 117 ] |
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Reviewed By: patchcat (nsi) On: June 16, 2005 17:49 EDT
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You have a very interesting story here with an original plotline. Your grammar is fairly good and there are no glaring spelling problems; however, there are a few times -- even within a single sentence -- when you switch from past to present tense and back. That tends to throw some people out of the moment. I would suggest finding a reliable person to beta for you so that they can catch these errors. It would definately enhance the overall effect of this work. Aside from that, this is a highly enjoyable tale. The action flows nicely, the sexual tension between Inuyasha and Kagome can be cut with a knife, and, as I said, the plotline is one of the more original ones I've seen lately. I look forward to seeing were you go from here and finding out what, exactly, is happening to our favorite miko. Not to mention what Dog-boy does to the wolf with very bad timing. ^_~ Until we met again, Patch
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Reviewed By: MeefMonster On: June 15, 2005 17:22 EDT
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Ahh!! Koga has such bad timing *wholoops him over the head with a pair of socks!* anyway..good story!
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Reviewed By: KhayenRose On: June 15, 2005 06:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
At first I doubted that I would like this story, however after reading the first few chapters I was hooked! I look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the great writing!
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Reviewed By: linxlynks (not signed in) On: June 15, 2005 01:37 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read the next chapter. :)
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Title: just had to add this
Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 01:29 EDT
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p.s. the end of the chap was HoT. @_@ P.P.S. i had to do a double take when i read your thanx for my review. shux, it's nuthin'. any time!
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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2005 01:15 EDT
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i love that you are using sango and miro as mini-mentors. that's definitely what kag and inu need. GUIDANCE! boy are they a subborn pair. oh well. if you threw them together in blinding love too fast, the story would be over wouldn't it. we don't want that. can't wait 'till the next chap. ja. ~_*
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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2005 23:50 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the fact that your story actually has a great active plot, instead of the typical fall in love, break up, and repeat b.s.! you have a very unique storyline, and i am definitely not bored. i find myself skipping over lines and sometimes even paragraphs in stories that just can't hold my attention. this fic has no worries in that aspect. please continue with this fic. i look almost everyday to see if you have updloaded a new chap. this is one of my favorites. =P
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Reviewed By: EAP On: June 11, 2005 02:26 EDT
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You gave me quite a shock, mentioning me before the chapter and all. I'm glad you liked my review, you deserve every word of praise you get. You are so sweet to say that too, but there is no WAY you look forward to my puny reviews as much as I look forward to your magnificent chapters. And what a chapter this was! Now everything is kind of out in the open, and they know they are not really enemies. I really liked how you explained it from both sides, it can be really hard to briefly recap the story and not be repetitive, but you did an excellent job keeping it interesting and flowing. I can't wait to see what happens next, I hope you update again soon!
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Reviewed By: Alex458 On: June 10, 2005 13:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Absolutely love this story! Update Soon!
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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2005 18:11 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*rubs hands together in utter delight 'cuz of the evil cliffy* that was an entertaining chap if i've ever seen one. will these new revelations just push inu and kag even further apart? poor guys. what can inu say after all of that? oh yeah, and why are kag's powers all of a sudden becoming stronger since she has met inu? what's up wit dat? please update when you have the time.
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Reviewed By: EAP On: June 08, 2005 04:36 EDT
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This is quickly becoming one of my favorite InuYasha stories. Its so good, you're a fantastic story teller. I love how you write everyone, they are so perfect; and the scenes you dream up are truly amazing. I think its a very original plot, and the way you tell it is so much fun to read. I really, really look forward to updates, they brighten my day. Please keep writing, I await more chapters!
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Reviewed By: inu fan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2005 17:11 EDT
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Love the story!!!! But Kagome is making me angry!!! Admit you love Inu gosh darn it!!!! Anyway, update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2005 14:08 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just finished reading the first few chaps and i had to pull myself away to review. i didn't want to wait until the last posted chap. this fic is so good! i haven't found any spelling or grammar errors as of yet, and to me, that is pretty important to the flow of a story. this is probably one of the most original storlines i have ever ran across. i am eager to get back and read the remainder of it. it seems as though you update often, so i'll be looking forward to those new chaps as well. keep up the good work. your story rox.;)
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Reviewed By: FluffyLover7 On: June 06, 2005 12:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Totally love it. Please update.
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Reviewed By: EAP On: June 06, 2005 03:56 EDT
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Wow, now that was hot. That was really good. The end was kind of ominous, is that more plot? This chapter was really emotional, it was written excellently. I love your style, I really think your talented. Please keep updating!
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